Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

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Part 1

Giám khảo

Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

Thí sinh

I never look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus because I was little. I will be dizzy for the car and if I look out the window I will feel dizzy and it's not good.

Giám khảo

Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?

Thí sinh

I sometimes I will take photos of the scenery outside the car window umm because I like taking photo for the scenery scenery and if the scenery is very beautiful I will take photo for for them.

Giám khảo

Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

Thí sinh

I prefer the mountain because, you know, I'm living in Guangdong. It's a province in South of China. It's next to the ocean, so the sea is familiar to me. So I prefer to the mountain and the mountain is climb. The mountain is good for our health.

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Tổng: 6.0Trôi chảy và mạch lạc: 6.0Phát âm: 6.0Ngữ pháp: 5.5Từ vựng: 6.0

Part 1

Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

Điểm: 45.0

Gợi ý: 你的回答有明确的观点,但语法和表达不够自然,句子结构混乱且有重复。建议:1) 用一到两句直接陈述观点(肯定或否定)。2) 接着用一到两句给出具体原因并用连接词(because, so, therefore)衔接。3) 避免不必要的重复,注意时态一致并修正语法(如 'I was little' 应为现在影响用现在时或说明从小起用 'since childhood')。具体练习:写并大声朗读3个不同理由的简短回答,每个回答控制在2–4句内。

Ví dụ: I usually avoid looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I get motion sickness. Since childhood, seeing moving scenery makes me feel dizzy, so I prefer to focus on my phone or close my eyes to feel better.

Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?

Điểm: 55.0

Gợi ý: 回答内容能传达意思,但有许多语气词和重复,句子不够简洁。建议:1) 开头用一短句直接回答(Yes/No 或 Sometimes)。2) 用连接词(because, when, if)给出具体原因或条件。3) 删除填充词(umm)和重复词,注意复数和动词形式(photos, take photos of)。练习:用三种情况造句(常常、有时、很少),每句不超过3句并使用连接词。

Ví dụ: I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I enjoy capturing interesting views. If the landscape looks particularly beautiful, I’ll snap a few pictures to remember it.

Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?

Điểm: 60.0

Gợi ý: 观点明确,给出了一些背景信息,但表达冗长且有语法错误与不自然的插入语(you know)。建议:1) 开门见山表达偏好(I prefer the mountains)。2) 用一到两句给出具体原因并用连接词(because, since)。3) 避免不必要背景信息或把它压缩成一句,并修正语法(e.g. 'the mountain is climb' 应为 'hiking in the mountains' 或 'mountains are good for health')。练习:准备两个简短的对比句,说明为什么喜欢山而非海,使用连接词并保持句子自然流畅。

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because they offer peaceful hiking opportunities and fresh air. Although I grew up near the sea in Guangdong and enjoy it, hiking in the mountains feels healthier and more relaxing to me.

Ngữ pháp

Past tense issue

× I never look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus because I was little.

✓ I never looked out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus because I was little.

句子中描述的是过去的习惯(“我小时候”),应使用过去时。原句用现在时“look”与时间状语“because I was little”不一致。建议将动词改为过去式“looked”,使时态一致。

Future tense issue

× I will be dizzy for the car and if I look out the window I will feel dizzy and it's not good.

✓ I get dizzy in cars, and if I look out the window I feel dizzy, so it's not good.

原句混用了将来时和一般现在时来表达一般性的身体反应。描述经常或习惯性的情况应使用一般现在时(例如“get/feel dizzy”)。此外,短语“be dizzy for the car”不自然,应改为“get dizzy in cars”。建议用一般现在时来表达经常发生的情况。

Verb + -ing form

× I sometimes I will take photos of the scenery outside the car window umm because I like taking photo for the scenery scenery and if the scenery is very beautiful I will take photo for for them.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like taking photos of scenery, and if the scenery is very beautiful I will take photos.

问题有几点:1) 表示习惯性动作不应使用“will”而用一般现在时(对应Grammar Problem Type 6),因此应将“I will take”改为“I take”。2) “taking photo”应为复数“taking photos”或“taking a photo”;及物结构应为“take photos of”而不是“take photo for”。3) 重复单词和多余词汇需删除。建议使用“I take photos of the scenery”来表达习惯性动作,并注意复数与介词搭配。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× I prefer the mountain because, you know, I'm living in Guangdong.

✓ I prefer the mountains because, you know, I live in Guangdong.

“prefer the mountain”在比较一般偏好时应使用复数“mountains”或不加定冠词;此外,“I'm living in Guangdong”虽然语法可行,但更自然的是一般现在时“I live in Guangdong”表示长期居住。建议将“the mountain”改为“the mountains”或“mountains”,并用一般现在时。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× It's a province in South of China.

✓ It's a province in the south of China.

固定搭配为“in the south of China”或更常见的“in southern China”。缺少定冠词“the”使表达不自然。建议使用“in the south of China”或“in southern China”。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× It's next to the ocean, so the sea is familiar to me.

✓ It's next to the ocean, so the sea is familiar to me.

该句语法基本正确,但可改为更地道的表达“it's near the sea”或“I'm familiar with the sea”。当前句子可接受,故仅建议更自然表达。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× So I prefer to the mountain and the mountain is climb.

✓ So I prefer the mountains, and climbing mountains is good for our health.

原句问题:1) “prefer to the mountain”中介词“to”不需要,正确结构为“prefer the mountains”或“prefer mountains”。2) “the mountain is climb”中“climb”用法错误,应使用动名词“climbing”或被动结构,但这里想表达“爬山有益健康”,应为“climbing mountains is good for our health”。建议删除不必要的“to”,并用“climbing mountains”表示动作作为主语。

Từ vựng trọng tâm

Beautiful— Attractive
Good— Fine; Virtuous; Well-behaved; Right; Capable
Little— Short; Young; Brief; Minor
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