Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers (Yes/No and frequency), then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb tenses. Use linking words (e.g., “when,” “so”) correctly and keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like buying shoes and I used to buy them quite often when I was at college. At that time, I bought a variety of styles — high heels for parties, sneakers for everyday wear and boots for colder weather. Now I buy shoes less frequently.

Gợi ý: Clarify tense and avoid unclear phrases. Give a concise topic sentence and one reason with a specific example. Replace vague or incorrect expressions (e.g., “the wandering industry”) with clear language like “busy schedule” or “long queues.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it’s much more convenient for me. For example, I can compare styles and sizes quickly and have them delivered, which saves time when I’m busy with work.

Gợi ý: Give a precise estimate and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence stating a typical monthly amount, then briefly explain why (e.g., number of pairs or quality). Use rounded figures and one linking phrase for coherence.

Ví dụ: I usually spend around $100 to $200 per month on shoes, depending on whether I need just one pair or several. For instance, if I’m replacing worn-out sneakers and buying a dress pair, the total tends to be closer to $200.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and correct grammar. Begin with a clear preference and provide a brief reason and contrast with the past. Avoid errors like “my food more comfortable” and repetition of “for now.” Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “now”) to show contrast.

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes now, because I value practicality in my daily life. However, when I was in college I cared more about fashionable shoes and often chose dressy styles for social events.

× Oh yes, I used to when I'm in college I always buy different different kind of shoes in different styles.

✓ Oh yes, I used to. When I was in college I always bought different kinds of shoes in different styles.

Mixed tense and wrong plural form: 'used to' refers to past so follow with past tense 'was' not 'I'm'. 'Buy' should be past 'bought'. 'Different kind' requires plural 'kinds'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use 'different kinds of shoes'.

× I brought high heels and sneakers and boots for some fashion

✓ I bought high heels and sneakers and boots for fashion.

Incorrect verb form: 'brought' means 'carried' but intended 'bought' (past of buy). Also 'for some fashion' is unnatural; use 'for fashion' or 'for style'. Suggestion: use 'bought' and simplify phrase to 'for fashion'.

× Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient and I don't have many time to go shopping and the wandering industry.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient and I don't have much time to go shopping, and I dislike window shopping.

Tense mostly present but quantifier error 'many time' should be 'much time' (uncountable). 'Wandering industry' is incorrect phrase; likely 'window shopping' or 'wandering around stores'. Suggestion: use 'much time' and replace unclear phrase with 'window shopping'.

× So mostly I bought shoes online.

✓ So mostly I buy shoes online.

Inconsistent tense: earlier sentence uses present 'usually buy', so 'bought' (past) is inconsistent; use present simple 'buy' to match habitual action. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual behaviors.

× Um, let me think maybe a hundred or two hundred per wee per month.

✓ Um, let me think, maybe one hundred or two hundred per week or per month.

Typos and unclear time unit: 'wee per month' is incorrect. Also numbers should be 'one hundred' etc. Clarify whether amount is per week or per month. Suggestion: decide correct period and write clearly: 'one hundred or two hundred per week' or 'per month'.

× I can't remember exactly Uh maybe maybe about two hundred, I think.

✓ I can't remember exactly. Maybe about two hundred, I think.

Minor punctuation and repetition: keep present tense 'can't remember'. Remove duplicate 'maybe' and add sentence break. Suggestion: simplify to 'I can't remember exactly; maybe about two hundred.'

× It changed.

✓ It changed.

Short answer acceptable but ambiguous: 'It changed' is past tense matching context, no grammar error. No correction needed. Suggestion: could be more natural as 'My preference changed.'

× When I was in college, I prefer the shoe sets that looks well.

✓ When I was in college, I preferred shoes that looked good.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was in college' (past) should pair with past 'preferred'. Subject-verb agreement and adjective use: 'shoe sets' unnatural; use 'shoes'. 'Looks well' is incorrect: use past 'looked' and adjective 'good'. Suggestion: use 'preferred shoes that looked good.'

× But for now, I just want my food more comfortable, so for now, I just choose some sneakers to wear.

✓ But now, I just want my feet to be more comfortable, so I choose sneakers to wear.

Many issues: 'for now' repeated; 'want my food' is wrong word 'feet'; 'more comfortable' requires structure 'want my feet to be more comfortable' or 'prefer comfort'. Tense: present 'choose' fits current preference. Suggestion: say 'now I prefer comfort, so I choose sneakers.'