Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答をもっと明確で簡潔にし、発言中の詰まり言葉（umm, uh）を減らしてください。トピック文で直接「はい」と答え、その後に1〜2の具体的な例をつなぎ語（for example, and）で簡潔に述べると自然です。また動詞の誤り（work→walk）を正してください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite often. For example, I usually walk to my classroom and to the gym, which takes about ten minutes each way.

Gợi ý: 時制の一貫性に注意し、冗長な繰り返し（I used to, I used to）や詰まり言葉を避けてください。まず過去形で簡潔に述べ、その後具体的な状況（誰と、どこで、どのくらいの頻度）を付け加えるとよいです。接続詞（for example, and）を使って流れを良くしましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often went for walks during summer vacation. For example, I used to walk around my neighborhood with my friends almost every afternoon.

Gợi ý: 理由を明確にし、意味の通らない表現（be online）を避けてください。主張→理由の順で一文目にトピック文を置き、二文目で具体的な説明や効果（relaxation, fresh air）を述べ、接続語（because, so）を使うと論理的になります。

Ví dụ: I think people like walking in parks because they offer fresh air and greenery. Because of the trees and open space, people often feel relaxed and less stressed.

Gợi ý: 仮定の問いには条件節を使い（If I had the chance, I would...）と答えると自然です。場所の名前は一度で正確に言い、詳しい理由（scenery, history, length）を付け加えて回答を豊かにしてください。

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along Jing Shu Road. It is a famous, very long street in my city with beautiful trees and historic buildings.

Gợi ý: 過去の出来事なので過去形（went）を使い、文を簡潔に分けてください。原因と結果を明確にするために接続詞（so, because）を適切に使い、繰り返しや文法の誤りを修正しましょう。

Ví dụ: Last weekend I went for a walk around my campus. Because there are many trees and a beautiful park there, the walk helped me relax and unwind.

× Yes, I usually work umm, For example, I usually walk to my uh, classroom and I usually walk to the gym.

✓ Yes, I usually walk. For example, I usually walk to my classroom and to the gym.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' at the start, causing a vocabulary error rather than grammar; however the main grammatical issue is inconsistent and redundant verb usage. Present simple should be used consistently for habitual actions: 'I usually walk.' Removing repetition and correcting the verb makes the sentence grammatically correct and more natural.

× Yes, I usually go outside to have a walk, uh, during the summer vacation.

✓ Yes, I usually went outside to take a walk during summer vacation.

The question asked about childhood (past), so the verb tense should be past. 'Go outside to have a walk' is awkward: use 'went outside to take a walk.' Changing 'usually go' to 'usually went' matches the past context.

× I used to, I used to, uh, walk around my, uh, neighbor, uh, neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I used to walk around my neighborhood with my friends.

Repetition and hesitations should be removed for clarity. 'Used to' correctly expresses a past habitual action; keep the verb 'walk' in base form after 'used to.' Also correct spelling 'neighborhood.'

× Well, I think the reason is that the park is filled with green trees and this makes me, uh, people to, uh, be online and, uh, feel cool.

✓ Well, I think the reason is that the park is filled with green trees, and this makes people feel refreshed and cool.

Original sentence wrongly mixes pronouns 'me' and 'people' and includes 'to be online' which is unrelated. The structure 'makes someone do something' requires an object and bare infinitive: 'makes people feel.' Use 'feel refreshed and cool' for natural expression.

× I think I will go to the. Jing Shu Rd. It is a famous Rd. in my city. The Jingle Rd. is very long.

✓ I think I would go to Jing Shu Road. It is a famous road in my city and it is very long.

The question is hypothetical ('Where would you like... if you had the chance?'), so the conditional 'would' is appropriate rather than simple future 'will.' Also fix punctuation and naming: 'Jing Shu Road' and consistent 'road.' Combine sentences for naturalness.

× Last weekend I go to war for I go for a walk around my campus.

✓ Last weekend I went for a walk around my campus.

The time expression 'Last weekend' requires past tense. Use 'went for a walk' to indicate the past action. Remove extra words 'to war for' which appear to be garbled.

× My campus is there are many trees and beautiful park in my campus so it make me unwind.

✓ My campus has many trees and a beautiful park, so it helps me unwind.

The original mixes sentence fragments and incorrect article usage. Use 'has' to describe possession and 'a beautiful park' with the indefinite article. Subject-verb agreement: 'it helps me unwind' or better 'they help me unwind' depending on focus. Here 'a beautiful park' singular uses 'it helps.' Also remove redundancy 'in my campus.'