Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles and word order (e.g., "a tall shopping mall").

Ví dụ: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, so the area looks like a modern city. For example, I can see a tall shopping mall and some office towers from my window, which makes me feel proud of my neighborhood.

Gợi ý: Avoid filler words and repetition. Give a direct answer then one clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words like "but," "because," or "for example." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Not often, but I sometimes photograph buildings because I admire their design. For example, I took pictures of a modern library last month because its glass facade and geometric shapes looked impressive.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and correct grammar ("there are several buildings"). Be specific about what attracts you—use precise vocabulary (e.g., "architecture," "lighting," "observation deck") and avoid vague adjectives like "too good."

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because of its remarkable architecture and impressive height. For instance, I want to see the observation deck and admire the building's lighting at night, which I have seen in many photos.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your main reason clearly and support it with a specific detail or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas and correct duplicates like "from from."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because being high up gives me a sense of calm and energy. For example, looking out over the city from a high-rise balcony would help me relax after work and enjoy the view.

× Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home and whenever I open my window, I see many tall buildings in my near and it it looks like a modern city.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home and whenever I open my window, I see many tall buildings near me and it looks like a modern city.

The phrase 'in my near' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'near me' or 'in my neighborhood'. Also there is a duplicated 'it it'. Use 'near me' for natural English and remove the repeated word. Suggestion: replace 'in my near' with 'near me' or 'in my neighborhood' and delete duplicated words.

× And there are also a tall shopping mall near my home.

✓ There is also a tall shopping mall near my home.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'a tall shopping mall' is singular, so use 'There is' not 'There are'. The original used 'are' which is for plural. Suggestion: use 'There is' with singular nouns.

× Not really, but, uh, whenever I see a good and well structured building, I take photos because I like the structure and whenever I see a tall and well structured and beautiful building, I take some photos of that because, uh, I like the design and I.

✓ Not really, but whenever I see a good, well-structured building, I take photos because I like the structure and design.

Run-on and unfinished sentence. 'Well structured' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'well-structured' before a noun. The sentence repeats ideas; condense and finish the thought. Remove filler 'uh' and incomplete ending. Suggestion: combine clauses and finish with a clear object.

× Yeah, yeah, there is a building. There is several building that I would like to visit, but I want to visit the Burj Khalifa building because it is so much well structured and I like the architecture and it is so beautiful because the lighting, the nourishing and the overall beauty is too good.

✓ Yes, there are several buildings that I would like to visit, but I want to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is very well-structured; I like the architecture and it is beautiful because of the lighting, the surroundings, and its overall appearance.

Multiple problems: 'There is several building' should be plural 'There are several buildings' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'So much well structured' is ungrammatical; use 'very well-structured'. 'Burj Khalifa building' is redundant; 'Burj Khalifa' is sufficient. 'Nourishing' is incorrect in context; likely meant 'surroundings' or 'lighting and surroundings'. Suggestion: correct plurality, use 'very well-structured', replace incorrect word with 'surroundings', and avoid redundancy.

× So I want to visit.

✓ So I want to visit it.

Sentence is short and slightly incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies the object (the Burj Khalifa). Tense is present desire, which is fine; include the pronoun to complete the sentence.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because from from the top of the building it gives me a good vibe and makes me feel energetic and I want I love to see the world from the top and a tall building from the top of the building gives me that vibe and I I would love to live in a tall building in future.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because being at the top gives me a good vibe and makes me feel energetic. I love seeing the world from above, and a tall building would give me that feeling. I would love to live in a tall building in the future.

Multiple issues: repeated words ('from from', 'I want I', 'I I') and awkward phrasing. Use conditional 'would like' for preference. 'From the top of the building it gives me' is ungrammatical; instead 'being at the top gives me' or 'the top gives me a good feeling'. Add 'in the future' with the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use clearer subjects, and correct article use ('in the future').