Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Yes, at my high school we were not allowed to color our hair and we needed to wear uniforms. These rules are quite important in promoting discipline and reducing distractions in class.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
It depends. I think students really need some rules to restrict their behaviors and concentrate on study, but we shouldn't limit too much that nothing to do with their learning.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Thí sinh
Yes, and I would say a college teacher, Mary, she is very responsible and friendly to people and she is also my undergraduate thesis mentor. She teaches me a lot.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 85.0Gợi ý: 你的回答较为自然且内容相关,但可以增加更多具体细节来丰富答案,例如说明这些规则如何具体帮助维持纪律或减少干扰。
Ví dụ: Yes, at my high school, students were not allowed to color their hair and had to wear uniforms. These rules helped maintain discipline by creating a sense of equality among students and reduced distractions, allowing everyone to focus better on their studies.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了观点,但语言稍显笼统,建议使用更清晰的连接词和具体例子来支持观点,使表达更连贯。
Ví dụ: It depends. While some rules are necessary to help students focus and behave appropriately, too many rules unrelated to learning can make students feel restricted and less motivated. For example, strict rules about hairstyles might not improve academic performance.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答内容明确,但句子结构略显简单,建议使用连接词使句子更流畅,并具体说明老师如何帮助你。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have a college teacher named Mary who is very responsible and friendly. She is also my undergraduate thesis mentor, and she has taught me a lot by providing detailed feedback and encouraging me to think critically.
× Yes, at my high school we were not allowed to color our hair and we needed to wear uniforms.
✓ Yes, at my high school we were not allowed to color our hair and we had to wear uniforms.
这里“needed to wear uniforms”用过去式表达义不准确,应该用“had to”表示过去的必须做某事,更符合语境。
× I think students really need some rules to restrict their behaviors and concentrate on study, but we shouldn't limit too much that nothing to do with their learning.
✓ I think students really need some rules to restrict their behaviors and concentrate on study, but we shouldn't limit them too much so that nothing unrelated to their learning is affected.
原句中“limit too much that nothing to do with their learning”结构不正确,缺少连接词和主语,应该用“limit them too much so that nothing unrelated to their learning is affected”来表达限制不应过多,且影响无关学习的内容。
× Yes, and I would say a college teacher, Mary, she is very responsible and friendly to people and she is also my undergraduate thesis mentor.
✓ Yes, and I would say a college teacher, Mary, is very responsible and friendly to people and she is also my undergraduate thesis mentor.
句中“Mary, she is”出现了重复主语,应该去掉“she”,避免重复。