Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答をもっと自然で明確にし、文法や語順の誤りを直してください。また、トピック文→詳細（頻度／理由／具体例）の構成にし、接続語を使って流れをよくしましょう。例えば「まず」はFirstly/To begin with、「それから」はand/alsoを用います。語彙は "cycling" や "laser-cut jewelry/accessories" のような自然な表現に置き換えましょう。

Ví dụ: I enjoy a couple of hobbies. First, I cycle around my hometown almost every day because it helps me relax and stay fit. Also, I make accessories using a laser cutter; I usually design simple necklaces and keychains and sell some of them online.

Gợi ý: 文法（時制と語順）と語の選び方を直しましょう。接続語（so, and）を正しく使い、具体的な行動や感情を付け加えて詳しく述べてください。最後の表現は不完全なので、何で遊んだのか具体化しましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes. When I was a child I used to look after my dog. I often walked her in the park and we played fetch or tug-of-war, which made me feel very responsible and happy.

Gợi ý: 言いたいことは伝わりますが、不自然な語順や語の重複（"choose choice good"）を直しましょう。まず結論を述べ、その後で理由や具体例を説明します。語彙は "interested in fashion" や "pick outfits" を使うと自然です。

Ví dụ: Actually I don't have a hobby I've kept since childhood. However, I'm interested in fashion, so I often browse my wardrobe and pick outfits carefully for different occasions.

Gợi ý: 意図は分かりますが、文法（"hope"や時制）、語順、曖昧な表現（"we enjoyed thinking that"）を修正してください。まず肯定し、その後で頻度・やり方・感想を具体的に述べると良いです。自然な表現は "we enjoy singing karaoke together" や "we take turns singing" です。

Ví dụ: Yes. We share a hobby—karaoke. We sometimes go to a karaoke bar and take turns singing songs, and we always have fun laughing and cheering each other on.

× At first I like riding bikes, bike around my hometown almost every day and then next I like making some accessories by laser craft.

✓ At first I liked riding bikes and biking around my hometown almost every day, and then I started making accessories with laser cutting.

The student mixes present and narrative sequence. The question asks about current hobbies, but the sentence shifts tense awkwardly. Use past tense 'liked' if referring to earlier hobby stages, or present continuous for current habits. 'Bike around' should be 'biking around' (gerund) and 'laser craft' is better expressed as 'laser cutting' or 'laser craftwork'. Use parallel structure with 'and' and include 'started' to show transition. Suggestions: decide whether describing past or present; keep verbs parallel; use gerunds for activities and correct noun phrases.

× Yes, when I was a young I used to take care of my dog, so I often took a walk with my dog in the park and I played with her using.

✓ Yes, when I was young I used to take care of my dog, so I often walked with her in the park and played with her.

'a young' is incorrect; use 'young' without an article. 'Took a walk with my dog' is wordy; 'walked with her' is natural. The phrase 'played with her using' is incomplete and unnecessary; remove 'using'. Use consistent past tense 'walked' and 'played'. Suggestions: drop the article before 'young', keep verbs concise, and avoid unfinished prepositional phrases.

× Actually I don't have a hobby that I've had since childhood, but I like choosing fashionable clothes, so I often check my clothes and choose choice good.

✓ Actually, I don't have a hobby that I've had since childhood, but I like choosing fashionable clothes, so I often check my wardrobe and choose good outfits.

The main clause is acceptable, but the second part contains awkward phrases. 'Check my clothes' is understandable but 'check my wardrobe' is more natural. 'Choose choice good' is ungrammatical; use 'choose good outfits' or 'choose clothes that look good'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions. Suggestions: replace awkward collocations with natural phrases ('wardrobe', 'outfits') and keep consistent verb forms.

× Yes, I hope those same hobbies as my family members, it is karaoke. We sometimes go there and uh, singing 1 by 1 and uh, we enjoyed thinking that.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as some of my family members; it is karaoke. We sometimes go there and sing one by one, and we enjoy it.

'I hope those same hobbies' is incorrect: 'have the same hobby' expresses the idea. 'It is karaoke' is fine but follow with a clearer connector. 'Singing 1 by 1' should be 'sing one by one'. 'We enjoyed thinking that' is wrong; use 'we enjoy it' for present habit. Maintain present simple for habitual actions. Suggestions: use correct verbs ('have'), correct pronoun references ('it' for karaoke), and clear expressions for taking turns ('one by one').