Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Сократите лишние слова, исправьте неточные фразы и произношение; используйте логичную структуру: тема + 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте повторений и незавершённых предложений. Например, замените «driving pictures» на «drawing pictures», уточните, почему вы рисуете, и используйте связку («because» или «so») корректно.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy drawing landscapes and mountains because it helps me relax, and I also like dancing and listening to music in my free time.

Gợi ý: Используйте правильные времена и завершайте мысли. Начните с прямого ответа в прошедшем времени, добавьте конкретную деталь и причину, почему это было важно. Уберите заполнители «umm» и незавершённые фразы.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child my favourite hobby was fishing. I used to go to the river every day with my grandfather, and I enjoyed it because it gave me a chance to spend time outdoors and learn patience.

Gợi ý: Отвечайте прямо и используйте правильную грамматику для Present Perfect/Present Simple. Дайте пример того, что вы сейчас делаете, и завершите предложение. Избегайте повторов («I immediately I») и ненужных «uh/umm».

Ví dụ: Yes, I still have a childhood hobby. I have enjoyed drawing since I was young, and nowadays when I have free time I take out my pencils and sketch landscapes or objects.

Gợi ý: Исправьте лексику и грамматику: вместо «pestered me» используйте «inspired me» или «encouraged me». Дайте чёткое утверждение и объяснение, как семья повлияла на ваше хобби. Избегайте незавершённых фраз и заполнителей.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. My father is very good at drawing and he inspired me to draw as well, so we often share techniques and practise together.

× I have several hobbies like driving pictures and also dancing, listening to music like this.

✓ I have several hobbies like drawing pictures, dancing, and listening to music.

The student used 'driving pictures' instead of 'drawing pictures' which is a wrong verb choice, not a preposition error; however, this sentence also had incorrect list punctuation and conjunction usage. Replace 'driving' with 'drawing' and join items with commas and 'and' for a correct parallel list structure. Use: 'drawing pictures, dancing, and listening to music.' Suggestion: Practice parallel structure when listing hobbies and ensure correct verb choice for actions.

× When I am free, I draw the pictures of surroundings and the mountains because it helps me and.

✓ When I am free, I draw pictures of the surroundings and the mountains because it helps me relax.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and' and lacks an object for 'helps me'. Complete the thought by adding 'relax' or another appropriate result. Also 'the pictures of surroundings' is better as 'pictures of the surroundings' or simply 'pictures of surroundings.' Suggestion: Always finish clauses and state the effect clearly (e.g., 'helps me relax').

× Umm sure, back in the time when I was a kid, I have different kind of hobbies.

✓ Umm sure, back when I was a kid, I had different kinds of hobbies.

The clause refers to the past ('when I was a kid') so the verb should be in the past tense ('had'), not present ('have'). Also use 'different kinds of' (plural) for grammatical agreement. Suggestion: Match tense to time expressions; use past tense for past time frames and plural form for 'kinds.'

× At that time the most favorite one was fishing.

✓ At that time, my favorite hobby was fishing.

'The most favorite one' is awkward and incorrect. Use 'my favorite hobby' or 'the most favorite' is redundant. Adding 'my' clarifies ownership and 'hobby' makes the sentence natural. Suggestion: Use 'favorite' without 'most' and include the noun it modifies ('hobby').

× Umm every day I went to the river with my grandfather umm for fishing and it gives.

✓ Every day I went to the river with my grandfather to go fishing, and it was enjoyable.

The sentence uses past actions ('went') so follow-up verbs must be past tense. 'It gives' is present and incomplete; replace with 'it was enjoyable' or 'it gave me joy.' Also 'for fishing' is better phrased as 'to go fishing.' Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense when describing past routines and finish clauses with clear results.

× Umm, well, still I have my childhood hobby.

✓ Umm, well, I still have my childhood hobby.

Word order is slightly awkward: place 'still' before the verb or after the subject ('I still have'). This is a present-tense statement and 'have' is correct; just adjust word order for natural English. Suggestion: Use natural adverb placement: 'I still have' rather than 'still I have.'

× Of course it is uh, drawing pictures nowadays, so if I am free, I immediately I take my pencils and my eraser to.

✓ Of course, it is drawing pictures nowadays, so if I am free, I immediately take my pencils and eraser and start drawing.

The original has repetition ('I immediately I') and an incomplete ending ('to'). Complete the action by adding 'and start drawing.' Remove redundant 'my' before 'eraser' for naturalness. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronouns and complete infinitive phrases (e.g., 'take my pencils and eraser to draw' or 'take my pencils and eraser and start drawing').

× Yes, umm, actually my father quite, uh, good at drawing pictures and his ability pestered me also and we are we share the same skills at drawing and.

✓ Yes, actually my father is quite good at drawing pictures, and his ability inspired me; we share the same drawing skills.

Missing verb 'is' after 'father' is a sentence structure/verb issue; 'pestered me' is wrong choice—use 'inspired me' or 'encouraged me.' The phrase 'we are we share' is redundant. The sentence ends with an unfinished 'and.' Suggestion: Use correct linking verb ('is'), choose appropriate verbs ('inspired' not 'pestered'), and avoid repetition. Finish the sentence clearly.