Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you have any hobbies?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. One of my hobbies are playing darts. I started it up about five years ago. My friends invited me to join them, so the more I throw it, the more I wanted to practice.
Giám khảo
Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did. When I was a child I enjoyed umm, drawing or other creative things because it felt like I was really relaxing so.
Giám khảo
Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?
Thí sinh
It's not the hobby, but I still enjoy drawing and painting. Umm umm. When I have free time or I wanted to relax, I sometimes draw or paint. MMM.
Giám khảo
Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?
Thí sinh
Actually, no. Uh, we have different hobbies. Like I like playing darts and my mother and the sister really enjoy playing table tennis. Umm, but sometimes we do something together.
Do you have any hobbies?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 全体的に意味は通じますが、文法ミスと冗長表現が目立ちます。主な改善点:1) 主語と動詞の一致("One of my hobbies is")。2) 不要な語句を減らし、より自然な接続表現を使う("I started about five years ago when my friends invited me"のようにまとめる)。3) 詳細を一つか二つ具体的に加えると回答が豊かになる(どのくらい練習するか、どこでプレーするかなど)。具体的練習法:文を短く明確にし、接続語(when, so, because)を効果的に使う。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. One of my hobbies is playing darts. I started about five years ago when my friends invited me, and I practise twice a week at a local pub because I enjoy the challenge.
Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 答えは分かりますが、声のためらいやフィラー("umm", "so")が多く、締めくくりが不自然です。主な改善点:1) フィラーを減らして簡潔に答える("I enjoyed drawing and other creative activities")。2) 理由をはっきり述べ、接続詞でつなぐ("because it helped me relax")。3) 具体例を一つ加えると良い(何を描いていたか等)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I enjoyed drawing and other creative activities because they helped me relax. For example, I used to draw animals and scenes from books.
Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 意味は伝わりますが、混乱を招く表現と時制の不一致、フィラーが多いです。改善点:1) 質問に対して直接的に答える("Yes, I have continued to enjoy drawing since childhood")。2) 時制を統一する("when I have free time")3) フィラーを減らし、頻度や具体的な状況を付け加える("a few times a month"、"at home"など)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have. I still enjoy drawing and painting since childhood. When I have free time, I often draw at home, usually a few times a month to relax.
Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 答えは明確ですが、不明瞭な語("the sister")やフィラーがあり、細部がやや曖昧です。改善点:1) 家族を述べるときは関係をはっきりさせる("my sister")。2) 比較や頻度を加えると良い("we usually have different hobbies, but sometimes we play together")。3) 具体的な共同活動例を一つ述べると説得力が増す(どのくらいの頻度で一緒に遊ぶか、どの活動か)。
Ví dụ: Not really. We usually have different hobbies — I like playing darts, while my mother and sister enjoy table tennis. However, we sometimes play together at family gatherings, maybe once a month.
× One of my hobbies are playing darts.
✓ One of my hobbies is playing darts.
主語は 'One'(単数)であるため動詞も単数形 'is' を使う必要があります。'One of my hobbies' は 'is' を取る構造なので 'are' は誤りです。改善方法: 主語の数に注意し、'one of + plural noun' の後は単数動詞を使うことを確認してください.
× I started it up about five years ago.
✓ I started playing it about five years ago.
'start up' は通常機械などを始動する意味で使われ、ここではスポーツを始めたことを表すため動名詞 'playing' が適切です。改善方法: 'start' の後に動詞を続ける場合、意味に応じて動名詞(playing)を使う習慣を確認してください.
× My friends invited me to join them, so the more I throw it, the more I wanted to practice.
✓ My friends invited me to join them, so the more I threw it, the more I wanted to practice.
文脈は過去の出来事を述べているため、比較構文の中の動詞も過去形に合わせる必要があります。'the more... the more...' 構文では両方の節の時制を一致させてください。改善方法: 一つの時制(この場合過去)に統一して動詞を変化させること.
× When I was a child I enjoyed umm, drawing or other creative things because it felt like I was really relaxing so.
✓ When I was a child I enjoyed drawing and other creative things because it felt like I was really relaxed.
'relaxing' は物や行為が受け手にリラックスさせる性質を表す現在分詞であり、ここでは '自分がリラックスしている状態' を表す形容詞的過去分詞 'relaxed' が適切です。また 'drawing or other creative things' は 'drawing and other creative things' の方が自然です。改善方法: 自分の感情を表すときは 'relaxed' のような過去分詞/形容詞を使うことを意識してください.
× It's not the hobby, but I still enjoy drawing and painting.
✓ It's not the same hobby, but I still enjoy drawing and painting.
元の文は意味がやや不明瞭で、ここでは『同じ趣味ではない』と言いたい意図があるため 'the hobby' ではなく 'the same hobby' を用いるべきです。'there be' の直接の誤りではないが記事と語句の選択が不適切なので修正しました。改善方法: 比較や同一性を表す場合は 'same' を明示してください.
× When I have free time or I wanted to relax, I sometimes draw or paint.
✓ When I have free time or want to relax, I sometimes draw or paint.
節内の動詞の時制と形を一致させる必要があります。'When I have'(現在)に続く並列要素は現在形 'want' を使うべきで、'wanted' は過去形で不一致です。改善方法: 並列の動詞は同じ時制・形で統一すること.
× Like I like playing darts and my mother and the sister really enjoy playing table tennis.
✓ For example, I like playing darts and my mother and sister really enjoy playing table tennis.
'the sister' は特定の姉妹を指す場合を除き不自然で、複数並列では冠詞を省くか 'my sister' とするのが普通です。ここでは 'my mother and sister' が自然です。改善方法: 家族を列挙する場合、各名詞に定冠詞を付けないか個別に 'my' を付けること.
× Umm, but sometimes we do something together.
✓ Sometimes we do things together.
'Umm, but' の組み合わせは口語的で冗長です。より簡潔に 'Sometimes we do things together.' とすることで自然な流れになります。改善方法: 口語の間投詞や接続詞を省き、簡潔な文にまとめること.