Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 문법을 다듬고, 더 구체적인 정보(예: 어떤 장르, 언제 듣는지)를 추가하세요. 또한 반복되는 표현을 줄이고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예: 주제문으로 시작하고 그 다음에 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: My hobby is listening to music. I especially enjoy pop and acoustic songs because they relax me after a long day. For example, I often listen to playlists while commuting or doing homework, and I sometimes discover new tracks from TV shows I watch.

Gợi ý: 과거 시제를 명확히 사용하고, 구체적인 예시와 연결어를 넣어 설명을 확장하세요. 불필요한 말(umm)을 줄이고 두세 문장으로 간결하게 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed drawing when I was a child. Because I loved animation, I often drew characters from my favorite shows, and I would spend hours practicing different poses and expressions.

Gợi ý: 기억이 안 난다고 말하기보다는 확신을 가지고 답하세요. 현재완료(have had) 형태를 사용해 지속성을 표현하고, 구체적인 기간이나 이유를 덧붙이세요. 중복 표현('really, really')을 줄이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have had a passion for music since childhood. I have always loved listening to songs because they cheer me up and help me concentrate while studying.

Gợi ý: 주어와 동사 일치, 자연스러운 표현으로 문장을 고치고 구체적인 빈도나 활동을 추가하세요. 예를 들어 도서관에 얼마나 자주 가는지, 어떤 종류의 책을 읽는지 말하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy reading, so we often go to the library together on weekends. We usually borrow fiction and fantasy novels and then recommend books to each other.

× MMM my hobby is listening music.

✓ MMM my hobby is listening to music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object (listen to music). Use the gerund 'listening' correctly with the preposition. Suggestion: say 'listening to music'.

× When I was young I often find the music of TV shows so I like it.

✓ When I was young I often found the music of TV shows, so I liked it.

This sentence refers to past habits, so the verbs should be in past tense. 'Find' should be 'found' and 'like' should be 'liked' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use past simple for past routines: 'I often found... so I liked...'. Also add a comma before 'so'.

× I think I like drawing.

✓ I think I like drawing.

This sentence is acceptable as it expresses a current opinion using present tense. No grammatical correction needed; keep present simple for general likes. (Included for completeness; no change required.)

× Umm, I like animation, so I draw the character of my favorite animation.

✓ Umm, I like animation, so I draw characters from my favorite animations.

The original repeats 'animation' awkwardly and misuses 'the' and singular/plural form. Use plural 'characters' and 'animations' or specify a single title. 'Of' is less natural than 'from' when referring to characters belonging to a show. Suggestion: 'draw characters from my favorite animations'.

× MMM, I can't remember about this, but actually I think listening to music too because I really, really love music.

✓ MMM, I can't remember exactly, but I think I have liked listening to music since childhood because I really, really love it.

'Remember about this' is awkward; say 'remember exactly'. To express a hobby since childhood use present perfect 'have liked' or simple past depending on context. Also avoid repeating 'music'; replace second with 'it'. Suggestion: 'I have liked listening to music since childhood.'

× Yes I have me and my sister like reading books so we are go to library together.

✓ Yes, my sister and I like reading books, so we go to the library together.

'I have me and my sister' is ungrammatical; use 'my sister and I'. Use simple present 'like' for habitual actions. 'Are go to library' is incorrect; use 'go to the library'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Suggestion: 'My sister and I like reading books, so we go to the library together.'