Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, avoid repetition and minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and reduce filler words.

Ví dụ: I enjoy playing video games in my free time. At the weekends I usually play for a few hours because gaming helps me relax after a long workday; for example, I like story-driven open-world games that let me unwind.

Gợi ý: Avoid stuttering and repetition. Use correct past tense and give a clear structure: topic sentence + one specific detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, when I was a child I often played football. In addition, I enjoyed a local game called Copa, and I would play with friends for hours every afternoon.

Gợi ý: Be precise about timing and use correct tense (present perfect or past simple) when describing a long-term hobby. Remove fillers and repetitions, and link reason to preference with a clear connector.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have enjoyed video games since childhood. For example, I used to play GTA San Andreas because I love open-world games; they are a great way to unwind and relax.

Gợi ý: Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repetition. Start with a direct statement, then use linking words to contrast and give a specific example about your brother.

Ví dụ: My hobbies are generally different from most of my family, although my brother also enjoys video games. For instance, we used to play GTA San Andreas together on a laptop when we were younger.

× Well I love to play video games.

✓ Well, I love playing video games.

Use 'love playing' (gerund) to express a general habit or preference in present tense; also add a comma after 'Well' for natural pause.

× I am fanatical about playing video games.

✓ I am fanatical about playing video games.

Add the definite or indefinite article only if specifying a noun; here 'fanatical' as an adjective with no article is acceptable, but for natural speech 'I am a bit fanatical about playing video games' could be used. No strict grammar error, minor stylistic note.

× I usually play them at the weekends because it it make me feel so great after a day long work.

✓ I usually play them on weekends because they make me feel great after a long day at work.

Use 'on weekends' (correct preposition and idiom), correct subject pronoun 'they' to match plural 'games', fix verb agreement 'make' for plural subject, remove duplicated 'it', change 'a day long work' to the idiomatic 'a long day at work'.

× When I was when I was a child, I I usually play football.

✓ When I was a child, I usually played football.

Reference to childhood requires past tense 'played'. Remove repeated words 'when I was' and duplicated 'I'.

× So then I had a hobby to play football and a game called Copa all day, so.

✓ So I had a hobby of playing football and a game called Copa all day.

Use 'a hobby of playing' or 'a hobby: playing', avoid redundant 'so then' and trailing 'so'. Maintain past tense 'had' and use gerund 'playing' after 'hobby of'.

× Yes, yesterday I mentioned already I had a hobby to play video games since I would I used to play GTA San Andreas because I love open world games and and and they are great way to unwind umm and relax.

✓ Yes, I mentioned yesterday that I have had a hobby of playing video games since I was young; I used to play GTA San Andreas because I love open-world games and they are a great way to unwind and relax.

Use 'mentioned yesterday' (correct placement) and present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from the past to present. Fix 'since I would I used to' to 'since I was young; I used to', hyphenate 'open-world', use plural 'they are a great way' and remove filler words.

× Well, my hobbies is quite different from my other family members, but I have a brother so he's he's also quite fond of playing video games since childhood.

✓ Well, my hobbies are quite different from those of my other family members, but my brother is also quite fond of playing video games since childhood.

Match plural subject 'hobbies' with plural verb 'are'. Use 'those of my other family members' for clear comparison. Remove duplicated 'he's' and streamline phrasing.

× We used to play GTA San Andreas together on our laptop.

✓ We used to play GTA San Andreas together on our laptops.

If both played together, plural 'laptops' is likely, but if they shared one device 'on our laptop' can be correct; suggestion assumes each had a laptop, so plural 'laptops'. Keep 'used to' for past habit.