Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Sure, there are many different kinds of rules for students at my school. Personally, I think most rules are good for people, but I think some rules also restrict people's life.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Absolutely not. I think more roots can't help people to be a better person. Personally, I think students should have more time to do something which they like to do, and they need to more sense of security from that.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Thí sinh
Sure, one of my university teacher do her job very well, she's a very good person, she always can help people to improve their ability to her class and plus they actually give some assistance for people in their life.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答时应避免重复表达,且语言更自然流畅。例如,'many different kinds of rules'可以简化为'many rules'。此外,'restrict people's life'表达不够地道,可以改为'limit students' freedom'。
Ví dụ: Yes, there are many rules at my school. I believe most of them are beneficial because they help maintain order, but some rules can be a bit restrictive and limit students' freedom.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误,如'more roots'应为'more rules',且表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式,避免语法错误,并且逻辑更连贯。
Ví dụ: Absolutely not. I believe that adding more rules won't help students improve. Instead, they should have more free time to pursue their interests, which can help them feel more secure and motivated.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,如'she always can help'应为'she can always help',且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子,使用正确的时态和语法,并且表达更清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes, one of my university teachers does her job very well. She is kind and always helps students improve their skills in class. Moreover, she offers support to students in their personal lives.
× I think some rules also restrict people's life.
✓ I think some rules also restrict people's lives.
life是不可数名词时表示生命,但在这里指的是人们的生活,应使用复数形式lives。
× I think more roots can't help people to be a better person.
✓ I think more rules can't help people to be better persons.
roots应为rules,且表达“成为更好的人”时,people后不加冠词,且person应复数persons或people。
× they need to more sense of security from that.
✓ they need to have more sense of security from that.
动词need后应接动词不定式have,缺少have导致语法错误。
× one of my university teacher do her job very well,
✓ one of my university teachers does her job very well,
one of后接复数名词teachers,谓语动词应与主语one保持单数形式,故用does。
× she always can help people to improve their ability to her class
✓ she can always help people improve their abilities in her class
动词help后直接接动词原形improve,不用to;ability应复数abilities;介词to her class应改为in her class。
× and plus they actually give some assistance for people in their life.
✓ and they actually give some assistance to people in their lives.
and plus重复连接词,应去掉plus;介词for改为to;life应为复数形式lives。