Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答をもっと明確で流暢にし、文法と語順の誤りを直してください。具体的には: 1) トピック文で直接答える（"My hobby is..."）。2) supporting detailsは2文以内にまとめ、接続詞（for example, because, and）を使って論理的につなげる。3) 不要な語（"well", "pro", "notably"の誤用）を省く。4) 景色の説明は具体的な語彙（mountains, coastline, countryside, views）を使う。発音や流暢さの練習として、短い自然なフレーズを繰り返し練習すること。

Ví dụ: My hobby is riding trains. I enjoy it because train journeys let me see beautiful scenery, such as mountains and the coastline. For example, on routes in Japan I often notice colorful fields and seaside views, which I find relaxing.

Gợi ý: 文章の文法と語順を修正し、過去形の使い方を整えてください。具体的には: 1) 場所は正しく表現（"when I was in China"）。2) 動詞は過去形（"I often went snowboarding" または "I liked snowboarding"）。3) 意味不明な表現（"wish to snowboarding", "he was demanding", "making tricks or jump from scare"）を明確にする。4) 理由や感情を一つか二つの具体的な例で説明する。

Ví dụ: Yes, I did when I was a child in China. I often went snowboarding because the sport felt adventurous and challenging. I especially enjoyed trying small jumps and practicing simple tricks on gentle slopes.

Gợi ý: 答えを簡潔にし、言いたいことを明確に伝える練習をしてください。具体的には: 1) 一文目で直接答える（"Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood."）。2) 趣味を正確に列挙し、語彙を正しく使う（"reading books, newspapers, and dictionaries"）。3) "dictionary"の機能を説明する場合は具体的に（"definitions, example sentences, and usage"）。4) 文は短く2〜3文に収める。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood: reading. I enjoy reading books, newspapers, and using dictionaries because they help me learn new words and understand grammar. For example, dictionaries give definitions and example sentences that improve my writing.

Gợi ý: 比較を明確にし、時制と語順を正しく使うこと。具体的には: 1) 直接的な答え（"No, I don't."）。2) 家族との違いを簡潔に述べる（"My father prefers driving cars, but I prefer trains."）。3) 好意や理由を付け加える場合は接続詞を使う（"However, I admire his hobby because..."）。4) 冗長な表現を避け、自然な語彙を使う。

Ví dụ: No, I don't. My father prefers driving cars, but I enjoy riding trains because I like watching the scenery. However, I admire his hobby too since he enjoys the freedom of driving.

× That experience pro offers me a lot of scenery, landscapes for example mountain and ocean that are notably as beautiful in Japan and I can see these lands.

✓ That experience also offers me a lot of scenery and landscapes, for example mountains and the ocean, which are notably beautiful in Japan, and I can see them.

文中の前置詞と語順が不自然であるため意味が不明瞭になっています。'pro' は不要で 'also' や 'offers' のほうが自然です。'mountain' は複数形の 'mountains' にする必要があり、'ocean' の前には定冠詞 'the' を付けるのが一般的です。'that are notably as beautiful' は冗長で誤った構造なので 'which are notably beautiful' に直します。また 'I can see these lands' は 'I can see them' のほうが自然です。改善案: 前置詞と冠詞に注意し、名詞の数に一致させること。

× Yes I did when I was China.

✓ Yes, I did when I was in China.

'when I was China' は場所を示すときに前置詞 'in' が必要です。時制は過去で正しいので 'was in China' のように前置詞を加えるだけで自然な英文になります。

× I often wish to snowboarding that sports provided me an adventurous feeling and something like challenging.

✓ I often wanted to go snowboarding; that sport gave me an adventurous feeling and felt challenging.

'wish to snowboarding' は不自然で、'want to go snowboarding' や過去形の 'wanted to go' を使うべきです。また 'sports' は単数の 'sport' が適切で、'provided me' は過去形 'gave me' のほうが自然です。'something like challenging' は不自然なので 'felt challenging' に直します。改善案: 助動詞の形や動詞不定詞・動名詞の使い分けに注意すること。

× Although he was demanding but I really enjoyed the making tricks or jump from scare.

✓ Although it was demanding, I really enjoyed doing tricks and jumping off scary slopes.

文の主語 'he' は文脈に合わないため 'it' や具体的な行為を示す表現に直す必要があります。また 'but' と 'although' を同時に使うのは冗長で、どちらか一方を使うべきです。'the making tricks or jump from scare' は不自然で、動名詞 'doing tricks' と 'jumping off' を使い、'scare' の代わりに 'scary slopes' などを使うと意味が明確になります。

× Yes, I do I. Have hope had four hobby for a long time which is reading, newspaper and directionary.

✓ Yes, I have had one hobby for a long time, which is reading newspapers and using a dictionary.

原文は語順が乱れており意味が不明確です。'I do I.' は誤りで不要です。'Have hope had four hobby' は文法的に誤りで、'I have had one hobby for a long time' のように現在完了形で表現するのが適切です。'hobby' の数と名詞の形（plural/singular）を一致させ、'newspaper and directionary' は 'reading newspapers and using a dictionary' のように表現します。改善案: 主語・助動詞・動詞の順序を正しくし、名詞の単複数を一致させること。

× Directionary offers me a lot of visual information including the system.

✓ A dictionary gives me a lot of visual information, including the system of words.

'Directionary' は綴り間違いで 'dictionary' が正しいです。'offers me' より 'gives me' の方が自然な場合があります。'including the system' は不明瞭なので 'including the system of words' のように具体化しました。改善案: 前置詞と語彙の選択を明確にし、綴りミスを直すこと。

× No I did not. Although my father likes to riding car I my hobby was definitely different trains it goes to opposite side.

✓ No, I do not. Although my father likes driving cars, my hobby is definitely different; I prefer trains, which go in the opposite direction.

'No I did not' は質問に対する現在の習慣であれば 'No, I do not' が自然です。'likes to riding car' は不正確で 'likes driving cars' が正しい形です。また 'I my hobby was definitely different trains it goes to opposite side' は文法的に崩れているため、意味を明確にして 'my hobby is definitely different; I prefer trains, which go in the opposite direction' のように修正しました。冠詞や動名詞の使い方、時制の一致に注意してください。

× But I really like this hobby and I admire his hobby too.

✓ But I really like my hobby and I admire his hobby too.

前の文脈では自分の趣味を話しているため 'this hobby' より 'my hobby' の方が明確です。代名詞の参照先を明確にすることで、意味がよりはっきり伝わります。改善案: 代名詞が何を指すかを常に明確にすること。