Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 표현을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 답변은 주제문으로 바로 시작하고, supporting detail은 간결하게 하나 또는 두 개만 제시하세요. 예를 들어 ‘a lot of times the scenery’는 부자연스럽고 중복된 표현입니다. 또한 ‘put down the window’는 창문을 내린다는 뜻으로 차나 비행기 맥락에 따라 어색할 수 있으니 ‘open the window’ 또는 ‘open the window slightly’ 등 상황에 맞는 표현을 사용하세요. 연결어(so, because, and) 사용은 괜찮지만 문장을 분리해 명확하게 말하면 더 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy the passing scenery. For example, on train journeys I like watching the countryside, and on flights I sometimes open the window shade a little to feel the sunlight.

Gợi ý: 과거 경험을 말할 때는 시제 일관성을 지키고 구체적인 정보(언제, 얼마나 자주, 누구와)를 제공하세요. 문법적으로 ‘have’ 대신 ‘had’를 사용하고, ‘playing the another country’는 의미가 불분명하므로 고치세요. ‘I usually went to Japan’과 ‘I usually go to the Europe’는 시제가 혼동됩니다. 또한 ‘Europe’ 앞에는 관사 없이 사용합니다. 간결한 문장 2~3개로 구성하고 연결어로 흐름을 잡으세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often took long trips with my family when I was a child. We traveled abroad several times a year, usually to Japan and sometimes to countries in Europe, so I saw a lot of different places.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can enjoy a lot of times the scenery and if I feel unpleasant I can put down the window and I can feel the wind.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can enjoy the scenery many times, and if I feel uncomfortable I can roll down the window and feel the wind.

The phrase 'enjoy a lot of times the scenery' is incorrect word order and uses an awkward quantifier; change to 'enjoy the scenery many times' for natural English. 'Feel unpleasant' is incorrect collocation; use 'feel uncomfortable'. 'Put down the window' is not idiomatic for opening a car/window; use 'roll down the window'. Also remove the repeated modal 'I can' before 'feel the wind' to improve fluency. Suggestions: place adverb/adverbial phrase correctly after the object, choose correct collocations ('feel uncomfortable', 'roll down the window'), and avoid unnecessary repetition of modals.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family.

The student is answering about a past event (as a child), so the present perfect 'have' is wrong; use simple past 'had' to indicate a completed past event. Suggestion: match past time expressions (e.g., 'as a child') with past tense verbs.

× As a child, my family especially like playing the another country and traveling another country.

✓ As a child, my family especially liked visiting other countries and traveling to other countries.

The sentence has wrong tense and incorrect verb choices. 'Like' should be past 'liked' to match 'As a child'. 'Playing the another country' is ungrammatical; use 'visiting other countries' or 'traveling to other countries'. Use 'other' not 'the another'. Suggestion: use correct past tense and common verbs for travel: 'visit' or 'travel to'. Ensure determiners are correct ('other' instead of 'another' with 'countries'). (Selected problem type: Present tense issue was applied because the verb tense did not match the time frame.)

× So I usually went to Japan and I usually go to the Europe so many times.

✓ So I usually went to Japan and I often went to Europe many times.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses and misuses the definite article with 'Europe'. When referring to the continent, do not use 'the' before 'Europe'. Also 'usually go' conflicts with past narrative; use past 'went' consistently. 'So many times' is awkward at sentence end; place 'many times' after the verb phrase or use 'often'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for past stories, remove 'the' before continent names, and use 'often' or place 'many times' appropriately.