Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法と表現の自然さを改善するとより高得点になります。例えば「I'm living」は現在形の「I live」に直し、冗長な表現（"so around my house" と "there are" の繰り返し）を整理すると流暢さが増します。また、1文目にトピック文、2文目で具体例や理由を簡潔に述べる構成を心がけてください。

Ví dụ: I live in the countryside, so there are not many tall buildings near my home. Instead, the area is mostly made up of low-rise houses and is very peaceful and quiet, which I really enjoy.

Gợi ý: 内容は伝わりますが、不自然な語彙（"sounding sceneries"）や文法誤りが見られます。"I'm not a big fan of" は使えて良い表現ですが、代わりに何を撮るかを具体的に述べ、接続詞で理由を明確にすると良いです。

Ví dụ: I don't usually photograph buildings because I'm not particularly interested in them. Instead, I prefer taking pictures of natural landscapes, such as mountains and rivers, because they look more peaceful and photogenic.

Gợi ý: 良い意見ですが、発音の繰り返し（"I'm I'm"）や口語表現（"wanna"）は公式な場では避けた方が良いです。理由をもう少し具体的にし、接続語（"however", "because"）を使って構成を整えましょう。

Ví dụ: I'm not very interested in modern skyscrapers; however, I would love to visit traditional buildings such as the temples and shrines in Kyoto because their calm atmosphere helps me relax and appreciate historical architecture.

Gợi ý: 返答は理由を述べていますが、同じ表現の繰り返し（"if I live in I live on the top of there", "I'm scared of I'm scared of"）や冗長さが目立ちます。より明確で簡潔な構成にして、1〜2文で理由と結果を述べましょう。また"scared of height"は自然な表現に直してください。

Ví dụ: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I'm afraid of heights and worry about how difficult it would be to evacuate from the top floors, so I prefer a low-rise house where I feel safer.

× There aren't many tall buildings near my house because I'm living in the countryside and surrounded by nature.

✓ There aren't many tall buildings near my house because I live in the countryside and am surrounded by nature.

'I'm living' suggests a temporary action; use simple present 'I live' for a permanent situation. Also 'surrounded by nature' needs an explicit verb; 'am surrounded' is correct in present tense.

× So around my house there are a lot of low rise houses and very peaceful and quiet.

✓ So around my house there are a lot of low-rise houses, and it is very peaceful and quiet.

Missing hyphen in 'low-rise' and sentence lacks a subject for 'very peaceful and quiet.' Add 'it is' to describe the area. Also add a comma before the conjunction.

× I don't often take pictures of buildings because I'm not a big fan of buildings.

✓ I don't often take pictures of buildings because I'm not a big fan of them.

Repetition of 'buildings' is natural but 'of buildings' can be replaced with the pronoun 'of them.' Use correct pronoun to avoid redundancy.

× Instead, I like to see sounding sceneries like mountains or rivers.

✓ Instead, I like to see scenic landscapes like mountains or rivers.

'Sounding sceneries' is incorrect collocation. Use 'scenic landscapes' or 'scenery.' 'Scenery' is uncountable, so 'sceneries' is wrong.

× I prefer them rather than buildings.

✓ I prefer them to buildings.

The correct structure is 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A rather than B.' Use 'prefer them to buildings.'

× I'm not very interested in tall buildings in cities, but I'm I'm a big fan of traditional buildings like temples and shrines in Kyoto because I can relax there and feel safer, so I really wanna go.

✓ I'm not very interested in tall city buildings, but I am a big fan of traditional buildings like temples and shrines in Kyoto because I can relax there and feel safe, so I really want to go.

Remove duplicate 'I'm.' Use 'tall city buildings' or 'tall buildings in cities.' 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to.' Use 'feel safe' instead of 'feel safer' unless comparing to something. Maintain formal register.

× I don't want to live in a tall building because if I live in I live on the top of there, it is very difficult for me to evacuate from there.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building because if I lived at the top, it would be very difficult for me to evacuate.

Conditional needs correct form: use second conditional 'if I lived... it would be...' Remove redundant phrases 'I live in I live' and awkward 'on the top of there.' Use 'at the top' and avoid repeating 'there.'

× So also I'm scared of I'm scared of height.

✓ Also, I'm scared of heights.

Avoid repetition 'I'm scared of I'm scared of.' Use plural 'heights' in the expression 'scared of heights.'

× So I want to live in a smaller house, low rise house to feel safe.

✓ So I want to live in a smaller, low-rise house to feel safe.

Combine adjectives correctly with hyphen: 'low-rise.' Use singular 'house' once and place adjectives in correct order: 'smaller, low-rise house.'