Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 전반적으로 자연하지만 몇 군데 어색한 표현과 중복이 있습니다. 예를 들어 'making photos' 대신 'taking photos'를 쓰고, 'when I go to travel' 대신 'when I travel'로 고치는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한 두 가지 취미를 소개할 때 연결어를 사용해 응답을 더 논리적으로 만들고, 구체적인 예시(어떤 종류의 영화나 좋아하는 촬영 장소)를 한두 개 덧붙이면 내용의 깊이가 증가합니다.

Ví dụ: I enjoy watching films and animated series on Netflix because they help me relax after a busy day. In addition, I like taking photos of beautiful landscapes when I travel, especially coastal views and mountain scenes, which I later edit and share with friends.

Gợi ý: 전반적으로 의미는 전달되지만 어순과 전치사 사용에 오류가 있습니다. 'rode bicycles with my dad and Han River Park'는 잘못된 구조로, 'rode bicycles with my dad at the Han River Park'처럼 장소를 명확히 해야 합니다. 또한 같은 의미의 표현('refreshed and relaxed')이 반복되어 다양성이 부족합니다. 연결어를 활용해 경험의 빈도나 이유를 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I often rode my bicycle with my dad at the Han River Park after school. Those rides usually helped me feel relaxed and refreshed, and I remember them as a special time because we talked about school and future plans.

Gợi ý: 시제를 일관되게 유지하고 동사 형태를 바로잡아야 합니다. 예: 'I have liked'보다는 'I have liked' 보다 자연스러운 'I have enjoyed' 또는 'I have liked listening to music since I was a child' 유지 가능하지만 이후 문장은 과거·현재 시제 혼동('often listen' 대신 'often listened', 'make playlists' 대신 'making playlists' 또는 'I still make playlists')을 바로잡아야 합니다. 또한 구체적인 예시(특히 좋아하는 아티스트나 최근에 발견한 곡)를 하나 추가하면 답변이 더 인상적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have enjoyed listening to music since I was a child. When I was young, I often listened to pop and K-pop in the car, and nowadays I still enjoy discovering new artists and making playlists, for example a recent indie playlist I created for relaxing work sessions.

Gợi ý: 답변에 장소 이름의 철자 오류('Hanover' 대신 'Han River' 혹은 실제 공원명 확인 필요)와 반복적 표현('relaxed and reflexed, refreshed' 중복 및 오타)가 있습니다. 'We can'보다는 자연스러운 과거·현재 표현('We enjoy')을 사용하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 얼마나 자주, 어떤 활동을 함께 하는지). 또한 문장을 연결할 때 'and'나 'so' 등의 연결어를 사용해 응답을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often ride bikes with my dad at the Han River Park near our house. We enjoy the fresh air and it helps us stay healthy, and after a long ride we both feel relaxed and re-energised.

× I enjoy watching movies or animations on Netflix because it helps me relax after a busy day.

✓ I enjoy watching movies or animated shows on Netflix because they help me relax after a busy day.

The phrase 'animations' is awkward; 'animated shows' is more natural. Also 'it helps' disagrees with plural subject 'movies or animated shows', so change to 'they help'. Use gerund 'watching' correctly; ensure subject-verb agreement with the compound noun.

× Also, I enjoy making photos of beautiful landscapes when I go to travel.

✓ Also, I enjoy taking photos of beautiful landscapes when I travel.

In English, 'take photos' is the correct collocation, not 'make photos'. 'Go to travel' is ungrammatical; use 'travel' or 'go traveling'. Use the simple present 'when I travel' to indicate occasions.

× When I was a child, I often rode bicycles with my dad and Han River Park after school.

✓ When I was a child, I often rode bicycles with my dad in Han River Park after school.

The original phrase 'with my dad and Han River Park' incorrectly coordinates a person and a place. Use a preposition 'in Han River Park' to indicate location.

× It made me feel refreshed and relaxed.

✓ It made me feel refreshed and relaxed.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× Also, I really enjoyed that time with him.

✓ Also, I really enjoyed that time with him.

This sentence is acceptable. Pronoun use is correct; no change necessary.

× Yes, I have liked listening to music since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have liked listening to music since I was a child.

While 'have liked' is grammatically possible, the more natural present perfect form is 'have liked' or 'have enjoyed'. This sentence is acceptable, though 'have enjoyed' may sound more idiomatic.

× When I was young I often listen to pop songs and K pop in the car, and nowadays I still enjoy discovering new artists and make playlists.

✓ When I was young, I often listened to pop songs and K-pop in the car, and nowadays I still enjoy discovering new artists and making playlists.

Mixing past 'when I was young' with present 'listen' is a tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'listened'. Also parallel structure requires 'enjoy discovering... and making playlists' (both gerunds). Hyphenate 'K-pop'.

× Yes, I still ride bikes with my dad at Hanover Park near my house.

✓ Yes, I still ride bikes with my dad at Hanover Park near my house.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Ride' matches first person plural/ singular context; no change needed.

× We can enjoy the fresh air and maintain our health.

✓ We can enjoy the fresh air and maintain our health.

This sentence is correct. Pronoun use 'we' and 'our' is appropriate.

× Also, we can feel relaxed and reflexed, refreshed.

✓ Also, we can feel relaxed and refreshed.

The word 'reflexed' is incorrect in this context; likely a typo. Use the adjective 'refreshed'. Remove redundancy by keeping 'relaxed and refreshed'.