Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a brief reason. Use linking words (for example, because or so) and vary vocabulary to sound natural.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk every day — about 3 to 4 kilometres. I do this mainly for fitness because it helps me stay in shape and feel energized throughout the day.

Gợi ý: Use past tense for childhood and provide one clear supporting detail. Avoid filler words and finish the sentence. Connect ideas with linking words like after or because.

Ví dụ: Yes, when I was a child I often walked in the evenings after school. I would run long distances with my friends because it made me feel active and kept me energetic for the rest of the day.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use varied vocabulary. Give one clear reason then expand with a concrete example or consequence. Use linking words such as because or therefore to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they offer open, green space away from crowded homes. For example, parks have trees and fresh air, so walking there feels relaxing and better for exercise.

Gợi ý: Be concise and complete your thoughts. Use conditional phrasing correctly and provide one or two specific details about the place. Avoid trailing off and fill sentences with concrete descriptions.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Marine Trail near my home. The sea views and fresh breeze there are calming and help me relax after a busy week.

Gợi ý: Use past tense and organise your answer: state where you went, who was there, and how it felt. Avoid repetition and filler words. Provide one clear result or feeling and a concise explanation.

Ví dụ: Recently I walked in the park next to a church, where many senior citizens were exercising. I joined them for a short walk, which was refreshing and gave me a chance to chat and connect with others.

× 'I usually prefer to walk regularly.'

✓ 'I usually walk regularly.'

'Prefer' suggests a choice between options and is not needed with 'usually'. Removing prefer makes the sentence natural and consistent in present habitual tense. Suggestion: use simple present for routines.'

× 'I usually walk around 3 to 4 kilometers daily as a part of my physical fitness as well as I feel very refreshed as well as energized.'

✓ 'I usually walk around 3 to 4 kilometers daily as part of my physical fitness, and I feel refreshed and energized.'

'As a part of' is wordy; 'as part of' is correct. 'As well as' is incorrectly repeated and joining clauses with 'as well as' here is awkward; use 'and'. Repeating 'very' then 'as well as energized' is redundant. Suggestion: use concise connectors and parallel adjectives.'

× 'So walking is best for all of us.'

✓ 'So walking is the best exercise for all of us.'

'Is best' is vague and needs an article or noun to be grammatical. Adding 'the best exercise' clarifies comparison and matches subject-verb structure. Suggestion: include a noun after 'best' or rephrase.'

× 'I regularly go out in my evenings after coming from school.'

✓ 'I regularly went out in the evenings after coming home from school.'

Question asked about childhood (past), so the verb should be past tense 'went' not present 'go'. Use 'coming home' rather than 'coming from school' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: match past tense to the time reference.'

× 'I usually walk as well as run for long distances and I feel more active and more, uh, energized for the other for the rest of the day, so it gives.'

✓ 'I usually walk and run long distances, and I feel more active and energized for the rest of the day.'

'As well as' is awkward in listing activities; use 'and'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'more'. 'For the other for the rest of the day' is ungrammatical; use 'for the rest of the day.' Suggestion: keep lists parallel and eliminate fillers.'

× 'Usually people prefer to walk in parks due to the congestion of their home spaces.'

✓ 'People usually prefer to walk in parks because their homes are crowded.'

'Due to' is formal and followed by a noun; 'because' fits causal clause. 'Congestion of their home spaces' is awkward; 'homes are crowded' is natural. Suggestion: use clear causal connectors and natural phrasing.'

× 'Parks are full of greenery and it gives us a proper area for physical fitness as well as walking space.'

✓ 'Parks are full of greenery and give us suitable space for exercise and walking.'

'It gives' incorrectly uses singular pronoun for plural 'parks'; change to 'give'. 'Proper area' is awkward; use 'suitable space' and replace 'physical fitness' with 'exercise.' Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement and use natural collocations.'

× 'If I had a chance to walk for a long distance, I would drive my nearest walkway, which is present at the Marine trail.'

✓ 'If I had the chance to walk a long distance, I would go to the nearest walkway, which is on the Marine Trail.'

Conditional form 'If I had the chance... I would' is fine, but 'drive my nearest walkway' is incorrect; you drive to a place, not drive the walkway. 'Present at' is unnatural; use 'on the Marine Trail.' Suggestion: use correct collocations for movement and prepositions for location.'

× 'It has got lots of scenic views which makes our mind peaceful as well as, uh, refreshed from our busy routines.'

✓ 'It has many scenic views that make the mind peaceful and refreshed from busy routines.'

'Has got' is informal; 'has many' is better. 'Which makes our mind' should be 'that make the mind' to agree with plural 'views'. Remove filler 'uh' and 'as well as' redundancy. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and remove fillers.'

× 'Uh, recently I have been to a church, so there was a park playground with a playground where almost all of the senior citizens were working.'

✓ 'Recently I went to a church; there was a park with a playground where many senior citizens were exercising.'

Mix of present perfect 'have been' with 'recently' is acceptable but 'I went' is clearer for a specific recent visit. 'Park playground with a playground' is redundant; simplify to 'park with a playground'. 'Working' is wrong verb; seniors were 'exercising' or 'walking.' Suggestion: avoid redundancy and choose appropriate verbs.'

× 'So I accompanied them for a walk and it was so, uh, refreshing.'

✓ 'So I walked with them, and it was very refreshing.'

'Accompanied them for a walk' is clumsy; 'walked with them' is natural. Remove filler 'uh' and replace 'so' with 'very' for formal clarity. Suggestion: use simpler verb patterns and avoid fillers.'

× 'And have a social bonding with the people, which with the strangers would to be exact.'

✓ 'I also had social interactions with the people, many of whom were strangers.'

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Have a social bonding' is not natural; use 'had social interactions' or 'bonded socially.' 'Which with the strangers would to be exact' is word-salad; rephrase to 'many of whom were strangers.' Suggestion: restructure sentence to a clear subject-verb-object form.'