Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid filler words (uh, like). Use linking words (for example, however) to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “there was maybe a 15-minute walk” → “it was about a 15-minute walk”; “we used to chat”).

Ví dụ: No, I don't walk much now. When I was in high school, my house was about a 15-minute walk from school, so I walked every morning and afternoon. I usually walked with friends from my neighborhood, which was a pleasant time to chat and relax despite the hot afternoons.

Gợi ý: Clarify tense and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct Yes/No sentence, then give two specific details. Remove unnecessary words and address grammar (e.g., “I would do my homework while she did her work”). Keep sentences shorter and connected with linking words like “after that” or “then.”

Ví dụ: Yes. My school was close to home, so my mother walked me there every day. After school we often went to the nearby park, where I did my homework while my mother did some exercises.

Gợi ý: Structure your answer: give a clear reason, then one or two specific effects with linking words (for example, therefore, because). Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., “surrounded by nature,” “people become less stressed”). Avoid saying “I don’t know the science behind that” — instead use phrases like “research shows” if needed.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because being surrounded by nature helps clear the mind and reduce stress. For example, fresh air and green spaces make you feel calmer and more positive, so many people feel their problems are smaller after a walk.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, especially). Remove fillers and unclear words (“sensei” likely meant “sunrise” or “sunset”). Keep to 3–4 sentences and fix grammar (e.g., “natural scenery,” “I like walking at sunrise”).

Ví dụ: I would like to take a long walk in a natural park, especially at sunrise. The sunrise is beautiful and walking in the morning helps me feel hopeful and refreshed, as if it is a new day.

Gợi ý: Make the timeline clear and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a direct answer (I went to the city center recently), then give two specific details (how you got there, what you did). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (“Sleepy Eye,” “looking people in Iraq”). Use linking words like “so” and “then.”

Ví dụ: Recently I felt restless after staying home for a week, so I took a taxi to the city center and went for a long walk. I spent time window-shopping at several malls and watching people as I walked around.

× So each morning and afternoon after class, I have to walk.

✓ So each morning and afternoon after class, I had to walk.

The student is describing habitual actions in the past (high school), so the present tense 'have to' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had to' to match the time frame.

× And we used to walk with my friends because there are a lot of friends from my neighborhood who go to the same school.

✓ And we used to walk with my friends because there were a lot of friends from my neighborhood who went to the same school.

The context is past habitual action. The verbs 'are' and 'go' are present tense and do not agree with the past context. Use past tense 'were' and 'went' for subject-verb agreement with the past timeframe.

× but still we use like the chat, you know, we just, we used to talk about a lot of things, so it was a good time.

✓ but still we used to chat, you know, we just used to talk about a lot of things, so it was a good time.

The phrase 'use like the chat' is incorrect. For past habitual actions, use 'used to chat' or 'would chat'. This corrects verb form and idiomatic usage.

× Yes, so when I was a child it's the same story.

✓ Yes, so when I was a child it was the same story.

The clause refers to a past period ('when I was a child'), so 'it's' (present) is inconsistent. Change to past 'it was' to match the timeframe.

× My school was close to my home so my mom used to walk me to school every day and not only that but after school we used to walk to the park with my mom and I will do my homework Sir while she do a while she do a work.

✓ My school was close to my home, so my mom used to walk me to school every day, and not only that but after school we used to walk to the park with my mom and I would do my homework while she did some work.

Multiple tense errors: 'I will do' (future) and 'she do' (present) are wrong for past habitual context. Use 'I would do' or 'I used to do' for past habit and 'she did' for past action. Also 'do a work' is unidiomatic; 'did some work' is natural.

× I think people like to walk to parks because, uh, when you are surrounded in nature, it helps you to clear your mind and to, to get Cal to, to be calm, especially if you're distressed or if you have stayed, uh, in, in like in, if you have stayed indoor for a long time, you realize that you're stressed people goes up and with the moment you go out, it's just.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because, when you are surrounded by nature, it helps you to clear your mind and to be calm, especially if you're distressed or if you have stayed indoors for a long time, you realize that you're stressed, but when you go out, it's different.

Incorrect prepositions: 'walk to parks' is less natural than 'walk in parks'. Use 'surrounded by nature' (not 'in'), and 'stayed indoors' (not 'stayed indoor'). Also the sentence structure and verbs were awkward; revised for clarity and correct prepositions.

× people goes up and with the moment you go out, it's just.

✓ people calm down the moment you go out.

'People goes' is incorrect: plural subject requires 'go' or better phrasing 'people calm down'. The original fragment was ungrammatical; corrected to agree in number and to convey the intended meaning.

× it makes you very relaxed and it just makes you you realize that your problems are actually not that big.

✓ it makes you very relaxed and it just makes you realize that your problems are actually not that big.

This sentence largely used present appropriately for a general truth, but had a duplicated 'you'. Removing the extra word fixes the sentence without tense changes.

× Uh, definitely that would be, uh, to the park where there are natural sceneries and especially I like to take a walk during, I think the sensei because it's so beautiful looking at the sky.

✓ Uh, definitely that would be the park where there are natural scenery and especially I like to take a walk during sunrise because it's so beautiful to look at the sky.

Multiple issues: 'that would be, to the park' is awkward—use 'would be the park'. 'Natural sceneries' is uncountable/odd; 'natural scenery' or 'natural scenery spots' is better. 'Sensei' is likely a mispronunciation of 'sunrise'; use 'sunrise'. 'Looking at the sky' needs 'to look at' for infinitive purpose.

× And also in the morning maybe like it just, yeah, it makes it looking when you go out and when you walk and look at the sunrise.

✓ And also in the morning, when you go out and walk and look at the sunrise, it just makes everything look beautiful.

Original phrasing 'it makes it looking' is incorrect. Use a clearer structure: 'it makes everything look' or 'it makes you feel' and place prepositional phrases correctly.

× I stayed for in the house, but for a week I didn't go out so I felt like I need to go out.

✓ I stayed at home, and for a week I didn't go out so I felt like I needed to go out.

Use 'stayed at home' (correct preposition). 'I need' is present; should be 'I needed' to match the past context.

× So, uh, I take a taxi and went into the center of the city and just start walking.

✓ So, I took a taxi and went into the center of the city and just started walking.

Mixed tenses: 'take' and 'start' are present forms inserted into past narration. Use past simple 'took' and 'started' to match 'went' and the past context.

× and looking people in Iraq, yeah.

✓ and looking at people in Iraq, yeah.

'Looking people' is missing the preposition 'at'. Use 'looking at people' for correct verb-preposition collocation.