Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答えは短く直接的で良いですが、表現が不自然で重複があります。より自然な語順・語彙を使い理由を一つ追加すると良いです。例えば「運動が好きではない」「時間がない」など具体的理由を述べ、リンク表現（because, so, therefore）を使って文をつなげてください。発音と流暢さも改善すると高得点につながります。

Ví dụ: No, I don't walk much. I don't enjoy exercise, so I rarely go for walks during the week.

Gợi ý: 良い点は過去の習慣を述べている点ですが、時制や主語・複数形の一致が不自然です。情報を整理して一つのまとまった文と補助文で答えると良いです。繋ぎ言葉（for example, often, usually）を使いながら具体的な場所や感情を短く述べてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked with my mother and our dog, especially in the park. I enjoyed those walks because I liked being outdoors.

Gợi ý: 理由を挙げている点は良いですが、文法（主語と動詞の一致）と語順が不自然です。理由は明確に2点程度に絞り、接続詞（because, and, also）で論理的につなぎ、具体的な説明を加えてください。

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because the environment is relaxing and there are trees and benches where they can rest. Also, parks are family-friendly places where children can play.

Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが同じ表現の繰り返しと時制の混乱があります。条件文（if I had the chance）に合わせて仮定法や意志表現（I would like to）を使い、理由や具体的な描写を一つ加えると良いです。

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the river near my town because the water is very clear and the scenery is peaceful.

Gợi ý: 場所を答えられていて良いですが、施設名の表現や定冠詞の使い方が不自然です。正確な名称（the Imperial Palace）を使い、過去形で簡潔に理由や感想を述べると自然になります。

Ví dụ: I recently went for a walk around the Imperial Palace in Tokyo. The gardens and grounds are beautiful, and I really enjoyed the peaceful atmosphere.

× No I don't. I don't like exercise or any active any activation so I rarely walk every week.

✓ No, I don't. I don't like exercise or any active activities, so I rarely walk during the week.

'any active any activation' is ungrammatical and attempts to express 'active activities' or 'active things' — use the plural noun activities. Also 'rarely walk every week' is awkward; use 'rarely walk during the week' or 'rarely walk each week' to indicate frequency. Add a comma after 'No' and before 'so' to improve sentence flow.

× Yes, I was. When I was a child I walked with my dog and my mother.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I walked with my dog and my mother.

Answering 'Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?' with 'Yes, I was' is incorrect because 'was' does not match the question; use a simple affirmative 'Yes.' Also add a comma after the time clause 'When I was a child' for correct punctuation and natural rhythm.

× My mother and dogs liked walking a lot, so they often followed me and walked a lot, especially park.

✓ My mother and dog liked walking a lot, so they often walked with me, especially in the park.

Use singular 'dog' if the student previously said 'my dog'. 'They' can refer to both mother and dog but 'followed me' is odd; 'walked with me' is more natural. Add the preposition 'in' before 'the park' to indicate location. Remove the repeated 'walked a lot' for clarity.

× It was very fine for me.

✓ It was very nice for me.

'Fine' is not the best collocation here; 'nice' is more natural when describing a positive experience. Keep tense consistent with past narrative.

× I think people likes walking in a relaxed space.

✓ I think people like walking in a relaxed space.

With plural subject 'people', the verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. Maintain simple present tense for general statements.

× And almost park a lot of trees alike and there are benches and a lot of children.

✓ Parks usually have a lot of trees, benches, and many children.

'Almost park a lot of trees alike' is ungrammatical. Use 'Parks usually have' to generalize, and list items with proper nouns: 'a lot of trees, benches, and many children.' Use parallel structure.

× It was relaxed then and motivated.

✓ It felt relaxing and motivating.

'It was relaxed then and motivated' mixes adjective and past time adverb incorrectly. Use 'felt relaxing and motivating' to describe the experience more naturally.

× I want to walk along the river near my town.

✓ I would like to walk along the river near my town.

Question asked 'Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?' — use conditional phrasing 'I would like' to match the hypothetical. 'Want' is present and less polite/inaccurate for hypothetical.

× There are beautiful river.

✓ There is a beautiful river.

Use singular verb 'is' with singular noun 'a beautiful river'. Add the article 'a'. Also 'there are' is for plural; mismatch corrected.

× It was very beautiful and it looks like a lake because it is very clear.

✓ It is very beautiful and looks like a lake because the water is very clear.

Mixing tenses: keep present ('is') because describing the river generally. Replace vague 'it' with 'the water' when saying 'very clear' for clarity.

× I want to walk alongside and see a beautiful river.

✓ I want to walk along it and see the beautiful river.

Use 'walk along it' or 'walk along the river'—'alongside' needs an object (e.g., 'alongside the river'). Add 'the' before 'beautiful river' for specificity.

× I went to the Japanese Emperor's House to walk in Japan.

✓ I went to the Japanese Emperor's residence to walk when I was in Japan.

'Emperor's House' is an odd phrase; 'residence' or 'palace' is more natural. Specify 'when I was in Japan' to avoid repetition and improve clarity.

× In Japan, people can walk in the House of Emperors and this house was very beautiful and I really enjoyed it.

✓ In Japan, people can walk in the Emperor's residence, and it was very beautiful; I really enjoyed it.

Use 'the Emperor's residence' rather than 'House of Emperors'. Maintain consistent article use and combine sentences with proper punctuation. Keep past tense 'was' and add semicolon or conjunction for flow.