Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevap daha doğal ve etkili olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar azaltılmalı, cümleler daha akıcı bağlaçlarla bağlanmalı ve daha spesifik bilgiler eklenmeli. Örneğin; gitar çaldığınızı, şarkı yazdığınızı ve YouTube’da düzenli olarak içerik paylaştığınızı; kaç takipçiniz olduğunu veya takipçilerinizin hangi içeriği sevdiğini belirtebilirsiniz. Ayrıca tekrar eden kelimeler (“I can”, “like”) ve dolgu kelimeleri kaldırılmalı.

Ví dụ: I enjoy playing the guitar because it helps me relax and inspires me to write songs. I often record my performances and upload them to YouTube, where I have about 3,000 subscribers who often ask me for new acoustic covers and original songs.

Gợi ý: Cevap daha açık ve düzgün zaman kullanımı gerektirir; geçmiş zamanı tutarlı kullanın (liked, enjoyed). Ayrıntılar daha net olmalı ve gereksiz tekrarlar çıkarılmalı. Ayrıca duygu tanımları basit ve mantıklı olmalıdır; ‘heartwarming friends’ ifadesini daha doğal bir şekilde açıklayın.

Ví dụ: Yes. When I was a child I liked going to the park with my grandmother. She knew many people there, and I enjoyed meeting her friendly neighbours because they were always kind and made me feel welcome.

Gợi ý: Cümle yapıları daha düzgün ve akıcı olmalı; zamir ve fiil tekrarlarından kaçının. Doğru zaman kullanımı ve doğal ifadeler kullanın (I have been keeping a journal since I was five). Ayrıca journaling’in size ne sağladığını spesifik olarak açıklayın (örneğin, duyguları düzenleme, anıları kaydetme).

Ví dụ: Yes. I have been keeping a journal since I was five years old. Writing regularly helps me organise my thoughts and remember important events, and it also reduces stress when I feel overwhelmed.

Gợi ý: Cevabınız net ancak tekrarlardan ve karışık ifadelerden arındırılmalı. Açık bir konu cümlesi kullanın ve neden farklı hobileriniz olduğunu kısa bir sebep verin. Aile ile ortak etkinliklerden örnek vererek cevabı zenginleştirin. Karmaşık ve anlamsız cümleleri (ör. “About our heart is together”) daha doğal İngilizce ile değiştirin.

Ví dụ: No, we don’t share the same hobbies because everyone has different interests. However, we still spend time together as a family by having weekly dinners or going on walks, which helps us stay close despite our different hobbies.

× I like playing guitar because it helps me to relax and also I can write songs and I can sing that.

✓ I like playing the guitar because it helps me to relax, and I can also write songs and sing them.

The gerund 'playing' is correct, but 'guitar' needs the article 'the' in this context. 'Also' placement is improved for natural flow, and 'sing that' is unnatural; use the object pronoun 'them' to refer to 'songs'. Suggestions: add the definite article before musical instruments when referring generally to playing them, place 'also' before the verb it modifies, and use correct pronouns for plural nouns.

× When I sing that I just record it and I upload it onto YouTube.

✓ When I sing, I just record it and upload it to YouTube.

'Sing that' is incorrect; use 'sing' followed by a pause or referent. 'Upload it onto YouTube' is wordy; use 'upload it to YouTube'. Also remove the repeated subject 'I' before 'upload' for concise coordinated verbs. Suggestions: use commas to separate clauses and use 'to' with 'upload'.

× I have so many like followers in YouTube.

✓ I have so many followers on YouTube.

The correct preposition with platforms is 'on' not 'in'. Remove filler word 'like'. Suggestions: use 'on YouTube' and avoid discourse fillers.

× They also tell me that please do some new song like we we can't wait to listen.

✓ They also tell me, 'Please do some new songs; we can't wait to listen.'

The original mixes reported and direct speech awkwardly and repeats words. Use direct quotation or report speech properly and pluralize 'song' to 'songs'. Also correct repetition 'we we'. Suggestions: choose direct or reported speech consistently and fix repetition and plurality.

× For instance, I like to go to park with my grandmother and she knew a lot of people there.

✓ For instance, I liked to go to the park with my grandmother, and she knew a lot of people there.

The question asked about childhood hobbies, so past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Also use the article 'the' with 'park' in this context. Suggestions: match tense to the timeframe and include definite articles for specific places.

× I I like to meeting her friends in there, which is so kind and hard, heartwarming friends as she was.

✓ I liked meeting her friends there, who were kind and warm-hearted, like she was.

Use 'meeting' with 'like' changed to past 'liked' to match timeframe. Remove 'in' before 'there'. 'Which' is incorrect for people; use 'who'. 'Hard, heartwarming' is unclear; 'warm-hearted' conveys intended meaning. Suggestions: use 'who' for people, correct prepositions, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I have been journaling things.

✓ I have been keeping a journal.

'Journaling things' is awkward; 'keeping a journal' is a natural collocation. Present perfect continuous 'have been' is fine for an ongoing habit. Suggestions: use common expressions like 'keeping a journal' or 'writing in my journal'.

× I I was 5, literally it was it was my whole life.

✓ I was five; literally, it was my whole life.

Remove repeated 'I' and repeated 'it was'. Write numbers as words in formal speech. Maintain past tense 'was' consistent. Suggestions: avoid repetitions and use punctuation to separate clauses.

× And I don't think a life that I am not journaling because it makes me feel understandable.

✓ And I can't imagine a life without journaling because it helps me understand myself.

'a life that I am not journaling' is unnatural; use 'a life without journaling'. 'Makes me feel understandable' is incorrect English; 'helps me understand myself' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestions: use natural collocations like 'a life without' and 'understand myself'.

× My family members are just so different than me.

✓ My family members are simply very different from me.

'Different than' is nonstandard in many varieties of English; 'different from' is preferred. 'Just so' is informal; 'simply very' is clearer. Suggestions: use 'different from' and adjust adverbs for clarity.

× So we pursue our hobbies separately.

✓ So we pursue our hobbies separately.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestions: none.

× We just love ourselves, the family, so much so they don't do it separately.

✓ We love our family so much that we still come together even when we pursue hobbies separately.

Original is confusing and contains incorrect reflexive 'love ourselves, the family' and unclear clause 'so they don't do it separately.' Rephrase to clarify that despite separate hobbies, the family still spends time together. Suggestions: avoid awkward reflexive constructions and restructure for clarity.

× About our heart is together.

✓ Our hearts are together.

'About' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Use plural 'hearts' to match metaphorical meaning and plural verb 'are'. Suggestions: remove extraneous words and ensure noun-pronoun number agreement.