Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve sentence structure and coherence: combine short fragments, correct grammar (remove unnecessary articles, fix punctuation), and use linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'capture' instead of 'take a photos') and keep answer within 3–4 clear sentences. Add a brief reason and a specific example to make it more vivid.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually choose the window seat when I travel, whether by plane or car, because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, on my last flight I watched the coastline stretch beneath us and took several photos to remember it. I find the window seat relaxing and more interesting than the aisle.

Gợi ý: Improve past tense usage and clarity: use consistent past tense forms, avoid repetition, and provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'although') to show contrast and add one concrete example or memory to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: No, I did not go on long journeys with my family when I was a child. Although we sometimes visited my grandparents in the nearby village, we never travelled far. I remember once wanting to go on a long trip to the city, but we stayed at home and visited relatives instead.

× Absolutely, I tend to sit by the window when I travel around the world, especially on the plane and the car. because I want to see the beautiful scenery all the time and I also take a photos of them.

✓ Absolutely, I tend to sit by the window when I travel, especially on planes and in cars, because I want to see the beautiful scenery all the time and I also take photos of it.

Present tense and general usage: 'travel around the world' is awkward when speaking generally; use 'travel'. Use plural 'planes' and 'cars' for general statements and prepositions 'on planes' and 'in cars'. Do not start a sentence with a lowercase 'because'; combine clauses. 'take a photos' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'take photos' or 'take a photo'. 'them' is unclear for 'scenery' (uncountable); use 'it' or omit pronoun. Suggestion: keep present simple for habitual actions and ensure noun–article agreement and correct prepositions.

× Unfortunately, I haven't had any kind of home journey when I was a kid.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have any long trips when I was a kid.

Tense inconsistency: 'haven't had' (present perfect) conflicts with the specific past time 'when I was a kid'; use simple past 'didn't have'. 'home journey' is unnatural; use 'long trips' or 'long journeys'. 'any kind of' is wordy and unnecessary. Suggestion: use simple past for actions tied to a past time and choose natural collocations like 'long trips'.

× I always sit at home during the day.

✓ I always stayed at home during the day.

Tense mismatch: the sentence refers to habitual behavior in the past ('when I was a kid'), so use past tense 'stayed' rather than present 'sit'. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame given (past).

× I just go to my grandparents' home and village, but not long journey to Abrube, but even that time I really wanted to go somewhere far away from my home.

✓ I only went to my grandparents' home and their village; I didn't take long journeys to Abrube, but even then I really wanted to go somewhere far away from home.

Multiple structure problems: verbs must match past timeframe ('went', 'didn't take'). 'just' better as 'only' in past. 'not long journey to Abrube' is ungrammatical—use 'I didn't take long journeys to Abrube' or 'I didn't have long trips to Abrube'. Use consistent connectors and avoid repeating 'but'. 'even that time' better as 'even then'. 'my home' can be 'home' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use past tense consistently, and choose correct verb forms and connectors.