Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are many tall par apartment buildings for residents and a seventeen floor school, a hospital, and a police station.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I like the ships and the details. For example, there is a tall white tower near my house. I often take photos when sunrise. I think the light make it look specially and peaceful.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
Yes, I want to visit the weather station in the northeast of my hometown. The station appearance just like a Lantern at night. The lights around the station made it comfortable and wonderful.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
Well, I don't want to live in a tall building because I think tall building radius the reaction of neighborhood and has limited space such as a garden which I want to plant some trees or flowers.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答总体能传达意思但存在语法错误、重复和用词不当(如“par apartment”、“seventeen floor”),句子较冗长且无衔接词。改进要点:1) 修正词汇和语法(par apartment → apartment blocks;seventeen-floor);2) 使用主题句后用一到两句具体举例支持,不要重复信息;3) 使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there are a few apartment blocks, a seventeen-floor school, a hospital and a police station within walking distance.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 内容表达有逻辑但存在词汇和语法错误(如“ships”疑为’shapes’或‘styles’;‘when sunrise’应为‘at sunrise’;‘specially’应为‘special’或‘especially’),句子断裂且过多短句。改进要点:1) 使用准确词汇描述原因(shapes, styles, details);2) 用连接词串联句子;3) 注意时态和搭配(take photos at sunrise; the light makes it look especially peaceful)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I admire their shapes and architectural details. For example, a tall white tower near my house looks especially peaceful at sunrise, so I usually take pictures then.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答明确但有语法和表达问题(appearance → appears; just like a Lantern → like a lantern; tense/agreement errors)。改进要点:1) 用准确的动词和大小写(appears; lantern小写);2) 增加原因或细节说明为什么想去(例如观景、学习)。3) 使用连接词使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit the weather station in the northeast of my hometown because it appears like a lantern at night. The surrounding lights create a warm, peaceful atmosphere and I’m curious to see it up close.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答能表达立场但语言混乱,存在词汇错误和句子结构问题(‘radius the reaction of neighborhood’不明;单复数和搭配问题)。改进要点:1) 明确说明原因并用自然表达(e.g. tall buildings reduce privacy, have limited outdoor space);2) 用一到两条具体支持细节(想种树、需要花园);3) 控制句子长度并用连接词。
Ví dụ: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because they often offer little outdoor space and less privacy. I prefer a house with a garden where I can plant trees and flowers.
× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are many tall par apartment buildings for residents and a seventeen floor school, a hospital, and a police station.
✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are many tall apartment buildings for residents, a seventeen‑storey school, a hospital, and a police station.
错误类型: 1 (Singular and plural issue) 与 22 (Article errors) 及 26 (Sentence structure errors)。说明: 原句中“par apartment”是拼写错误且多余的词;“seventeen floor school”中缺少连字符或改用形容词形式“seventeen‑storey”或“seventeen‑story”来修饰school;列举时需要适当逗号分隔以保持结构清晰。建议: 检查拼写,使用复数名词与正确的形容词结构;列举项之间用逗号分开。
× Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I like the ships and the details.
✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I like the shapes and the details.
错误类型: 8 (Verb + -ing form) 与 22 (Article errors) 实际上这里是词汇选择错误和拼写错误。说明: 原句“ships”应为“shapes”(形状),与拍建筑拍照的语境相符;此处不是动名词结构问题,而是词汇拼写/选择错误。建议: 注意拼写并选择与语境匹配的词(建筑物的“shapes”或“details”)。
× For example, there is a tall white tower near my house. I often take photos when sunrise.
✓ For example, there is a tall white tower near my house. I often take photos at sunrise.
错误类型: 3 (There be issue) 与 6 (Present tense issue)。说明: “when sunrise” 不符合固定搭配,正确用法是“at sunrise”表示在日出时分。建议: 学习并使用固定时间介词短语(at sunrise, in the morning, at noon等)。
× I think the light make it look specially and peaceful.
✓ I think the light makes it look special and peaceful.
错误类型: 2 (Third person singular issue) 与 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs)。说明: 主语“the light”是第三人称单数,谓语应为“makes”而不是“make”;“specially”是副词,语境需用形容词“special”来修饰“look”。建议: 主谓一致,判断用形容词还是副词(look 后通常接形容词)。
× Yes, I want to visit the weather station in the northeast of my hometown. The station appearance just like a Lantern at night.
✓ Yes, I want to visit the weather station in the northeast of my hometown. The station's appearance is just like a lantern at night.
错误类型: 22 (Article errors) 与 26 (Sentence structure errors)。说明: 原句缺少所有格或连系动词,正确形式为“the station's appearance is...”或“The appearance of the station is...”;“Lantern”不应大写,且应为小写“lantern”。建议: 注意所有格或系动词的使用以及名词大小写规则。
× The lights around the station made it comfortable and wonderful.
✓ The lights around the station make it feel comfortable and wonderful.
错误类型: 6 (Present tense issue) 与 9 (Verb in the past participle form)。说明: 句子在描述现在的状态,应使用一般现在时“make”;此外“make it comfortable”在语感上更自然表达为“make it feel comfortable”或“The lights make the station look comfortable and wonderful.” 建议: 根据时间背景选择正确时态,并注意固定搭配(make sth feel / make sth look)。
× Well, I don't want to live in a tall building because I think tall building radius the reaction of neighborhood and has limited space such as a garden which I want to plant some trees or flowers.
✓ Well, I don't want to live in a tall building because I think tall buildings affect the character of the neighbourhood and have limited space, such as a garden where I could plant some trees or flowers.
错误类型: 26 (Sentence structure errors), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice) 与 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors)。说明: 原句“tall building radius the reaction of neighborhood”不通顺,猜测想表达“tall buildings change/affect the neighborhood's character”;主语与谓语需一致(复数 'tall buildings' 与复数动词 'have');“which I want to plant”结构错误,改为“where I could plant” 更自然。建议: 用清晰的动词表达影响(affect/change),保持主谓一致,并用正确的关系词或介词短语(where 引导地点从句)。