Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: tránh lặp từ, sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, so). Chú ý phát âm từ và nối câu (coordination). Giữ không quá 5 câu và cụ thể về tần suất/hoạt động.

Ví dụ: I enjoy playing mobile video games because they help sharpen my reflexes and improve my teamwork. For example, I usually play for about one to two hours a day to practice coordinating strategies with my teammates. This regular practice has noticeably boosted my reaction time and communication during matches.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: sử dụng thì quá khứ nhất quán (I enjoyed), sửa trật tự từ và tránh lặp. Nên nêu câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng linking words (for example, because) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (khoảng thời gian, cảm xúc). Giữ súc tích trong 3–4 câu.

Ví dụ: I enjoyed building Lego sets when I was a child because it fostered my creativity. For example, I spent several weeks assembling a giant Lego plane, which took a lot of time but made me very proud. That experience taught me patience and attention to detail.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: tránh lặp lại không cần thiết và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/diễn đạt (it helps me treasure my creations, develops my creativity). Dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành để nhấn mạnh sở thích kéo dài (I have enjoyed). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể và cảm xúc ngắn gọn.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have enjoyed building Lego sets since childhood because it helps me treasure my creations and develop my creativity. For instance, I once spent two hours completing a detailed Lego plane and felt very proud of the result. I still enjoy similar projects today.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh lặp âm và từ thừa. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (No, I don’t) rồi liệt kê 2–3 hobbies của gia đình với cấu trúc song song và cụ thể (frequency, examples). Dùng linking words (for example, whereas) để tạo liên kết rõ ràng.

Ví dụ: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family because each of us enjoys different activities. For example, my father likes to visit a café and drink coffee every morning, whereas my mother enjoys planting trees and gardening. My sister is fond of collecting clothes and shopping for new outfits.

× It helps me improving my my and I coronation and.

✓ It helps me improve my coordination.

The verb after 'helps' should be in the base form (infinitive without to) or followed by 'to'. Using the -ing form 'improving' is incorrect here; use 'improve'. Also 'coronation' is a misspelling of 'coordination'. Suggestion: say 'It helps me improve my coordination.'

× I play video games because because it helps me sharpen my reflexes and also helps helps me Co coordinate what one with other teammates.

✓ I play video games because they help me sharpen my reflexes and help me coordinate with my teammates.

There are repetitions ('because because', 'helps helps') and incorrect phrase order. Use plural 'they' to refer to 'video games' (subject-verb agreement) and the verb 'help' in base form; 'coordinate with my teammates' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: remove duplicates and restructure the sentence for clarity.

× In mobile games. I spend like about one or two hours to improve it.

✓ In mobile games, I spend about one or two hours improving them.

Fragment and wrong infinitive usage: use the -ing form 'improving' after 'spend' (spend time doing something). Also 'it' is vague; use 'them' to refer to games. Combine into one sentence and remove redundant 'like'. Suggestion: 'I spend about one or two hours improving them.'

× I enjoy building Lego sets when I was a child.

✓ I enjoyed building Lego sets when I was a child.

Mixing present tense 'enjoy' with past time marker 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use consistent tense with time expressions.

× It helps me, it fosters my creativity and also treasures my creation more.

✓ They helped me; building them fostered my creativity, and I treasured my creations more.

Pronoun 'it' is ambiguous for plural 'Lego sets'; use 'they' or rephrase. 'Treasures my creation' is incorrect voice and tense—use 'I treasured my creations' or 'I valued my creations more.' Suggestion: match pronouns and use appropriate tense and subject for 'treasure.'

× Uh, for for example I built a giant Lego plane which requires me a lot of time but I treasure it a lot.

✓ For example, I built a giant Lego plane which required a lot of my time, but I treasured it a lot.

Tense mismatch: 'built' is past so relative clause should be past 'required'. Remove duplicate 'for'. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout and remove repetitions.

× As I said before it is building Lego sets it because guess it helps me treasures my creation and also helps me play, helps me customers, my creativity.

✓ As I said before, my hobby is building Lego sets because it helps me express and develop my creativity, and I treasure my creations.

Awkward structure and incorrect verbs: 'helps me treasures' mixes forms; use 'helps me' + base verb or 'lets me' + verb. 'Helps me customers' is incorrect—possibly intended 'helps me practice' or 'develop'. Rephrase to clearly state reasons and correct verb forms. Suggestion: 'my hobby is building Lego sets because it helps me develop my creativity.'

× Like I have spent two hours finishing a a Lego plane and I felt I was proud of.

✓ For example, I spent two hours finishing a Lego plane and felt proud of it.

Use simple past 'spent' to match the past event; 'have spent' is less natural in this context. The clause 'I felt I was proud of' is ungrammatical—say 'felt proud of it.' Remove duplicate 'a'. Suggestion: keep past tense and correct object placement.

× I think I'm not uh, because each my family members have different, different hobbies of their own, like my father, my father likes to go to cafe, likes to drink coffee on on on, on every morning.

✓ I don't think so, because each of my family members has different hobbies. For example, my father likes to go to a cafe and drink coffee every morning.

'I'm not' is incomplete; better 'I don't think so.' 'Each my family members' needs 'each of my family members' and singular verb 'has'. Remove repetitions and use articles ('a cafe'). Suggestion: use 'each of' plus singular verb and correct articles.

× Or my my mother likes to plant, plant trees and also something.

✓ My mother likes to plant trees and do gardening.

Repetition 'plant, plant' and vague 'also something'—rephrase to a clear activity. Use 'do gardening' or 'grow plants'. Suggestion: be specific and avoid repetition.

× And my sister likes to collect clothes from every like buy.

✓ My sister likes to collect clothes and buy new ones.

Unclear and ungrammatical phrase 'from every like buy'—restate as 'collect clothes and buy new ones' or 'likes shopping for clothes.' Suggestion: choose a clear verb phrase such as 'likes shopping for clothes.'