Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear references (e.g. 'like Kadri'), and reduce repetition. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word to connect them. Aim for more precise vocabulary (e.g. 'I enjoy looking at the scenery' rather than 'look outside of the window').

Ví dụ: I usually look out of the window when I travel, because I enjoy seeing the lush greenery and mountains. For example, I often take photos with my phone to keep those memories, and later I review them to remember the trip.

Gợi ý: Make the answer grammatically correct and concise. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail (how often, what you post). Avoid filler phrases and unclear expressions ('falling hard over here', 'lash greenish').

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the view outside the car window because it is one of my hobbies. I usually post the best pictures of green landscapes and mountains on my Instagram stories after a trip.

Gợi ý: Give a direct preference sentence, then support it with two clear reasons. Use correct vocabulary ('mountains' not 'mountaining'; 'trekking' not 'tracking'). Avoid trailing off; finish the thought. Use linking words like 'because' and 'while' appropriately.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy water sports such as scuba diving and jet skiing. While mountain activities like trekking can be strenuous, I find sea-based activities more relaxing and exciting.

× Well, like Kadri, look outside of the window because I love to see the lush greenery and the mountain on my way.

✓ Well, like Kadri, I look out of the window because I love to see the lush greenery and the mountains on my way.

Original sentence misuses 'look outside of the window' and misses subject 'I'. Use 'I look out of the window' for correct subject-verb order and 'out of' or 'out' with 'the window' is the normal prepositional phrase. Also pluralize 'mountain' to 'mountains' to match general reference to scenery.

× And whenever I travel either by bus or car, I always capture that moment with my mobile phone so that I can keep the memory and I can see that memory.

✓ Whenever I travel by bus or car, I always capture the moment with my mobile phone so I can keep and revisit the memory.

Remove redundant 'either' and extra 'that' for concision; use 'capture the moment' (idiomatic) and 'revisit the memory' rather than repeating 'I can see that memory'. Streamline clauses: 'so I can' is sufficient instead of 'so that I can' plus repetition.

× Because in fact, it is one of my hobby to clicking the picture of the view, uh, outside of the car window because I love to do that.

✓ In fact, it is one of my hobbies to click pictures of the view outside the car window because I love doing it.

Use plural 'hobbies' for 'one of my' (article error / singular-plural), correct verb forms: 'to click' (infinitive) not 'to clicking', and 'click pictures' or 'take pictures' is idiomatic. Remove redundant 'because' and 'uh' for clarity.

× I am falling hard over here with that hobby because I love to post the lash greenish and mountain on my Instagram stories as well.

✓ I am really into that hobby because I love to post the lush greenery and mountains on my Instagram stories as well.

'Falling hard over here with that hobby' is nonstandard; use 'am really into that hobby' (present continuous idiomatic). Correct adjectives: 'lush greenery' and plural 'mountains'. 'Lash greenish' is incorrect word choice and spelling.

× Well, I prefer sea to the mountain because I love to do, uh, water activities like I love to do scuba diving and jet skiing.

✓ Well, I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy water activities like scuba diving and jet skiing.

Use definite article 'the' with 'sea' and plural 'mountains' when comparing general categories. Remove redundant 'I love to do' and use 'enjoy' for variety and concision. Also remove filler 'uh'.

× While in mountaining, the activities in the mountain are very harsh, like tracking and.

✓ Mountain activities are more strenuous, such as trekking and hiking.

'Mountaining' is incorrect; use 'mountain activities' or 'in the mountains'. 'Tracking' is wrong word choice; use 'trekking' or 'hiking'. Complete the list and use 'more strenuous' (comparative) rather than 'very harsh' for natural phrase. Ensure sentence is complete.