Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cần rút gọn câu, sửa lỗi từ vựng (work → walk), cấu trúc và ngữ pháp, và nối ý mạch lạc hơn. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng 2–3 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ (for example, because, so) và tránh các câu ngắt quãng.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite often in my free time. For example, I usually take walks around my neighborhood or visit parks with my family because I enjoy the fresh air and it helps reduce stress. Walking also improves my physical health, so I try to do it several times a week.

Gợi ý: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (thì quá khứ), sửa từ sai (working → walking), tránh lặp từ và chia động từ đúng. Dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thói quen, ví dụ) với liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents often took me to parks for picnics when I was a child. Because of that I developed a habit of walking; during those outings I would walk around the park and take photos while enjoying the fresh air.

Gợi ý: Cần tránh tiếng ừ ờ, dùng từ chính xác (work → walk), tổ chức ý mạch lạc với liên từ (firstly, secondly, finally). Đưa ra các lý do cụ thể và ngắn gọn, mỗi lý do một câu hỗ trợ để không quá dài hoặc lặp lại.

Ví dụ: There are several reasons why people like walking in parks. Firstly, parks offer fresh air and a chance to unwind after a busy day. Secondly, people enjoy the scenery and often take photos to share on social media. Finally, parks are a good place to spend time with loved ones and create memories.

Gợi ý: Sửa từ vựng và ngữ pháp (work → walk; tense agreement; word order). Làm câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, giải thích lý do cụ thể với linking words (because, so) và limit 2–3 câu tổng cộng.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the seaside. I enjoy the sea breeze and peaceful coastal scenery because it helps me relax, and I could also take photos of the beach to share on social media.

Gợi ý: Chỉnh thì quá khứ, từ vựng (work → walk), số ít/ nhiều (conversation → conversations), và rút gọn câu để rõ ràng hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thời lượng, nội dung cuộc trò chuyện, kết quả).

Ví dụ: Last weekend I went for a walk with my friends at a local park near my neighborhood. We walked for about 30 minutes and had a deep conversation about our studies and relationships, which made us feel closer afterward.

× Yes, working is one of my hobbies.

✓ Yes, walking is one of my hobbies.

The student used 'working' instead of 'walking' (wrong word, not article). Use the correct noun 'walking' to express the activity. Suggestion: pay attention to similar words and choose the one that fits context; read the sentence aloud to detect meaning.

× When I have free time, I often go for work around my neighborhoods or go to the parks to have a work with my family or my friend because I want to enjoy the fresh air, improve my physical health and escape from the bustling daily life.

✓ When I have free time, I often go for walks around my neighborhood or go to the park to walk with my family or my friends because I want to enjoy the fresh air, improve my physical health and escape from the bustling daily life.

Prepositions and noun forms were incorrect: use 'go for walks' (fixed phrase), 'around my neighborhood' (singular or 'neighborhoods' only if multiple), 'go to the park' (not 'parks' for a specific outing), and 'walk with my family or my friends'. Also plural 'friends' matches context. Suggestion: learn common collocations (go for a walk/walk around/go to the park) and ensure number agreement.

× Reduce stress.

✓ This helps reduce stress.

Fragment: 'Reduce stress' lacks a subject and verb in context. Connect it to previous clause with a subject ('This' or 'It') and a verb 'helps' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by ensuring each sentence has a subject and predicate.

× When I was a child, my my parents often take me outside to do outdoor activities on the weekends and they usually choose to have picnic in the parks.

✓ When I was a child, my parents often took me outside to do outdoor activities on the weekends and they usually chose to have picnics in the park.

Tense and agreement: narration about the past requires past tense verbs 'took' and 'chose' (ID 5 Past tense, but main issue is agreement of tense). Also 'have picnic' should be 'have picnics' and 'in the parks' better as 'in the park' (or 'in parks'). Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when describing past events and match singular/plural nouns.

× So I have the hobbies of working since then and whenever I have picnic in the parks, I. Always go for work around and takes a photos or enjoy the fresh air.

