Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrase "personal needs" and try a short linking word like "because" to show reason.

Ví dụ: Not really. I only buy shoes when I need them because I prefer to spend my money on essentials like clothes or household items. For example, I might replace a worn pair every year rather than buying new styles.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and tighten structure: use one topic sentence, then two clear supporting points linked with connectors. Fix subject-verb agreement and reduce redundancy ("budget friendly" and "better deals" overlap).

Ví dụ: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it’s convenient and usually cheaper, with better discounts. Also, I always read customer reviews first so I can avoid poor fit or low-quality products.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, natural topic sentence and use correct currency/context. Be specific and add brief explanation for the range. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

Ví dụ: It depends, but I usually spend between $30 and $100 on a pair of shoes. I pick cheaper pairs for everyday use and save more for special shoes like formal or running shoes.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence and use clearer linking words ("however", "when"). Correct small grammar errors and provide a brief reason for each preference.

Ví dụ: It depends on the occasion. When I go to a fancy restaurant or a club I prefer fashionable shoes because they look smarter; however, for long walks or shopping I choose comfortable shoes so I won't get sore feet.

× No, I'm not really into buying shoes.

✓ No, I'm not really into buying shoes.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 'Really' correctly modifies 'into'. Keep as is.

× I only buy them when I need to and I prefer to spend my money on other things like my personal needs.

✓ I only buy them when I need them, and I prefer to spend my money on other things, such as personal necessities.

Original sentence misses repeating the object 'them' after 'need' which can make it unclear and also uses awkward phrase 'my personal needs.' Adding 'them' clarifies the reference and replacing 'like my personal needs' with 'such as personal necessities' makes the meaning more natural. Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× Yes, I find it convenient to shop online because it's budget friendly and have a offer better deals and discounts.

✓ Yes, I find it convenient to shop online because it's budget-friendly and offers better deals and discounts.

Errors: 'budget friendly' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun ('budget-friendly') and 'have a offer' is incorrect. The subject 'it' (online shopping) requires the verb 'offers' (third-person singular). Remove the extraneous 'a' and use 'offers'. Also use a hyphen and correct agreement.

× Also I want to read the customer review before I buy.

✓ Also, I want to read the customer reviews before I buy.

Use plural 'reviews' because multiple customers typically write reviews and 'the customer review' is unnatural here. Add a comma after 'Also' for clarity. Tense 'want to read... before I buy' is acceptable for present intention; no change to verb tense required.

× It depends on my budget but usually I spend on my shoes about 300 to 1000.

✓ It depends on my budget, but usually I spend about 300 to 1,000 on shoes.

Word order: 'spend on my shoes' is awkward; more natural is 'spend ... on shoes' or 'spend on shoes about...'. Place 'about' before the range. Use a comma before 'but'. Format numbers consistently and include commas for thousands. Alternatively specify currency if needed.

× It depends on my errands.

✓ It depends on what I have to do.

'It depends on my errands' is understandable but unnatural. Replace with 'what I have to do' or 'what errands I have' for clearer, idiomatic English.

× If I go to fancy restaurants or club I prefer to wear fashionable shoes but if long walk or going to mall I prefer to comfortable shoes.

✓ If I go to fancy restaurants or a club, I prefer to wear fashionable shoes, but if I go on a long walk or to the mall, I prefer comfortable shoes.

Multiple errors: missing articles 'a club', 'a long walk', and 'the mall' (or 'to the mall' depending on context). Missing subjects/verbs in clauses: add 'I go' before 'on a long walk' and 'to the mall'. Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'comfortable shoes' and use 'prefer comfortable shoes' (no 'to'). Add commas to separate clauses. These changes fix article use and sentence structure.