Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
Yes, in my hometown China, there are all buildings around us. Also I live in a tall building.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Yes, sometimes. For example, when I travel in a new city and there are many tall buildings around me, I feel like, oh, that's so luxury. And then I'll take picture and later it's also good memory for me to remember my travel things.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
Yes, TN Tower. Toronto Tower is one of the building I would like to visit even I came here. This is my second year in Canada but I haven't been to the Toronto tower yet and I think Toronto Tower is a landmark in Toronto so I would like to visit in future.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
Yes, I want to live in a tall building. For example, tall building can let me feel more convenient and live in a big city.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答要更直接并注意语法与用词准确。可以先一句明确回应(有/没有),然后用一到两句具体说明位置或类型,同时避免模糊表达(如“all buildings around us”不够自然)。注意冠词和复数形式(例如说“in my hometown in China”或“there are many tall buildings”)。
Ví dụ: Yes. In my hometown in China there are many tall buildings surrounding the neighborhood, and I live in one of them.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 内容可以更具体并用连词使句子更流畅。避免口语化或不正确的搭配(如“that's so luxury”应为“that's so luxurious”或“it looks luxurious”)。用一到两句说明频率、原因和具体场景,句子不宜过长。
Ví dụ: Sometimes. When I visit a new city with striking skyscrapers, I often take photos because they look very impressive and the pictures help me remember the trip.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答需更清晰并修正语法错误。先直接说出建筑名称,然后说明原因与背景,使用连词衔接信息。注意时态和冠词(比如“the CN Tower”,“even I came here”应为“although I have been here for two years”)。
Ví dụ: Yes, the CN Tower. Although I have been living in Canada for two years, I still haven't visited it, and I would like to go because it is an iconic landmark with great city views.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 66.0Gợi ý: 回答要更具体并使用更自然的表达。先作肯定,然后给出一到两条具体理由并用连词连接。注意名词复数和定冠词(例如“tall buildings can make life more convenient in a big city”)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it is often closer to shops and public transport, which makes daily life more convenient in a big city.
× Yes, in my hometown China, there are all buildings around us.
✓ Yes, in my hometown in China, there are buildings all around us.
句子中“are all buildings around us”中“all”位置不当且“buildings”前缺少介词短语,更自然的表达是“buildings all around us”。同时加上“in China”前的介词“in”会使句子完整。建议把“all”放在“around”之前或之后,并加上合适的介词。
× Also I live in a tall building.
✓ Also, I live in a tall building.
此句语法结构正确,但缺少逗号来分隔插入语“Also”。建议加上逗号以提高可读性。
× For example, when I travel in a new city and there are many tall buildings around me, I feel like, oh, that's so luxury.
✓ For example, when I travel in a new city and there are many tall buildings around me, I feel like, "Oh, that's so luxurious."
错误在于形容词形式不正确,“luxury”是名词,需用形容词“luxurious”来描述感受。建议使用形容词形式或副词/短语来修饰感受。
× And then I'll take picture and later it's also good memory for me to remember my travel things.
✓ And then I'll take pictures, and later they are good memories for me to remember my travels.
问题包括可数名词复数(picture -> pictures)、代词指代不明(it's -> they are),以及名词使用不自然(travel things -> my travels / trip memories)。将名词改为复数并使用正确的代词和更自然的短语。
× Yes, TN Tower. Toronto Tower is one of the building I would like to visit even I came here.
✓ Yes, CN Tower. The CN Tower is one of the buildings I would like to visit even though I came here.
原句存在专有名词错误(TN -> CN/Toronto's CN Tower 在多米更常见),以及“one of the building”应为“one of the buildings”。此外“even I came here”不完整,需改为“even though I came here”表示让步。建议使用正确的专有名词并注意名词复数和从句连词。
× This is my second year in Canada but I haven't been to the Toronto tower yet and I think Toronto Tower is a landmark in Toronto so I would like to visit in future.
✓ This is my second year in Canada, but I haven't been to the CN Tower yet. I think the CN Tower is a landmark in Toronto, so I would like to visit it in the future.
句子需要断句并使用冠词“the”来指代特定的建筑(the CN Tower)。“visit in future”不自然,应为“visit it in the future”。建议拆分长句,添加冠词并补全宾语。
× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.
✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building.
句子语法正确,无需改动。保留原句即可。
× For example, tall building can let me feel more convenient and live in a big city.
✓ For example, living in a tall building can make my life more convenient and allow me to live in a big city.
原句中“tall building can let me feel more convenient”搭配错误,应使用“living in a tall building can make my life more convenient”。此外“let me feel more convenient”不自然,需用“make my life more convenient”或“be more convenient for me”。建议将动名词作主语并改用自然搭配。