✓ So I have had the hobby of walking since then and whenever I have a picnic in the park, I always go for a walk and take photos or enjoy the fresh air.

Multiple errors: 'have the hobbies' should be 'have had the hobby' or 'have enjoyed walking' for past-to-present continuity; 'working' -> 'walking'; 'have picnic' -> 'have a picnic'; 'in the parks' -> 'in the park'; 'I. Always' fragment fixed; 'go for work' -> 'go for a walk'; 'takes a photos' -> 'take photos' (verb agreement and plural noun). Suggestion: correct noun forms and subject-verb agreement; use articles 'a picnic', 'a walk'.

× Well, there are several reasons why people like to work in uh, parks.

✓ Well, there are several reasons why people like to walk in parks.

Wrong verb 'work' should be 'walk'. Also article usage: 'in parks' or 'in the park' are both acceptable; here 'in parks' is fine as a general statement. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and collocations.

× Firstly because umm, they will enjoy the fresh air and umm, unwind after busy days or busy schedule at work and at school.

✓ Firstly, they enjoy the fresh air and unwind after busy days or a busy schedule at work or at school.

Using 'will' is unnecessary for general truths; use present simple 'enjoy' and 'unwind'. Also use article 'a busy schedule' and 'or' to connect alternatives. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual or general statements.

× Beside it, they uh, when they work in the parks, they can uh, see the beautiful scenery.

✓ Besides that, when they walk in the park, they can see the beautiful scenery.

Use 'Besides that' or 'Besides' not 'Beside it'. Also 'work in the parks' should be 'walk in the park' and singular/plural consistency. Suggestion: use correct discourse markers and correct verb for activity.

× And now snap some photos to post on social platform.

✓ And they can now snap some photos to post on social platforms.

Sentence fragment and subject missing: add 'they can' and plural 'social platforms' or 'social media platform'. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb and pluralize nouns appropriately.

× And last but not least, people can have memories with the loved. They love people when I work in the parks together.

✓ And last but not least, people can make memories with loved ones when they walk in the park together.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'the loved' is incorrect — use 'loved ones'; 'They love people when I work' is garbled — should be 'when they walk in the park together'. Suggestion: use 'loved ones' for family/friends and keep pronouns consistent (they/them) referring to people.

× Well, if I had a chance to take a long walk, I would like to work along the seaside.

✓ Well, if I had a chance to take a long walk, I would like to walk along the seaside.

Wrong verb 'work' used instead of 'walk'. Maintain conditional structure; replace with 'walk'. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs.

× I would enjoy the refreshing air breeze and the peaceful coastal scenery because it's helped me feel unwind, relaxed and I could also take some photos of the beach to post on social media.

✓ I would enjoy the refreshing sea breeze and the peaceful coastal scenery because it would help me feel unwound and relaxed, and I could also take some photos of the beach to post on social media.

Issues: 'air breeze' is redundant; use 'sea breeze'. 'it's helped me feel' wrong tense for conditional — use 'it would help me feel'. 'unwind' is a verb; adjective 'unwound' or 'relaxed'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and match verb forms in conditional sentences.

× Well, last weekend I went for work with my friends at the local park near my neighborhoods.

✓ Well, last weekend I went for a walk with my friends at the local park near my neighborhood.

Use 'went for a walk' not 'went for work'; 'neighborhoods' should be singular 'neighborhood' if referring to the area near home. Suggestion: use correct phrases for activities and match singular/plural nouns.

× We went for a walk about 30 minutes and at that time we had a deep conversations about our study process and our relationships and afterward I felt we understood each other better.

✓ We walked for about 30 minutes and at that time we had deep conversations about our study progress and our relationships, and afterward I felt we understood each other better.

Placement and word choice: use 'walked for about 30 minutes' or 'went for a walk for about 30 minutes'; 'a deep conversations' -> 'deep conversations'; 'study process' -> 'study progress'. Suggestion: correct adverb placement ('for about 30 minutes') and use singular/plural nouns properly.