Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating how often you walk, then give one or two brief reasons. Avoid repetition and informal fillers (e.g., "So yeah"). Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I walk moderately, about three times a week, because I enjoy walking with friends. However, I often rely on their availability, so if they are busy I walk less.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear statement about your childhood habits, then give specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid vague phrases. Limit to two to three sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

Ví dụ: Yes, I often played outside as a child, but I spent more time running than walking because I loved active games. My parents also took many photos of us playing in parks, so I have many happy memories.

Gợi ý: This answer is generally good. Make it slightly more natural by removing repetition and finishing properly. Use a topic sentence then two specific reasons with linking words like "Firstly" and "Secondly" for clarity.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks mainly because of the pleasant green surroundings and fresh air, which help them relax. Secondly, parks are convenient social spaces where friends can meet and chat while exercising.

Gợi ý: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct sentence stating the place, then give two clear reasons with accurate vocabulary. Avoid unclear words and errors (e.g., "ideaful", "tried lines part", "working").

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Baguio because the cool, pleasant weather makes outdoor activities enjoyable. The city also has many scenic parks and tree-lined paths where you can admire fresh, lovely views.

Gợi ý: Use proper articles and clear structure: state where you went, when, and why. Avoid filler like "to do 1". Keep it to two sentences and include linking words such as "and" or "so".

Ví dụ: Recently I went for a walk in a cemetery with a friend to get some exercise and fresh air. While walking, we chatted and caught up on each other's news.

× I walk moderately because I like to go with my friends for a walk, so I just ask them and if they don't agree I won't go.

✓ I walk moderately because I like to go for a walk with my friends, so I just ask them and if they don't agree I don't go.

Mix of present simple and future modal 'won't' is unnecessary; use present simple for habitual actions. Also word order 'go for a walk with my friends' is more natural. Suggestion: use present simple consistently for routines ('I don't go').

× So yeah, it depends on them if I'm gonna take a walk.

✓ So yeah, it depends on them whether I am going to take a walk.

Informal 'gonna' should be replaced with 'going to' in formal speech. Use 'whether' to introduce alternatives after 'depends on'. Maintain future construction 'am going to'.

× Well, yes, but I would say it's more on running because when you were a child we're just like freely to do whatever you want.

✓ Well, yes, but I would say it was more about running because when you were a child you were free to do whatever you wanted.

Tense inconsistency: mix of present and past. Use past tense 'was' and 'were' for childhood. 'More on running' -> 'more about running'. Remove unnecessary 'just like' and use 'free' not 'freely' (adjective). Also 'you wanted' matches past perspective.

× And I do remember all of it because I, my parents are taking pictures of me everywhere we go.

✓ And I do remember all of it because my parents took pictures of me everywhere we went.

Sequence of time: use past simple 'took' and 'went' for completed past events. 'Are taking' is present continuous and incorrect here. Remove extra pronoun 'I,'. Use consistent past tense for memories.

× I think people like to walk in parks because they are they offer pleasant green surroundings and fresh air, which helps people to relax their mind and unwind.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they offer pleasant green surroundings and fresh air, which helps people relax and unwind.

Redundant 'they are they' should be 'they offer'. 'Relax their mind' is awkward; use 'helps people relax and unwind'. Keep pronoun 'they' referring to 'parks' and streamline wording.

× So walking there.

✓ So they enjoy walking there.

Fragment: 'So walking there' is not a complete sentence. Provide a subject and verb to form a full sentence (e.g., 'they enjoy walking there').

× You have the chance. I would definitely choose Baguio for your long walk because the weather there is pleasant, cool and ideaful spending time outdoors.

✓ If I had the chance, I would definitely choose Baguio for a long walk because the weather there is pleasant, cool and ideal for spending time outdoors.

Original uses 'You have the chance' which is wrong perspective; use conditional 'If I had the chance.' 'Ideaful' is not a word; replace with 'ideal'. Use 'for a long walk' not 'for your long walk' to match speaker. 'Ideal for spending' is correct phrase.

× Also, the city has tried lines part and scenic parks so you can enjoy fresher and lovely views while working.

✓ Also, the city has tree-lined paths and scenic parks so you can enjoy fresher, lovely views while walking.

'Tried lines part' is garbled; intended 'tree-lined paths'. 'Working' is wrong context; use 'walking'. 'Fresher, lovely views' is better phrasing. Correct nouns and verb choice to match meaning.

× Recently I went to cemetery with my friend to take a walk, to do 1, to do it as an exercise and get some fresh air.

✓ Recently I went to the cemetery with my friend to take a walk as exercise and get some fresh air.

Missing article 'the' before 'cemetery'. Remove stray text 'to do 1, to do it'. Use 'as exercise' (no article) or 'as an exercise'. Maintain past tense 'went'.

× And with that we did some chitchats together.

✓ And we had some chitchat together.

'Did some chitchats' is unidiomatic; use 'had some chitchat' or 'chatted'. 'Chitchat' is uncountable, so no plural 'chitchats'.