Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
Yes, there is tall building near my house which is my friend's apartment and there is supermarket on the 1st floor. I visit there sometimes to hang out with him.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Not really to be honest, but when I travel overseas I often take photos of buildings because I can enjoy the scenario buildings which is new experience for me so I like them.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
If I had to choose one, I would choose a skyscraper in my hometown near the main station. I visited there sometimes when I was in high school. I could enjoy the scenery.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
Actually, I don't think so because I used to live in a tall apartment on the 12th floor, but I didn't feel comfortable living there.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法ミスと語順の不自然さが目立ちます。冠詞(a/the)や単複数の一致(a tall building)、前置詞(on the first floor)を正しく使う練習をしてください。さらに、主題文→詳細の順で短く分け、リンク表現(for example, because)を使って明瞭にしましょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, there is a tall building near my house. It's my friend's apartment and there is a supermarket on the first floor. I often visit him there to hang out, especially on weekends.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが、語法と語彙選択に改善の余地があります("scenario buildings"は不自然)。文を短くし、接続詞で理由や条件を明確にしましょう。また、具体例(どんな建物か)を一つ加えると説得力が増します。
Ví dụ: Not really. However, when I travel abroad I often photograph buildings because they are new to me. For example, I like taking pictures of historical cathedrals and modern skyscrapers because of their unique designs.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 良い回答ですが、時制と表現を整え、理由を詳しく述べると良いです(なぜそのスカイスクレーパーが特別なのか)。接続語(because, so)を使い、過去の経験と現在の希望を区別してください。
Ví dụ: If I had to choose one, I would visit the skyscraper near the main station in my hometown. I used to go there sometimes in high school, and I enjoyed the view from the observation deck because you can see the whole city.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 明快で直接的な回答ですが、理由をもう少し具体的に述べると説得力が増します(例:風やエレベーターの問題、眺めの有無など)。また、リンク表現(because, for example, so)を使って理由と結果をつなげてください。
Ví dụ: No, I don't think so. I once lived on the 12th floor and I didn't feel comfortable because the elevator was often crowded and I missed having a garden. For example, I prefer living on lower floors where it's easier to go outside quickly.
× Yes, there is tall building near my house which is my friend's apartment and there is supermarket on the 1st floor.
✓ Yes, there is a tall building near my house which is my friend's apartment, and there is a supermarket on the 1st floor.
英語では可算名詞の単数形の前に不定冠詞'a'が必要です。また、複数の節をつなぐ時には適切な句読点(カンマや接続詞)で文を明確にすることが重要です。'there is tall building'は' there is a tall building'とするべきです。さらに'supermarket'も単数可算名詞なので'a supermarket'が正しいです。
× I visit there sometimes to hang out with him.
✓ I visit there sometimes to hang out with him.
この文は文法的に大きな誤りはありませんが、自然な英語では'visit there'より'go there'や'visit him'を使う方がよく、冗長さを避けるために'I go there sometimes to hang out with him'あるいは'I visit him sometimes to hang out'のように表現するとよいです。
× Not really to be honest, but when I travel overseas I often take photos of buildings because I can enjoy the scenario buildings which is new experience for me so I like them.
✓ Not really, to be honest, but when I travel overseas I often take photos of buildings because I can enjoy the scenery of buildings, which is a new experience for me, so I like them.
'scenario'は文脈的に不適切で、正しくは'scenery'(風景)です。また'renew experience'ではなく'a new experience'のように冠詞が必要です。'which is a new experience for me'は非制限用法でカンマが必要です。文を読みやすくするために句読点も追加しました。
× If I had to choose one, I would choose a skyscraper in my hometown near the main station.
✓ If I had to choose one, I would choose a skyscraper in my hometown near the main station.
この仮定法の文は時制と形が正しいため、文法的な訂正は不要です。自然さのためにそのままで問題ありません。
× I visited there sometimes when I was in high school.
✓ I used to visit there sometimes when I was in high school.
'visited there sometimes'は意味は通じますが、過去の習慣を表すには'us ed to'や'used to visit'を使うのが自然です。代わりに'I used to visit there sometimes'や'I used to go there sometimes'が適切です。
× I could enjoy the scenery.
✓ I could enjoy the scenery.
文法的に正しい文ですが、過去の回数や習慣を強調するなら'I could enjoy the scenery there'や'I enjoyed the scenery'のほうが自然です。ここでは文法的な修正は不要です。
× Actually, I don't think so because I used to live in a tall apartment on the 12th floor, but I didn't feel comfortable living there.
✓ Actually, I don't think so because I used to live in a tall apartment on the 12th floor, and I didn't feel comfortable living there.
接続の論理を明確にするため'but'より'and'の方が適切です。'used to live'は過去の習慣を表しており正しいですが、'but I didn't feel comfortable'だと対立の意味になり文脈にやや不自然さが残るため、理由を付け加える接続詞として'and'または'because'がより明確です。