Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 質問には答えていますが、文法や語順に誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくくなっています。まず短く明確なトピック文（Yes, there are.）で始め、続けて1〜2文で理由や具体例を述べてください。接続詞（because, so, which）を使って文をつなげ、冗長な語句は避けましょう。発音や流暢さのために文を短めに保つとよいです。

Ví dụ: Yes, there are many tall buildings around my home in Tokyo. Because of the high population density, developers build up instead of out, which makes the city efficient and convenient. I enjoy the skyline, especially at night.

Gợi ý: 内容は伝わりますが、時制や語順の誤り、冗長さが目立ちます。短い主文で答え（Yes, I do.）を示し、次に一つか二つの具体例を理由として述べてください。過去・現在の時制を正しく使い、動詞の形（e.g. 'is built', 'to remember', 'to see details'）を確認しましょう。接続詞（when, because, so）で論理を明確にすると改善されます。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. When a new, state-of-the-art building is completed, I often take photos to remember its shape and design. I especially like close-up shots to see the details of the facade.

Gợi ý: 答えは曖昧で繰り返しや躊躇（uh）が多く、具体性が不足しています。まず訪れたい建物を一つ明確に述べ、その理由や具体的な特徴（建築様式、年代、設計者など）を補足してください。無意味な繰り返しを避け、過去形や完了形の適切な使用（e.g. 'built in the 1990s'）に注意しましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit the Guggenheim Museum in New York because of its unique spiral design by Frank Lloyd Wright. It was built in the 1950s, and I want to see how the interior gallery space works in person.

Gợi ý: 答えは肯定していますが、表現が不自然で冗長です。まず簡潔に理由を述べ（e.g. Yes, because...）、具体的な希望（どの階、どんな眺め）を一つ示しましょう。不要な語句（full level, short time）を削り、'see Mount Fuji from a high floor' のような自然な表現に直してください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy panoramic views. Ideally, I would live on a high floor so I could see Mount Fuji on clear days from my window.

× Yes, there are the large number of buildings around Tokyo so that before it can together with high density and the city achieved high efficiency and convenience.

✓ Yes, there are a large number of buildings around Tokyo, and because of the high density the city has achieved great efficiency and convenience.

The original sentence uses 'the large number' incorrectly; it should be 'a large number' (count noun quantifier). Also word order and articles were incorrect; 'the city achieved' should be 'the city has achieved' to show a present result. Suggestion: use 'a large number of' for many countable items and link clauses with 'and' or 'because'.

× Yes I do, when the new and state-of-the-art building has a built constructed I often take the photo of that to memorize the shape and the design and see detailed.

✓ Yes I do. When a new state-of-the-art building is constructed, I often take photos of it to remember its shape and design and to see details.

The phrase 'has a built constructed' mixes forms; the correct passive is 'is constructed' (past participle used with be). Also 'take the photo of that' is unnatural; use 'take photos of it'. Use 'remember' instead of 'memorize' for familiarity and 'see details' needs 'to'. Suggestion: form passive with 'is/was + past participle' and use appropriate pronouns and infinitives for purpose.

× I really looking forward to.

✓ I am really looking forward to it.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'I am looking forward to' is correct. Also 'to' requires an object like 'it' or a clause. Suggestion: use 'I am looking forward to it' or 'I am looking forward to visiting it'.

× Yes, there is. I want to visit the unique buildings in Tokyo, even in the world I want want to go to the building in New York, the uh, uh, build that bill, which has built in all the 90s.

✓ Yes. I want to visit unique buildings in Tokyo and around the world; I especially want to go to a building in New York that was built in the 1990s.

The original sentence is disfluent and repeats words ('want want') and misuses 'which has built in all the 90s'. Correct structure: use 'that was built in the 1990s' (past passive) and avoid filler words. Suggestion: plan the sentence: main idea, then specific example, using correct passive and decade expression.

× Yes I do, but in short time I want to live in the high level of full level of the building and enjoy the landscape from that.

✓ Yes I do, but only for a short time I want to live on a high floor of the building and enjoy the view from there.

Use of 'in short time' should be 'for a short time'. 'Live in the high level of full level of the building' is incorrect; use 'live on a high floor' and 'enjoy the view from there'. Also 'landscape' is better as 'view' in this context. Suggestion: use 'for a short time' and 'on a high floor' and place modifiers correctly.

× I want to see if Mount Fuji from Tokyo high level of building in Tokyo.

✓ I want to see Mount Fuji from a high floor in Tokyo.

The phrase 'see if Mount Fuji from Tokyo high level of building in Tokyo' misuses 'if' and word order. Use 'see Mount Fuji from a high floor in Tokyo' or 'from a high-rise building in Tokyo'. Suggestion: use 'see [object] from [place]' and include articles for 'a high floor'.