Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答をもっと直接にし、文法と語彙の誤りを直してください。例えば現在と過去の対比を明確に示し、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。リンク語（however, but, so）を適切に使い、文を2～3文にまとめて自然に聞こえるようにしてください。発音で混同しやすい単語（window, smartphone, train）を確認し、流暢さを高めるために短い練習文を繰り返しましょう。

Ví dụ: I used to enjoy looking out of the train windows when I was a child. However, these days I usually look at my smartphone during journeys, so I rarely watch the scenery anymore.

Gợi ý: 主題文を明確にして冗長さを取り除き、文のつながりを自然にしてください。具体的な例（どのような山や空の特徴か）を加えると内容が豊かになります。繋ぎ言葉（especially, because, for example）を使って理由や例をつなぎ、同じ語の繰り返し（it is, I want）を避けましょう。発音や流暢さのために一文ごとに区切って練習してください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos through the car window, especially when we pass mountain ranges or wide open skies. For example, I like to capture the changing clouds over a valley because they create dramatic light.

Gợi ý: 意思表示をはっきりさせ、比較の構造を明確に述べてください。『sea changes』や『mountains are steady』といった自然で正しい表現を使い、単語の重複を避けてください。理由を具体的に説明し、接続詞（because, whereas, while）で対比を示すと説得力が増します。発音（sea, still, mountain）と語順の練習も有効です。

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because it changes constantly with the tides and weather. Whereas mountains tend to look more or less the same, the sea always feels more lively and unpredictable.

× When I was a child I used to see scenery through the the windows from the basswood trains.

✓ When I was a child, I used to see the scenery through the windows from the baswood trains.

The sentence has past-tense narration which is appropriate, but contains a repetition 'the the' and a likely misspelling 'basswood' that should be 'baswood' or another intended noun; also 'scenery' usually takes the definite article 'the' when referring to specific views. Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, correct spelling, and include 'the' before scenery.

× But recently I have smartphones so I I always watch smartphone unfortunately.

✓ But recently I have a smartphone, so I always watch it, unfortunately.

This sentence mixes present perfect 'have' with incorrect noun forms and a duplicated pronoun 'I I'. The noun 'smartphone' needs the indefinite article 'a' when singular. Use the object pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'smartphone'. Place a comma before 'so' to join clauses and include 'unfortunately' at the end. Suggestion: fix article usage, remove duplicate 'I', and use appropriate pronoun.

× Yes, I really like to take a photo outside of this car's window, especially in mountains or there are broad skies.

✓ Yes, I really like to take a photo outside this car's window, especially in the mountains or when there are wide skies.

'Outside of' can be simplified to 'outside' in this context. Use the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' when speaking generally about a mountain scene. 'There are broad skies' is awkward; 'when there are wide skies' or 'when the sky is wide' is more natural. Also change 'broad' to 'wide' which is more commonly used for sky. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'of', add 'the' before plural place nouns, and choose natural adjective for 'sky'.

× It is, it is really beautiful, so I want to take a picture of it.

✓ It is really beautiful, so I want to take a picture of it.

The repetition 'It is, it is' is redundant. The present-tense description is appropriate. Remove duplicate phrase and keep a single comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition for clarity and fluency.

× I prefer sea because sea sea changed a lot from time to time.

✓ I prefer the sea because the sea changes a lot from time to time.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'sea' when talking about the sea in general. The sentence mixes past and habitual meaning; use present simple 'changes' to express habitual or characteristic change 'from time to time'. Remove duplicated 'sea'. Suggestion: add 'the', remove repetition, and use present simple for habitual actions.

× On the other hand, Montezuma still still and not changed.

✓ On the other hand, Montezuma is still and has not changed.

There is a duplicated word 'still'. To describe a current state, use 'is still' and to indicate lack of change up to now use present perfect 'has not changed'. Also include 'is' before 'still'. Suggestion: remove duplication, add linking verb, and use present perfect for an action/state continuing to present.

× It is more.

✓ It is more peaceful.

'It is more.' is incomplete because 'more' needs a comparison or an adjective to modify. The intended meaning seems to be that Montezuma is 'more' (than the sea) in some quality—likely 'still' or 'peaceful'. Provide a suitable adjective such as 'peaceful' or 'stable'. Suggestion: complete the comparative by adding the adjective being compared.