Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar errors (e.g., "I see myself folded" → "I find myself lost") and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and add a brief example of a recent book or how reading helps you.

Ví dụ: I really enjoy reading books — it’s one of my main hobbies. After stressful days I often find myself lost in a novel because it helps me relax and forget my worries. For example, I recently read The Alchemist, which helped me unwind and reflect on my goals.

Gợi ý: Structure the response: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise specific examples linked with a connective. Fix awkward phrasing ("even matter of fact" → "in fact") and avoid unnecessary meta-commentary. Use vivid but brief details to show why you enjoyed those hobbies.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a few hobbies as a child. In fact, I collected Barbie dolls and enjoyed dressing them up, and I also liked to pretend-cook by making mud pies and serving them on leaves, which I thought was great fun.

Gợi ý: Be direct and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain with a reason and linking word. Correct grammar and tense errors ("I like" → "I liked," "I all of my collection... are gone" → "all my Barbie dolls are gone"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I don’t have a hobby I’ve kept since childhood. I enjoyed playing with Barbie dolls as a child, but I no longer have them and my interests changed — now I prefer reading books.

Gợi ý: Keep the answer natural and a bit more precise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words (e.g., "for example"). Fix small errors ("reads book" → "reads books"). Avoid repeating "different" twice.

Ví dụ: No, our hobbies are quite different. For example, I enjoy reading books, while my siblings prefer gaming and my parents usually watch films and TV series.

× I love reading books, it is one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ I love reading books; it is one of my favorite hobbies.

The original has a comma splice joining two independent clauses. Use a semicolon or a conjunction to join them. Also punctuation fixes improve clarity.

× I constantly see myself folded between the pages of books, especially after having exhausting and stressful days I read books.

✓ I often find myself curled up between the pages of books, especially after exhausting and stressful days when I read.

'Constantly' is unnatural here; 'often' or 'frequently' fits better. 'See myself folded' is awkward; 'find myself curled up' is idiomatic. The original also runs clauses together; add 'when' to link the time clause.

× It is my way of escaping this world and all of my challenges, and I just rest me and my other characters in the book.

✓ It is my way of escaping this world and all my challenges, and I can relax with the characters in the book.

'Rest me and my other characters' is ungrammatical. Use 'relax with the characters' or 'lose myself with the characters.' Also remove unnecessary 'of' in 'all of my challenges.'

× As a child, I used to love playing with Barbie dolls, even matter of fact I had collections of them, especially dressing them up and playing with them.

✓ As a child, I used to love playing with Barbie dolls; in fact, I had a collection of them, especially enjoying dressing them up and playing with them.

Punctuation and word choice: use 'in fact' rather than 'even matter of fact.' 'Collections' should be singular 'a collection' when referring to the set. The rest keeps past tense 'used to.'

× After mentioning this, I also have to point out that I love to cook fake foods.

✓ After mentioning this, I should also point out that I used to make pretend food.

'Love to cook fake foods' is awkward; 'make pretend food' or 'play at cooking' is idiomatic. Also keep past reference consistent with childhood by using 'used to.'

× When I was a kid I used to play with mud and put them in leaf and act like it was food.

✓ When I was a kid I used to play with mud, put it on leaves, and pretend it was food.

Pronoun agreement: 'mud' is uncountable so use 'it' not 'them.' Use plural 'leaves' and 'put it on leaves' or 'in a leaf' depending on meaning. 'Act like' should be 'pretend it was.' Use commas to separate actions.

× Generally I would say no.

✓ Generally, I would say no.

This sentence mainly needs a comma after the introductory adverb. Tense is fine; punctuation improves readability.

× When I was a child I like to play with barbies and make fake foods.

✓ When I was a child I liked to play with Barbies and make pretend food.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'liked.' 'Barbies' should be capitalized and 'fake foods' is better as 'pretend food.'

× But I have grown up though I like to do different stuff like as I mentioned before reading books I all of my collection that I had of my barbies are gone now.

✓ But I have grown up, and I now enjoy different things, such as reading books. All the Barbie dolls I used to have are gone now.

The original is run-on and incoherent. Break into two clear sentences: one about current interests, one about the Barbie collection. Use past tense 'used to have' and 'are gone now' for clarity.

× So not the one thing I could state.

✓ So there is no single hobby I can identify from childhood that I still have.

The fragment 'So not the one thing I could state' is ungrammatical. Reformulate as a complete sentence clarifying the intended meaning.

× No, I think all of our hobbies are different and unique in their own ways.

✓ No, I think all of our hobbies are different and unique in their own ways.

Sentence is correct grammatically; no change needed aside from leaving as is. Included here to acknowledge no error matching the list.

× In my family I consider myself the only person who enjoys and actually reads book and all of my siblings and parents have their own different hobbies like gaming, watching TV and films and series.

✓ In my family, I consider myself the only person who actually enjoys reading books; all my siblings and parents have different hobbies like gaming and watching TV shows and films.

'Reads book' needs plural 'books' and gerund 'reading.' Remove extra 'and' before 'actually.' 'All of my siblings and parents' is verbose; 'all my siblings and parents' is better. 'Films and series' is better as 'films and TV shows.' Punctuation and word order improved.