Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then explain your reason more naturally. Avoid repeating “walking” and “my sweat,” and use a clearer linking phrase such as “because” or “as a result.” Also, separate the ideas into shorter sentences and say “walking outdoors causes rashes” instead of “with that walking becomes more of a problem.”

Ví dụ: No, I don’t walk very much. I usually walk inside shopping malls because I’m allergic to my own sweat, which can cause rashes on my face. As a result, walking outdoors is uncomfortable for me, especially in hot weather.

Gợi ý: Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood: say “we lived” and “there was.” The phrase “a non gated community” should be “a non-gated community,” and “space dedicated to walk around” should be “space for walking.” Add a specific result, such as staying indoors or needing to travel to another area.

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t often go outside for walks when I was a child. We lived in a non-gated community, and there wasn’t any space for walking or a nearby park. We had to leave the community to find somewhere pleasant to walk, so I usually stayed indoors.

Gợi ý: Give a complete answer to the question before adding a qualification. Your final sentence is unfinished, and “do work out” should be “work out.” Explain the main benefits of parks, such as fresh air, greenery, space, and relaxation, then mention that hot weather can make walking less enjoyable in the Philippines.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air, greenery, and a more peaceful environment. Parks also provide enough space for exercise or a relaxing stroll. However, in the Philippines, people may avoid walking during the hottest part of the day because the weather can be uncomfortable.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear reason, but do not begin a standalone sentence with “Because.” Combine it with the previous sentence. Use “cooler weather” or “cold winter weather” instead of “a good weather,” and avoid repeating “walk around.” Add one or two specific details about what you would see in Japan.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I’d love to take a long walk in Japan, especially during winter. The cool weather would make it easier for me to walk without sweating and developing rashes. I’d enjoy exploring quiet streets, traditional neighborhoods, and beautiful parks.

Gợi ý: This is a clear and well-developed answer with a relevant personal example. Improve naturalness by saying “air-conditioned malls” and “the only place where I can walk.” Avoid beginning the final sentence with “And”; connect it with “I also enjoy it because…” You could make the answer slightly more direct by stating which mall you visited or what you bought.

Ví dụ: Recently, I went for a walk inside a shopping mall because it was air-conditioned. It’s the only place where I can walk for more than an hour without sweating and developing a rash. I also enjoyed browsing the shops because I was looking for clothes for my newborn baby.

× No, I don't like walking. I only enjoy walking inside malls because I am allergic to my own sweat My sweat causes me rashes on my face and with that walking becomes more of a problem and not beneficial for my health.

✓ No, I don't like walking. I only enjoy walking inside malls because I am allergic to my own sweat. My sweat causes rashes on my face, so walking becomes more of a problem rather than being beneficial for my health.

The original response contains a run-on sentence because two complete sentences are joined without appropriate punctuation. Separating them with a period makes the structure clearer. The phrase rather than being beneficial also creates a more grammatically balanced contrast with becomes more of a problem.

× No, I only used to stay indoors because we live in a non gated community and there is no space dedicated to walk around unlike in some communities that have their own parks.

✓ No, I only used to stay indoors because we lived in a non-gated community and there was no space dedicated to walking around, unlike in some communities that had their own parks.

The question refers to the student's childhood, so the past tense is needed. Change live to lived and is to was. Had is also used to maintain the past-time frame. Use a hyphen in non-gated because it is a compound adjective.

× No, I only used to stay indoors because we live in a non gated community and there is no space dedicated to walk around unlike in some communities that have their own parks.

✓ No, I only used to stay indoors because we lived in a non-gated community and there was no space dedicated to walking around, unlike in some communities that had their own parks.

After dedicated to, the word to is a preposition, not part of an infinitive. Therefore, it must be followed by a gerund, walking, rather than the base form walk.

× We had to go out of our community just to enjoy.

✓ We had to go out of our community just to enjoy walking in a park.

The verb enjoy normally needs a noun or a gerund after it. The original sentence ends without stating what the student wanted to enjoy, so the meaning is incomplete. Add walking in a park to complete the sentence.

× Some people would walk in parks but do work out but if you were to just enjoy

✓ Some people would walk in parks to work out, but others would walk there simply to enjoy themselves.

The original sentence has repeated conjunctions and ends as an incomplete clause. Use to work out to express purpose, and complete the contrast with a full clause beginning with others.

× I'd like to walk around in Japan, especially in winter if given a chance. Because as mentioned, I'm allergic to my own sweat that causes me rashes.

✓ I'd like to walk around in Japan, especially in winter, if I were given the chance. As mentioned, I'm allergic to my own sweat, which causes rashes on my face.

A sentence beginning with Because is normally dependent and should be connected to a main clause. Here, it is clearer to make it a complete sentence beginning with As mentioned. The relative clause is also separated with a comma because it gives additional information.

× A good weather like winter would help me walk around and see the places around without getting allergies.

✓ Good weather, such as the cool weather in winter, would help me walk around and see the surrounding places without having an allergic reaction.

Weather is an uncountable noun when referring to weather in general, so it does not take the indefinite article a. Use good weather instead of a good weather. The phrase such as the cool weather in winter is also more precise.

× Since I am in the Philippines, I only walk inside the malls because it's air conditioned.

✓ Since I am in the Philippines, I only walk inside the malls because they are air-conditioned.

The Philippines is the official name of a country group and requires the definite article the. The noun malls is plural, so the pronoun referring to the malls should be they, and air-conditioned should be hyphenated when used as an adjective.