Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid tense errors and unclear phrases (e.g. “exclamation shoes”). Use linking words like “nowadays” or “occasionally.”

Ví dụ: I don't buy shoes very often. Nowadays I only own two or three pairs and I usually buy new shoes only for special events or when an old pair wears out. In the future, if I find styles I really like, I might build a small collection.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer: give a brief topic sentence, then two specific details (what happened and outcome). Avoid profanity and filler words like “uh.” Use past simple consistently and mention actions clearly (ordered, returned, complained).

Ví dụ: Yes, I once bought shoes online, but it turned out to be a bad experience. The shoes arrived dirty and of poor quality, so I returned them and the seller refused to refund me. After that I reported the shop to the platform and I now check reviews before buying online.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear amount and explain briefly why. Remove hedging words like “like” and repetitive phrases. Use linking words to show reason (for example, “because” or “so”).

Ví dụ: I rarely buy shoes, but when I do I usually spend about $200 on a good branded pair because I prefer high quality and durability.

Gợi ý: Personalize the answer and state your own preference first, then give a reason and an example. Avoid generalizations about “a person” and correct grammar (e.g. “wants”). Use linking words like “however” or “because.”

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet a lot and comfort matters most to me. However, I sometimes buy fashionable shoes for special occasions when style is important.

× When I used to be a kid I used to have a lot of shoes, but as I grow older and now I only have two to three pairs of shoes and I don't usually buy shoes randomly.

✓ When I was a kid I used to have a lot of shoes, but as I have grown older I only have two to three pairs of shoes and I don't usually buy shoes randomly.

The original sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly: 'When I used to be a kid' is ungrammatical; the correct past form is 'When I was a kid.' Also 'as I grow older and now' mixes present with past habitual; use present perfect 'as I have grown older' to show change up to now. This fixes tense consistency and uses the correct verb forms. Suggestion: keep time reference consistent (past for childhood, present perfect for change leading to now).

× And in the future if I need to have exclamation shoes, I will probably have a collection.

✓ In the future, if I need special shoes, I will probably build a collection.

'Need to have exclamation shoes' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'need special shoes' or another clear noun phrase. 'Have a collection' is acceptable but 'build a collection' sounds more natural for accumulating items. Maintain future tense 'will probably' for the prediction. Suggestion: replace unclear phrase with a clear noun and use a natural collocation like 'build a collection.'

× Once I ordered shoes online and uh, that was a scam.

✓ Once I ordered shoes online and it was a scam.

Using 'that was a scam' is understandable but 'it was a scam' is more natural when referring to a prior order. No major tense error, but simplified pronoun improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'it' to refer to the previous clause for smoother speech.

× When the shoes came it was nothing that I expected and it was so dirty and ******* ***** shoes that may ruin my day and uh I dispatched my order uh, and returned it and I didn't get the refund either and the delivery guy was mad at me.

✓ When the shoes arrived they were nothing like what I expected; they were so dirty and poorly made that they ruined my day. I canceled the order, returned them, and I didn't get a refund, and the delivery person was upset with me.

Problems: 'When the shoes came it was nothing that I expected' has number and reference mismatches; 'shoes' plural requires plural pronouns and verbs: 'they were' and 'nothing like what I expected.' '******* *****' suggests an adjective phrase like 'poorly made' rather than two censored words; use a clear adjective. 'May ruin my day' is modal and speculative in past context; use past 'ruined my day.' 'Dispatched my order' is incorrect: customer does not 'dispatch' an order; they 'canceled' or 'returned' it. 'Delivery guy' is informal; 'delivery person' is neutral. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and pronouns, use appropriate verbs for actions (cancel, return), and keep tense consistent in recounting past events.

× As I told you, I don't often buy shoes, but on the occasions I try to purchase the high quality and branded shoes, so it costs around like $200.00, so yeah.

✓ As I told you, I don't often buy shoes, but on occasions I try to purchase high-quality, branded shoes, so they cost around $200.

Errors: 'on the occasions' should be 'on occasions' or 'on special occasions.' 'the high quality and branded shoes' has article and adjective order issues: use 'high-quality, branded shoes' without 'the.' 'so it costs around like $200.00' has pronoun and filler problems: use plural pronoun 'they' for shoes and avoid both 'around' and 'like' together; write 'around $200.' Suggestion: use hyphen for compound adjective 'high-quality,' remove unnecessary articles, and keep quantifier phrases concise.

× If a person want to show or have a sense of fashion, then he will probably go for the fashion one.

✓ If a person wants to show a sense of fashion, then he will probably choose the fashionable option.

'If a person want' has subject-verb agreement error; singular subject 'person' requires 'wants.' 'have a sense of fashion' is acceptable but 'show a sense of fashion' is clearer. 'the fashion one' is informal and awkward; use 'the fashionable option' or 'fashionable shoes.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with singular subject and use natural noun phrases for choices.

× And if we want comfort and we want to be relaxed and I guess the, uh, comfort shoe is good for us.

✓ And if someone wants comfort and wants to be relaxed, I guess comfortable shoes are good for them.

Mixed pronouns and number: original mixes 'we' and 'I' and uses singular 'comfort shoe' with plural context. Use consistent indefinite pronouns: 'someone' and 'them' or keep 'we' throughout. 'Comfort shoe' should be 'comfortable shoes.' Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and match singular/plural across sentence elements.