Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details (frequency and reasons). Avoid fillers (umm) and unclear phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every three to six months because I like to update my style and replace worn-out pairs. I am particularly interested in different designs and materials, so I often spend time choosing ones that are both stylish and comfortable.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer and then provide clear, specific reasons using linking words. Explain concerns in one or two concise sentences (size, fit, trust). Avoid repetition and filler words. If relevant, mention any exception or future possibility to enrich the response.

Ví dụ: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I'm worried about getting the right size and fit. Also, I prefer to try shoes on in-store to check comfort and quality before I buy them.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence that gives a general spending range, then use linking words to explain differences by occasion. Be specific about amounts or examples to make your answer concrete. Keep sentences grammatical and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: It depends on the occasion: for casual shoes I usually spend around $20–$40. For special occasions or formal shoes I might spend $80–$150 because I look for better quality and a nicer design.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a supporting detail or example. Use linking words (because/so) and avoid repeating words or fillers. Mention a concrete consequence or example to justify your preference (e.g., foot pain, long walks) to strengthen the response.

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because they protect my feet and allow me to walk or stand for long periods without pain. For example, I often choose cushioned sneakers for daily use even if they are less trendy, since comfort matters more to my health.

× I'm a really fascinating about the design and the varieties of shoes because, umm, before I used to wear the flat sandals or the silvers, you can call it.

✓ I'm really fascinated by the design and variety of shoes because before I used to wear flat sandals or silver ones.

The student used 'fascinating' (an adjective describing something that causes fascination) instead of 'fascinated' (an adjective describing a person's feeling). Use 'fascinated by' to show what interests you. Also 'the varieties' is better as 'variety' for a general sense, and 'the silvers' is an incorrect noun phrase; 'silver ones' correctly refers to silver shoes. Suggestions: use participial adjective 'fascinated', pair with preposition 'by', and use 'variety' for general countable concept or 'varieties' with 'of' plus plural nouns; say 'silver ones' for shorthand reference.

× But umm, nowadays, because of its comfort and the convenience, I like shoes and.

✓ But nowadays I like shoes because of their comfort and convenience.

The original has awkward structure and wrong pronoun 'its' referring to shoes (plural) and an incomplete ending. Use present simple 'I like' for habitual preference. Use plural possessive 'their' to refer to 'shoes'. Remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb clarity and correct pronoun agreement.

× No, I haven't bought any shoes online and because of the size, uh, and the style, because nowadays there is a scam or fraud and going on in online and then I'm because I like to try it first and, and do, uh, shopping physically.

✓ No, I haven't bought any shoes online because of sizing and style issues, and because there is online fraud nowadays; I prefer to try shoes on first and shop in person.

Sentence contains multiple issues: redundancy and wrong prepositions ('in online' should be 'online'), awkward clause order, and incorrect phrasing 'I'm because I like'. The present perfect 'I haven't bought' is fine. Fix preposition use by using 'online' as an adverb, and use noun phrases 'sizing and style issues.' Use 'try shoes on' for correct verb phrase and 'shop in person' for physical shopping. Suggestions: simplify clauses, use correct prepositions, and keep logical clause order.

× I actually depends on the for what kind of occasion I'm buying the shoes.

✓ It actually depends on what kind of occasion I'm buying the shoes for.

Original has incorrect verb form 'depends' with wrong subject 'I'. The impersonal 'It depends on' is appropriate, so use 'It depends on'. Also word order 'on the for what' is incorrect; place 'for' at the end or restructure as shown. Suggestion: use 'It depends on' for general statements and correct prepositional placement.

× If it's for just a casual thing because I like the design and and their style, I'm spending less.

✓ If it's just for a casual occasion and I like the design and style, I spend less.

Use 'occasion' rather than 'thing' for formality and clarity. Present simple 'I spend less' is better for habitual actions rather than 'I'm spending less' which implies ongoing action. Remove duplicate 'and'. 'Their style' is vague; 'the design and style' is clearer. Suggestion: use concise nouns and simple present for habitual spending.

× But it if it is for the special occasion I definitely spend a lot a bit more.

✓ But if it is for a special occasion, I definitely spend a bit more.

Original has duplicated words 'But it if' and awkward phrasing 'a lot a bit more.' Use 'a bit more' or 'a lot more' but not both. Use commas for clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicates and choose one quantifier.

× I definitely go go with the comfortable shoes because, uh, fastens can come and go because it's just like a season, but the comfort it's, it's the necessity for your health and uh, so I definitely go with the confessors.

✓ I definitely go with comfortable shoes because fashions come and go with the seasons, but comfort is necessary for your health, so I definitely choose comfort.

Multiple errors: duplicated 'go go', 'fastens' is likely 'fashions' (spelling), 'it's, it's the necessity' is ungrammatical—use 'comfort is necessary'. 'Confessors' is incorrect word (likely 'comfort' or 'comfortable ones'); I rephrased to 'choose comfort.' Use plural 'fashions' and correct 'seasons'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, choose correct vocabulary ('fashions', 'choose comfort'), and use clear subject-verb structure 'comfort is necessary'.