Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you walk a lot?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do. I work about ten thousand ten thousand in a day in a school day and I love working because it makes me more healthy and relaxed.
Giám khảo
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
Thí sinh
No, I didn't because when I was a child, I loved cooking I loved cooking with my mother or dancing. I'm I was a member of classic call barretts club. So I had I don't I didn't have a chance to
Giám khảo
Why do people like to walk in parks?
Thí sinh
I think there's a lot of beautiful flowers so people can work through seeing them. It may make them more makes them more refreshed and healthier. And
Giám khảo
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
Thí sinh
I'd like to work in Awaji Island because there's a lot of beautiful place which has a lot of flowers and and and seas so I can I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air
Giám khảo
Where did you go for a walk lately?
Thí sinh
I didn't go for work these days actually I'm very busy for studying and and part time jobs so I have no chance to pray out but if I have a chance I would like to do
Do you walk a lot?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 質問には直接答えられていますが、「work」は「walk」の言い間違いと思われます。また、「ten thousand ten thousand」は重複しているため、「about 10,000 steps on a school day」のように簡潔に言いましょう。「healthier and more relaxed」と比較級を正しく使い、具体的な理由を一つ加えると自然です。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I usually walk about 10,000 steps on a school day. I enjoy walking because it helps me stay healthy and feel relaxed.
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: 「No, I didn’t」と質問に答えられていますが、同じ表現の繰り返しや言い直しが多く、最後の文が未完です。子どもの頃に散歩をしなかった理由を、料理やダンスなどから一つ選んで簡潔に説明しましょう。クラブ名がバレエクラブなら、「a ballet club」と言えます。
Ví dụ: No, I didn’t go for walks very often. I usually spent my free time cooking with my mother or going to ballet classes. I enjoyed those activities more than walking.
Why do people like to walk in parks?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 公園の花が人をリフレッシュさせるという理由は適切ですが、「work through」は「walk through」の誤りと思われます。「It may make them more makes them more」の言い直しを避け、「It helps them feel refreshed」のように表現しましょう。最後に文を完結させ、理由を一つ具体的に補足するとよいです。
Ví dụ: I think people enjoy walking in parks because they can see flowers and other greenery. Being surrounded by nature helps them feel refreshed and less stressed. Parks are also a peaceful place to get some exercise.
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 行きたい場所と理由が述べられており、内容は分かりやすいです。「work」は「walk」、「in Awaji Island」は「on Awaji Island」に直しましょう。また、「a lot of beautiful place」は「many beautiful places」などが自然です。「and」の繰り返しを避け、花や海の景色を簡潔に説明してください。
Ví dụ: I’d like to take a long walk on Awaji Island. It has beautiful flowers and lovely coastal scenery, so I could enjoy the fresh sea air. I think it would be a relaxing place to explore on foot.
Where did you go for a walk lately?
Điểm: 30.0Gợi ý: 最近散歩に行っていないことは伝わりますが、「these days」は質問の「最近どこへ行ったか」への答えとして不自然で、「work」「pray out」も「walk」「go out」の誤りと思われます。勉強やアルバイトで忙しいことを理由として述べた後、最近散歩した場所がないことを明確に伝え、文を最後まで完成させましょう。
Ví dụ: I haven’t been for a walk lately because I’ve been busy with my studies and part-time job. I haven’t had much free time to go out. When I get a chance, I’d like to walk somewhere quiet near my home.
× I work about ten thousand ten thousand in a day in a school day and I love working because it makes me more healthy and relaxed.
✓ I walk about ten thousand steps on a school day, and I love walking because it makes me healthier and more relaxed.
Use on with a specific kind of day, such as on a school day. The transcript also appears to contain speech-recognition errors and repetitions; the correction assumes the intended words are walk and steps.
× I think there's a lot of beautiful flowers so people can work through seeing them.
✓ I think there are a lot of beautiful flowers, so people can walk through the park and see them.
Use there are with the plural noun flowers. There is contracts to there's, which is used with a singular noun or an uncountable noun.
× I'd like to work in Awaji Island because there's a lot of beautiful place which has a lot of flowers and and and seas so I can I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air
✓ I'd like to walk on Awaji Island because there are a lot of beautiful places with flowers and sea views, so I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air.
Use on with the name of an island when referring to being on the island. The correction assumes work was intended to be walk.
× I'd like to work in Awaji Island because there's a lot of beautiful place which has a lot of flowers and and and seas so I can I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air
✓ I'd like to walk on Awaji Island because there are a lot of beautiful places with flowers and sea views, so I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air.
Place is countable, and a lot of refers to multiple places here, so use the plural form places.
× I'd like to work in Awaji Island because there's a lot of beautiful place which has a lot of flowers and and and seas so I can I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air
✓ I'd like to walk on Awaji Island because there are a lot of beautiful places with flowers and sea views, so I can enjoy the scenery and fresh air.
Use there are with the plural noun places, rather than there's, which means there is.
× I didn't go for work these days actually I'm very busy for studying and and part time jobs so I have no chance to pray out but if I have a chance I would like to do
✓ I haven't gone for a walk lately. These days, I'm very busy studying and working part-time, so I have no chance to go out. If I have a chance, I'd like to go for a walk.
For an unfinished period of time continuing up to now, such as lately, use the present perfect: haven't gone. The correction assumes work and pray out were intended to be walk and go out.
× I'm very busy for studying and and part time jobs
✓ I'm very busy studying and working part-time.
After busy, use a verb in the -ing form directly. Do not use for before the activity in this structure.