Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: ปรับปรุงความชัดเจนและการเรียงประโยค ตัดคำซ้ำ/ผิด และเพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลหรือบรรยายสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อให้รายละเอียด เช่น because, so, for example. ฝึกการใช้คำศัพท์ที่เกี่ยวข้องกับการเดินทางและการมองเห็น (e.g. scenery, landscape, fresh air) และรักษาความยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค.

Ví dụ: I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy the scenery. For example, when I travel to Samcanti I can see the streets, trees and distant hills, and the fresh air makes the journey relaxing.

Gợi ý: ปรับปรุงความสอดคล้องของประโยคและความหมาย แทนการพูดไม่ชัดเจน ให้ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ เช่น Yes, I did / No, I didn’t แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน เช่น ปลายทาง ระยะเวลา สิ่งที่ชอบหรือความทรงจำ ใช้คำเชื่อม (for example, because, and) และคำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง (animals, fresh air, peaceful). จำกัดความยาว 2–3 ประโยคเพื่อความชัดเจน.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we often drove to the countryside where there were many animals and lots of fresh air, and I remember enjoying the peaceful atmosphere.

× I like to sit nearby window because I can see the environment in the street when I When I go to the Samcanti, I can see the air.

✓ I like to sit by the window because I can see the street environment. When I go to Samcanti, I can breathe the fresh air.

The preposition 'nearby' is incorrect before a noun; use 'by' or 'near'. 'Window' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific window in the context. The phrase 'environment in the street' is awkward; 'street environment' or simply 'the street' is more natural. The repeated 'When I' is redundant and the verb phrase 'see the air' is incorrect; 'breathe the fresh air' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestions: use 'by the window', include 'the' before specific nouns, and use natural collocations like 'breathe the fresh air' instead of 'see the air'.

× In the past I went for him with my parents and my family in for him have a lot of animal.

✓ In the past I went camping with my parents and family; there were a lot of animals.

The original sentence uses nonsensical phrases like 'went for him' and 'in for him have a lot of animal'. The correct tense for a past event is simple past: 'went'. To state existence in the past, use 'there were' (past of 'there is/are'). 'Animal' must be plural 'animals'. Also 'camping' is inferred to clarify meaning; if another activity was meant, use the correct noun. Suggestions: use simple past verbs for past events, use 'there were' to indicate existence in the past, and make count nouns plural when referring to more than one.

× It's just a lot fresh air I love Becca I love natural and peaceful

✓ There was just a lot of fresh air. I love nature; I love natural and peaceful places.

'A lot fresh air' is missing 'of' or should be 'a lot of fresh air' or 'lots of fresh air'; here 'There was a lot of fresh air' is natural. 'Becca' appears to be a misspelling of 'nature' or a proper noun; context suggests 'nature'. 'Natural and peaceful' need a noun to modify (e.g., 'places') or rephrase to 'I love nature; I love peaceful places.' Suggestions: use 'a lot of fresh air' or 'lots of fresh air', ensure correct vocabulary ('nature' instead of 'Becca' if that was intended), and pair adjectives with the nouns they modify.