Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and small grammatical errors (e.g. "some sort it relaxes me" → "it relaxes me"). Work on sentence variety and correct verb forms ("people that were passing" → "people passing by").

Ví dụ: Yes — I usually look out of the window when I travel. It relaxes me and keeps me entertained because I can see different types of scenery, such as forests and city streets. For example, I enjoy watching villagers going about their daily routines, which gives me a glimpse of local life.

Gợi ý: Correct pronoun and tense errors and tighten the response. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Replace vague phrases like "works as a remembrance" with "helps me remember the trip." Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the window because they help me remember special moments from the journey. For instance, I once photographed a golden sunrise over the hills and later looked at the picture to recall how peaceful the trip felt.

Gợi ý: Make a clear preference statement and avoid self-contradictory or unclear fragments. Organize: state preference, give reasons with specific details, and finish with a brief concluding remark. Correct repetition and unclear endings. Use linking words like "because" and "however."

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the sound of the waves and the sunsets relax me. However, I don't swim because I'm not confident in the water, so I usually enjoy walking along the beach and taking photos instead.

× Yes, every time I travel I tend to look at the window and watch the scenery because some sort it relaxes me and it provides amusement whenever we are traveling because I get to see my surroundings, I get to see different things, so for example nature. I get also to see everyday lives of people that were passing.

✓ Yes, every time I travel I tend to look out of the window and watch the scenery because it relaxes me and provides amusement whenever I am traveling; I get to see my surroundings and different things, for example nature, and I also get to see the everyday lives of people who are passing by.

Multiple pronoun and reference issues: 'some sort it relaxes me' is incorrect and should be 'it relaxes me' (clear pronoun referring to watching scenery). 'we are traveling' should match speaker perspective; 'I am traveling' keeps consistency. 'people that were passing' uses wrong tense and relative pronoun; use 'people who are passing by' or 'people who pass by'. Also 'look at the window' is commonly 'look out of the window'. Improve by using clear pronouns (it/they), consistent subject (I), correct relative pronoun (who), and present progressive for ongoing action when appropriate.

× Yes, sometimes they take photos because it works as a remembrance. So whenever I want to look back at a certain memory during that travel, I get to see those or I get to relieve those memories while looking at those photos that I took.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos because they serve as reminders. So whenever I want to look back at a memory from that trip, I can see them and relive those moments while looking at the photos I took.

Pronoun and noun agreement errors: 'they take photos' incorrectly uses 'they' as subject; the speaker should use 'I take photos'. 'it works as a remembrance' uses singular 'it' and awkward noun; use 'they serve as reminders'. 'during that travel' is unnatural; use 'from that trip'. 'get to relieve those memories' uses 'relieve' instead of 'relive'. Fix by matching subject pronoun to the speaker, ensuring plural/singular agreement, choosing correct verbs ('relive'), and using natural collocations ('reminders', 'trip').

× I actually prefer to see ironically I don't know how to swim but whenever we go to beaches it tends to relax me the way the sound of the waves relaxes me.

✓ I actually prefer the sea; ironically, I don't know how to swim, but whenever we go to the beach it relaxes me because the sound of the waves is calming.

Run-on sentence and incorrect conjunctions/phrasing: The original mixes ideas without proper punctuation or connectors. 'prefer to see' is incorrect collocation; use 'prefer the sea'. 'beaches' should be singular 'the beach' for general preference, and 'it tends to relax me the way the sound of the waves relaxes me' is repetitive. Improve by splitting clauses, using appropriate connectors (semicolon, commas), and choosing natural expressions ('calming', 'prefer the sea').

× And also I like looking at sunsets but not swimming because I I could get drowned. I really want.

✓ I also like watching sunsets but not swimming because I could drown. I really don't want to.

Several sentence-structure and word-choice errors: 'I I' is a typo. 'could get drowned' is incorrect passive phrasing; use 'could drown'. The fragment 'I really want.' lacks an object and contradicts previous clause; context implies 'I really don't want to' or 'I really don't want to swim.' Fix by removing repetition, using active verb 'drown', and completing the fragment to clarify meaning.