Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct phrases like “quite few” to “quite a few” and “increased the several tall buildings” to a clearer description of the view.

Ví dụ: Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, my street is lined with apartment and office towers, and there is a large shopping mall just two blocks away, so the skyline looks lively and modern.

Gợi ý: Use correct verb tenses and word choices, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear statement, then give specific reasons and one example. Replace “specially” with “especially”, and use present perfect or simple present consistently.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when I travel. I enjoy both modern and historical architecture because each tells a different story; for instance, I took many pictures of a baroque church on my last trip and later shared them on social media to remember the visit.

Gợi ý: Be concise and accurate with articles and word order. Give one clear reason and a specific detail instead of repeating. Correct phrases like “very historical” to “very historic” and avoid redundant time expressions like “in the future” and “once in the future in my life.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic historic landmark. For example, I’ve seen it in many films and photos, but I want to experience the view from the top in person.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar, sentence flow and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then give two clear, specific benefits using linking words. Fix phrases like “at the night” to “at night” and “is provide the comfortable and convenient” to “provides comfort and convenience.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, especially because the night views of the city are beautiful. In addition, tall buildings often provide better security systems and convenient facilities such as gyms and elevators, which makes daily life easier.

× Well, there are quite few tall buildings close to me where I live since I live in the city.

✓ Well, there are quite a few tall buildings close to me where I live since I live in the city.

Missing indefinite quantifier 'a' before 'few' causes incorrect plural expression. Use 'a few' to indicate a small number of countable items. Suggestion: say 'a few' when you mean some; use 'few' (without 'a') to emphasize scarcity.

× Well, my neighborhood has a high apartment and office towers as well as a shopping mall near to me.

✓ Well, my neighborhood has tall apartment and office towers as well as a shopping mall near me.

Use 'tall' (adjective) instead of 'high' for buildings; 'near to me' is unnatural—use 'near me'. Also plural agreement: 'apartment and office towers' is acceptable but 'tall apartment and office towers' sounds natural. Suggestion: use 'tall' + 'near me'.

× Moreover, the view from my window increased the several tall buildings, which makes the area feel really lively and modern.

✓ Moreover, the view from my window includes the several tall buildings, which makes the area feel really lively and modern.

Verb 'increased' is wrong; context needs 'includes' to indicate what the view contains. Also 'the several tall buildings' is awkward; you can use 'several tall buildings' or 'the tall buildings'. Chosen correction keeps 'the several' but typically 'several tall buildings' is preferred. Suggestion: use 'includes' or 'shows' and remove unnecessary 'the'.

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings, specially whenever I travel.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially whenever I travel.

Misspelling: 'specially' vs 'especially'. 'Especially' is correct to emphasize frequency. Suggestion: use 'especially' when highlighting something common or particular.

× I find both modern architecture and old historical architecture fantastic, so I took photos of that.

✓ I find both modern architecture and old historical architecture fantastic, so I take photos of them.

Tense and pronoun agreement: 'find' is present, so use present tense 'take' not past 'took'. Also 'that' is singular and vague; use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'both architectures'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense if describing a habitual action and match pronoun number.

× Moreover, I shared these photos on the social media because it is the great way to remember the places you have visited until now.

✓ Moreover, I share these photos on social media because it is a great way to remember the places you have visited so far.

Use present tense 'share' for habitual action rather than past 'shared' if the student means they regularly do this. 'the social media' is incorrect—use 'social media' without article. 'the great way' should be 'a great way'. 'until now' is awkward; 'so far' is natural. Suggestion: use correct articles and idiomatic time expressions.

× Yes, I would like to visit Eiffel Tower in the future which is located in Paris.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in the future, which is located in Paris.

Landmarks usually take the definite article 'the' (the Eiffel Tower). Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is located in Paris'. Suggestion: use 'the' with famous monuments.

× I find it very historical and iconic landmark and it is more special to see it in person.

✓ I find it a very historical and iconic landmark, and it is especially special to see it in person.

Missing article before 'very historical and iconic landmark'—use 'a'. 'More special' is comparative but unnecessary; 'especially special' or simply 'especially' is better. Suggestion: include 'a' before singular nouns and avoid awkward comparatives like 'more special'.

× Moreover, it has appeared in many films and also photos.

✓ Moreover, it has appeared in many films and photos.

Sentence is mostly correct with present perfect 'has appeared'. Remove 'also' which is unnecessary and position 'photos' parallel to 'films'. Suggestion: streamline parallel objects and keep present perfect to denote past instances relevant now.

× So I would like to visit once in the future in my life.

✓ So I would like to visit it once in my life in the future.

Redundant and awkward phrasing 'once in the future in my life'. Better: 'once in my life' or 'someday in the future'. Suggestion: use concise future expressions like 'someday' or 'once in my life'.

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building, especially at the night when the city lights are on.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building, especially at night when the city lights are on.

Use 'at night' (no article) instead of 'at the night'. Suggestion: omit 'the' with time-of-day expressions like 'at night'.

× It feels very amazing and moreover, the tall building has the more modern security as well as is provide the comfortable and convenient to live.

✓ It feels amazing, and moreover, tall buildings have more modern security and provide comfortable and convenient living.

Multiple issues: 'very amazing' is redundant—'amazing' suffices. 'the tall building has the more modern security' wrong: use plural 'tall buildings' if speaking generally and 'have more modern security'. 'is provide' is ungrammatical; use active 'provide'. 'the comfortable and convenient to live' should be 'comfortable and convenient living' or 'are comfortable and convenient to live in'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement, use correct verb forms, and choose natural collocations.

× So it is more preferable to live rather than living in a small city or a small town.

✓ So it is preferable to live there rather than in a small city or small town.

'More preferable' is incorrect; 'preferable' already expresses comparison. Also parallel structure: 'rather than in a small city or small town' or 'rather than living in a small city or small town'. Suggestion: use 'preferable' or 'more preferable' avoided; maintain parallel prepositional phrases.