Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., remove duplicate words, fix verb forms) and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I have several hobbies, including dancing, singing and listening to music. Recently I prefer listening to music because it helps me relax after a busy day. I would also like to try art in the future, but I haven't had much time to practice.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer about childhood hobbies, use past tense correctly and provide a clear reason with specific details. Avoid filler phrases and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, 'when', 'because', 'however').

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I enjoyed dancing a lot and took part in school shows. However, as I grew older I started listening to music more because it is easier to enjoy on my own and helps me concentrate. Dancing is still something I like, but I do it less often now.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and organize sentences clearly. Use present perfect or simple present appropriately to show continuity (e.g., 'I have enjoyed dancing since childhood'). Provide specific examples and avoid awkward phrasing like 'I still used to'.

Ví dụ: I have enjoyed dancing since childhood and I particularly love performing Nepalese traditional dances. I also dance to modern styles such as hip hop and pop, especially at family gatherings and cultural events. Dancing remains one of my main hobbies.

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then contrast with specific family hobbies using linking words like 'however' or 'while'. Clarify phrases like 'into director or production' (use 'filmmaking' or 'video production').

Ví dụ: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. While some of them enjoy playing video games or working in filmmaking and production, I prefer dancing, singing and listening to music. However, we still support each other’s interests.

× Yes, I have many hobbies like dancing, singing and listening to music and I would I would also love to do art but nowadays I'm into listening to music more rather than dancing, art or listening.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies like dancing, singing and listening to music, and I would also love to do art, but nowadays I'm more into listening to music than dancing or doing art.

This sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I would I would' and awkward parallel structure. Classified under sentence structure errors (ID 26). Remove the duplicate words and make the list parallel: use 'more into X than Y' for comparison and keep verb forms consistent ('doing art' parallels 'dancing'). Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses for clarity.

× So I don't remember anything when I was child what my parents used to say.

✓ I don't remember anything from when I was a child about what my parents used to say.

This contains an article error and awkward word order. Classified under article errors (ID 22) and sentence structure (ID 26). Use 'a child' not 'child', and use 'from when I was a child' or 'when I was a child' with 'about what' to introduce the reported content. Avoid starting with 'So' in formal answers.

× I really enjoy dancing when I was styled, but as I'm grown up now, I'm into listening to music more rather than dancing because listening to music can make me make my.

✓ I really enjoyed dancing when I was young, but now that I'm grown up, I'm more into listening to music than dancing because music helps me relax.

Original has incorrect tense and unclear phrase 'when I was styled' and an incomplete clause 'make me make my'. Classified under past tense issue (ID 5) and sentence structure (ID 26). Use past tense 'enjoyed' for childhood, 'when I was young' is correct, 'now that I'm grown up' indicates present contrast, and complete the reason with a clear clause like 'helps me relax'.

× So since childhood I really enjoy dancing and I love to dance in any Nepalese traditional song and I still used to, I still like to dance in all different kinds of songs like traditional songs, hip hop songs or normal casual songs.

✓ Since childhood I have really enjoyed dancing, and I love to dance to any Nepalese traditional song. I still like to dance to many different kinds of songs, such as traditional, hip hop, or casual pop songs.

This contains tense inconsistency and incorrect use of 'used to' with 'still'. Classified under present tense issue (ID 6) and incorrect verb form usage (ID 8/26). Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' to express a hobby from childhood continuing to now. Use 'dance to' not 'dance in'. Remove 'I still used to' because 'used to' implies past habit; 'still like' expresses continued preference. Clarify 'casual songs' as 'casual pop songs' for naturalness.

× No, our family members have many different varieties of hobbies and my hobbies do not match with them at all as they love playing games or into director or production.

✓ No, my family members have a wide variety of hobbies, and my hobbies do not match theirs at all; they love playing games or are interested in directing or production.

Problems: wrong pronoun 'our' vs 'my' for family members in relation to the speaker, awkward phrase 'different varieties of hobbies', and incorrect structure 'into director or production'. Classified under incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and sentence structure (ID 26). Use 'my family members' and 'theirs' to show possession. Use 'a wide variety of hobbies' for natural expression, and 'are interested in directing or production' to correct the verb form.

× But I'm into dancing, singing and listening to music more.

✓ But I'm more into dancing, singing, and listening to music.

This is mainly a word-order and emphasis issue (sentence structure ID 26). Place 'more' before the list to clearly indicate preference; include commas in the list for parallelism.