Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答を明確で自然な英語に直し、文法ミスと冗長表現を減らしてください。トピック文（趣味を述べる）を最初に置き、その後で具体例（週末に描く、犬のイラストが得意、作風の特徴）を短くつなげるとよいです。接続語（for example, so, and）や適切な動詞の時制に注意し、意味の分かりにくい表現（I perform cute）を避けてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I usually draw illustrations at the weekend, and I especially like drawing dogs. For example, I often create cute, cartoon-style portraits of pets because I enjoy capturing their expressions.

Gợi ý: 話の構造が不明瞭で文法ミスが多いです。まず子供の頃の趣味を簡潔に述べ（topic sentence）、次に具体例や理由を1〜2文で説明してください。動詞の時制は過去形を使い、不要な語句を省いてください。また、理由を述べる際は接続詞（because, so）を正しく置いてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often played football and explored the nearby forest. I liked being active because it made me feel refreshed and happy.

Gợi ý: 現在完了進行形や過去形の使い方が混在しており不自然です。『子供の頃から続けている』ことを伝える場合は現在完了または現在完了進行形を正しく使い、続けている理由を簡潔に述べてください。文を2〜3文にまとめ、接続語でつなぐと流れが良くなります。

Ví dụ: Yes. I have played football since I was a child and I still play on weekends. I enjoy it because it keeps me fit and I like the social aspect of the game.

Gợi ý: 内容が分かりにくく、語順や語彙の誤りが目立ちます。まず家族と趣味が同じかを明確に答え、どんな音楽が好きかを具体的に述べてください。『私の家族は〜が好きで、私も同じ』という構造を保ち、アーティストについて触れるなら簡潔に説明してください。

Ví dụ: Yes. My family and I both enjoy listening to music. We often listen to rock and Japanese pop, and we sometimes follow the same artists together.

× Yes I do. I usually draw paintings in the weekend and I like dogs.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually paint on the weekend and I like dogs.

The student used 'draw paintings' which is awkward; 'paint' is the more natural verb for making paintings. Also use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' for time expression. Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation.

× I usually draw dogs and my style is illustrations.

✓ I usually draw dogs, and my style is illustrative.

'Illustrations' is a noun; to describe style use the adjective 'illustrative.' Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× I perform cute.

✓ I draw in a cute style.

'Perform cute' is ungrammatical; 'perform' is the wrong verb and 'cute' needs to modify how you draw. Use 'draw in a cute style' to express artistic style.

× Yes I did. I think that when I was a child. I often play football and working for in the forest because I like to move my physical and it makes me refreshed so I often.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often played football and worked in the forest because I liked being active and it made me feel refreshed.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: after 'When I was a child' use past tense consistently ('played', 'worked', 'liked', 'made'). 'Working for in the forest' is incorrect; use 'worked in the forest.' 'Move my physical' should be 'being active' or 'moving my body.' 'It makes me refreshed' should be past 'it made me feel refreshed.' Also fix sentence structure and remove fragments.

× Yes I do. I have been played football.

✓ Yes, I do. I have played football.

'Have been played' is incorrect: present perfect uses 'have played' for experience. 'Have been playing' would be the present perfect continuous, but here 'have played' fits the meaning of having had the hobby.

× I usually played it on the weekend because I like to move my body and I like exercise so.

✓ I usually played it on the weekend because I liked to move my body and I liked exercising.

When referring to past habits use past tense throughout: 'played', 'liked'. 'I like exercise so' is incomplete; use 'I liked exercising' or 'I liked to exercise.' Ensure sentence ends properly.

× Yes I do, my primary like to listen to music and I like it too.

✓ Yes, I do. My parents like to listen to music, and I like it too.

'My primary' is incorrect; likely intended 'my parents.' Also add punctuation and use plural verb agreement 'parents like.'

× Music genre is rock and Japanese pop music and me and family.

✓ Our favorite music genres are rock and Japanese pop, and my family and I listen to them.

Sentence fragments and incorrect structure: use plural 'genres' and a complete clause. 'Me and family' should be 'my family and I.' Make verbs and nouns agree.

× Rex same artist.

✓ We like the same artists.

'Rex' is unclear and ungrammatical. Likely meant 'We like the same artist(s).' Use 'we' as the subject and plural 'artists' if more than one, and include a verb 'like'.