Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevap karışık ve düzensiz; net bir konu cümlesi kurup ardından bir veya iki destekleyici cümle eklemelisin. Zaman ifadelerini doğru ve tutarlı kullan (örn. "since fourth grade", "when I was seven or eight"). Fazla tekrarı ve yarım cümleleri kaldır. Bağlaçlar (and, also, because) düzgün yerlerde kullanılmalı ve cümle sayısı 3-4’ü geçmemeli.

Ví dụ: I have two main hobbies: basketball and swimming. I have played basketball since fourth grade and still play regularly, which helps me stay fit. I also learnt to swim when I was about seven and enjoyed competing for a few years.

Gợi ý: Cevap bir önceki ifadelerin tekrarına dayanıyor ve çok fazla duraklama (uh) içeriyor; bu akıcılığı düşürür. Direkt başlayıp kısa bir konu cümlesi kur, sonra iki kısa detay ekle (ne zaman, nerede, neden sevdiğin). Gereksiz tekrarları kaldır ve daha doğal bağlaçlar kullan.

Ví dụ: Yes. As a child I was into basketball and swimming. I learned basketball at school from fourth grade, and I used to swim for fun outdoors rather than for training.

Gợi ý: Cümle zamanlarını ve yapılarını düzeltmelisin (örn. "I started basketball in fourth grade"; "I have been playing basketball for eight years"). Bilgi net değil; ‘‘really good’’ gibi ifadeyi somutlaştır (ödüller, pozisyon, başarı). Cümleleri 2–3 kısa cümle halinde düzenle.

Ví dụ: Yes. I started playing basketball in fourth grade and I have been playing for about eight years. I also learnt to swim between ages five and eight and competed in a few local events.

Gợi ý: Cevap anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi ve zamir kullanımı hatalı (örn. "my dad played basketball when he was younger", "my mother focused on her studies"). Aile üyelerini karşılaştırırken kısa ve net cümleler kullan; başarıları somutlaştırabilirsen daha iyi (kaç madalya, hangi turnuva).

Ví dụ: My father also played basketball when he was younger and even won several local championships. My mother, however, did not have sports hobbies; she concentrated on her studies instead.

× Yes, I have been playing basketball since I was 4th grade and also when I was eight or seven years old I had to be doing swimming and I was really good at it. Also a basketball and swimming has a really.

✓ Yes, I have been playing basketball since I was in fourth grade, and when I was seven or eight years old I used to do swimming and I was really good at it. Also, basketball and swimming are really enjoyable for me.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms. Use present perfect continuous 'have been playing' with 'since' to show an action continuing from the past to now. Use 'in fourth grade' for correct preposition and ordinal. Replace 'had to be doing swimming' with 'used to do swimming' to indicate a past habitual activity. Use plural agreement 'basketball and swimming are' and correct article usage. Suggestions: keep tense consistent, use 'used to' for past habits, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I said that I was when I was 4th grade, I studied basketball. So I think the child hobby, uh, my child hobby was basketball and swimming when I was, uh, when I was young. Uh, and also I like, uh, swimming in the outside, not for the training. Also, it has a hobby for me.

✓ I said that when I was in fourth grade I studied basketball. So my childhood hobbies were basketball and swimming when I was young. I also like swimming outdoors, not for training; it was a hobby for me.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'in fourth grade', awkward phrasing 'child hobby' and 'has a hobby for me'. Use simple past 'studied' and plural 'hobbies were' for multiple activities in the past. 'Swimming outdoors' is the correct collocation; use 'it was a hobby for me' to describe past preference. Suggestions: use clear noun phrases ('childhood hobbies'), correct prepositions, and match tense to past context.

× Yes, when I was 4th grade, I start basketball now I'm 11th grade, so it took like 8 years since I was a child. And also I have been play, I have been doing swimming when I was five years old to 8 years old I think. And also I'm really good.

✓ Yes, when I was in fourth grade, I started playing basketball. Now I'm in eleventh grade, so it has been about eight years since I started. I also did swimming from when I was five to about eight years old. I'm also quite good at it.

Errors: incorrect tense 'start' should be past 'started' for a past action; use 'in fourth grade' and 'in eleventh grade' with 'in'. Use present perfect 'has been' to indicate duration up to now. 'I have been play' is wrong—use past simple 'did swimming' for a finished period. Provide clearer time expressions. Suggestions: match tense to timeframe, use correct prepositions for school grades, and use present perfect for durations continuing to present.

× My dad's, uh, when he's younger, young age, he playing basketball too. And also he uh, has lots of medals and championships. He's really good at it. But my mother didn't do anything. He's only on study on her subjects.

✓ My dad, when he was younger, played basketball too. He also has lots of medals and championships; he was really good at it. But my mother didn't do any sports; she only focused on her studies.

Problems: incorrect pronouns and verb forms. Use 'when he was younger' for past time and past tense 'played'. 'He playing' is missing auxiliary; use 'played'. Pronoun 'he' referring to mother is incorrect—use 'she'. 'Study on her subjects' is unnatural; use 'focused on her studies'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns match their antecedents, use correct past verb forms, and choose natural collocations ('focused on her studies', 'didn't do any sports').