Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (types of books, how often, why) using linking words. Reduce fillers like “uh” and avoid repeating phrases such as “so much.”

Ví dụ: I enjoy reading, especially horror novels. For example, I read at least three books a month because I like the suspenseful plots and atmospheric writing. Also, reading helps me relax after a busy day.

Gợi ý: Answer directly about your childhood hobbies rather than generalizing. Use a topic sentence and follow with specific examples, times, and reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like “wise ticket.” Use linking words (for example, also, because) for coherence.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I loved playing computer games and watching movies. For example, I would watch cartoons every weekend and enjoy horror films with my older cousins because I liked the excitement. Also, I often played soccer with friends after school.

Gợi ý: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence stating the hobby and how long you've done it. Then add specific supporting details about what you read, how it benefited you, and link ideas using words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid vague phrases like “so good to read.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I've been reading since I was a child. For example, I started with fairy tales and now I read horror and historical novels because they broaden my vocabulary and teach me about different cultures. As a result, I feel more confident when discussing books with others.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer about whether your family shares your hobby, then provide specific contrasts or examples. Use linking words (however, for instance) and correct grammar (every person has).

Ví dụ: Not really. My parents prefer gardening and cooking, whereas I enjoy reading and horror novels. However, sometimes my sister and I exchange book recommendations, so we do share an interest in reading occasionally.

× I'm passionate about reading books so much.

✓ I'm very passionate about reading books.

'So much' is colloquial and is placed incorrectly; 'very' is a more natural adverb to modify 'passionate' in this context. Use 'very passionate' instead of 'passionate ... so much' for clear word order and register.

× I'm into books so much.

✓ I'm really into books.

The adverb 'so much' is awkward at the end; 'really into' is a more natural collocation in English. Use 'really' before 'into' to modify the degree.

× For example, I, uh, love horror books and I read them frequently because I love them so much.

✓ For example, I love horror books and I read them frequently because I enjoy them so much.

Repetition of 'love' and filler 'uh' creates redundancy and awkwardness. Replacing the second 'love' with 'enjoy' and removing filler improves clarity and style.

× And yeah, on uh, Contra in in contrast.

✓ In contrast, ...

This fragment is disfluent and contains filler words and repetition. Start with 'In contrast' followed by the contrasting idea; avoid fillers like 'uh' and repeated words.

× In my perspective, children in their younger age love to play games, love to watch movies, series and cartoons, so maybe mine was the same.

✓ In my perspective, children at a young age love to play games and watch movies, series, and cartoons, so mine was probably the same.

Use 'at a young age' instead of 'in their younger age'; combine verbs to avoid repetition; use 'probably' for likelihood. Punctuation around the list of media is also adjusted for clarity.

× I used to play so much games, I used to see so much movies and especially the horror movies because I was a wise ticket.

✓ I used to play so many games and watch so many movies, especially horror movies, because I was a big fan.

Use 'so many' for countable nouns (games, movies), and 'watch' instead of 'see' in this context. 'Wise ticket' is incorrect idiom; replace with 'big fan' or 'huge fan'. Also join clauses with conjunctions and add commas for readability.

× Yeah, I told you about it.

✓ Yes, I already told you about it.

'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes, I already told you about it' is clearer and fits the conversational past reference.

× I love reading books as I learn so much from them and they are so good to read.

✓ I love reading books because I learn so much from them and they are great to read.

Replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer cause, and use 'great' instead of 'so good' for natural adjective placement. Maintain present tense consistency.

× Like we get knowledge.

✓ For example, we gain knowledge from them.

Sentence fragment; 'Like we get knowledge' is informal and ungrammatical. Use 'For example, we gain knowledge from them' to form a complete, natural sentence.

× I don't think so because every person have their own hobbies, their own passions, their own interests.

✓ I don't think so because every person has their own hobbies, passions, and interests.

Subject 'every person' is singular and requires singular verb 'has' (not 'have'). Also streamline the list and remove repetitive 'their own' for conciseness.

× So mine is same like that.

✓ So mine is the same.

'Same like that' is nonstandard. Use 'the same' to state similarity. Also avoid starting sentence with 'So' in formal answers if possible, but here it's acceptable in speech.

× I don't find that.

✓ I don't find that to be true.

'I don't find that' is incomplete and vague in this context. Expanding to 'I don't find that to be true' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.