Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevap daha doğal ve doğrudan olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu sözcükleri azaltılmalı. Başlangıçta net bir konu cümlesi (I have several hobbies, including...) kullanın, ardından örnekler verin ve son olarak mevcut önceliği belirtin. Bağlaçlar (for example, however) daha tutarlı kullanılmalı ve cümle sayısı 3-4 ile sınırlı tutulmalı.

Ví dụ: I have several hobbies, including playing folk and pop music. For example, I often learn new songs on my guitar and sometimes perform for friends. However, at the moment I’m focused on preparing for the IELTS exam, so I have less time for music.

Gợi ý: Cümle yapısı ve zaman kullanımı daha doğru olmalı; gereksiz ifadeler (I was like) ve duraksamalar kaldırılmalı. Net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp geçmiş alışkanlığı açıklayın, ardından spesifik bir ayrıntı veya anı ekleyin. Bağlaçlarla mantık akışını sağlayın.

Ví dụ: Yes, when I was a child I used to ride a bicycle with my friends almost every day. We would explore our neighborhood and sometimes race each other, which was both fun and good exercise.

Gợi ý: Tekrarları azaltın ve önceki cevabı kısaca özetleyip yeni bir ayrıntı ekleyin. Direk referans yerine kısa bir bağlaçla (as I mentioned earlier) geçiş yapın ve hobinin neden sürdüğünü veya sizin için ne ifade ettiğini açıklayın.

Ví dụ: Yes, as I mentioned earlier, cycling has been a hobby of mine since childhood. I continue to enjoy it because it helps me relax and keeps me fit, and I often cycle in parks on weekends.

Gợi ý: Daha akıcı ve doğal cümle yapısı kullanın; gereksiz duraksamalar ve yanlış kelime sıralamaları düzeltin. Örneğin contrast bağlacı (while/however) kullanarak farkı netleştirin ve bir örnek ya da sebep ekleyin.

Ví dụ: Not really; while my brother enjoys team sports like basketball and football, I prefer solo activities such as cycling or playing music. I find individual hobbies more relaxing and easier to fit into my schedule.

× Yes I am playing folk music or other music types for example, uh, pop music you know. But now I am fixated to IELTS exam.

✓ Yes, I play folk music and other types of music, for example pop music. But right now I am focused on the IELTS exam.

The student used the present continuous 'am playing' to describe habitual activities; English uses the simple present for habits. 'Music types' is unnatural; use 'types of music'. 'Fixated to' is incorrect collocation; use 'focused on'. Also punctuation and articles were adjusted for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I was like riding bicycle with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to ride a bicycle with my friends.

The phrase 'was like riding' is incorrect for past habitual actions. Use 'used to' or the simple past 'rode'. Also include the article 'a' before 'bicycle'.

× Actually I like bicycle, uh, recently times.

✓ Actually, I like bicycles recently.

The original mixes tense and noun form. 'Like bicycle' should be 'like bicycles' (plural) or 'like riding a bicycle'. 'Recently times' is incorrect; 'recently' alone is sufficient and should appear near the verb.

× Yes, my hobby is riding bicycle as like I said a previous previous question.

✓ Yes, my hobby is riding a bicycle, as I mentioned in the previous question.

Redundant words 'as like' and repeated 'previous' make the sentence ungrammatical. Use 'as I mentioned' and include the article 'a' before 'bicycle'.

× Unfortunately not. For example, my brother likes when playing basketball or football games, uh, competitive games, but uh, I like doing single activities.

✓ Unfortunately not. For example, my brother likes playing basketball and football, which are competitive games, but I prefer solo activities.

'Likes when playing' is ungrammatical; use 'likes playing'. 'Football games' is redundant; 'football' suffices. 'Doing single activities' is unnatural; use 'solo activities' or 'individual activities'. The relative clause 'which are competitive games' clarifies meaning.