Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, use correct grammar and a clear structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Also give a simple time frequency phrase (e.g. 'often', 'every few months').

Ví dụ: Yes, I love buying shoes. I buy new shoes every few months because I enjoy collecting different styles. For example, last week I bought a pair for my sister's birthday because they were comfortable and looked shiny.

Gợi ý: Use simple past or present perfect correctly and be specific about platforms and reasons. Organize: state yes/no, then give one clear reason with linking word, and a brief example. Avoid unclear phrases ('shoes of the collar', 'suits').

Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I often buy from Instagram and TikTok shops because their designs catch my eye, and I like browsing photos and reviews before I order.

Gợi ý: Give a clear amount and time frame, use correct tense and numbers, and avoid unclear terms. Start with a direct answer (e.g. 'Around $50 every three months'), then briefly justify the cost and give an example. Keep sentences short and accurate.

Ví dụ: I usually spend about 6000 (local currency) on shoes every three months. I prefer paying more for comfortable and colorful shoes because they last longer and suit my style.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and structured. To improve, make it slightly more concise and use linking words to contrast (e.g. 'however' or 'but') and avoid filler words. Add a brief example to support your preference.

Ví dụ: I prefer both. For parties or formal events I choose fashionable shoes because they look smart; however, for school or casual outings I opt for comfortable shoes so I can walk easily.

× Of course I love buying shoes like I'm very big fan of the shoes.

✓ Of course I love buying shoes; I'm a big fan of them.

Used 'very big fan of the shoes' and 'like' unnecessarily. 'Big fan' requires article 'a' and pronoun 'them' for 'shoes'. Remove filler 'like' and add appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: use 'I'm a big fan of shoes' or 'I'm a big fan of them.'

× Mostly I love to buy very costly shoes because it's very comfortable and very shiny.

✓ Mostly I like to buy expensive shoes because they are comfortable and shiny.

Used 'very costly' and 'it's' incorrectly. 'Shoes' is plural so use 'they are' not 'it's'. 'Costly' is correct but 'expensive' is more natural. Also avoid repeated 'very'.

× For example, last last week I bought shoes for my sister birthday, so I often.

✓ For example, last week I bought shoes for my sister's birthday.

Repeated 'last' is redundant. 'Sister birthday' needs possessive 'sister's'. The trailing 'so I often' is incomplete; remove it. Use simple past 'bought' which is correct.

× Yes I definitely I had bought shoes from online because through the Tiktok I get influenced and I love to buy the shoes of the collar, the design and I get attracted through Instagram pages so I oftenly love to buy suits.

✓ Yes, I definitely bought shoes online because I was influenced by TikTok and Instagram; I like the colors and designs, so I often buy them.

Incorrect use of past perfect 'had bought' where simple past 'bought' fits. 'From online' should be 'online'. 'Through the Tiktok I get influenced' should be past 'I was influenced' for a completed action or present 'I get influenced' for habitual—choose one; here past fits. 'The shoes of the collar' is unclear; intended 'colors'. 'Oftenly' is not a word; use 'often'. Also 'buy suits' seems incorrect contextually; use 'buy them' (shoes).

× So basically I just love to buy shoes in after only three month and I just love to have spend like one in one suit.

✓ Basically I like to buy new shoes every three months and I usually spend about one suit's worth or around 6,000.

Phrase 'in after only three month' is incorrect; use 'every three months'. 'Have spend' should be 'spend' or 'have spent'. 'One in one suit' is unclear—interpreted as 'one suit's worth' but better to state amount. Ensure plural 'months' and correct verb form.

× I'll be spend like 6K and and it's very comfortable and very like colourful suits ever I have buy.

✓ I spend about 6,000 and they are very comfortable and colorful; they are some of the most colorful shoes I have bought.

'I'll be spend' is incorrect; use 'I spend' or 'I will spend'. '6K' should be written '6,000' in formal text. 'And and' duplicated. 'Very like colourful suits ever I have buy' is ungrammatical: use 'some of the most colorful shoes I have bought.' Use past participle 'bought'.

× I prefer both shoes, so if I'm going on a party event or like very big event, I definitely prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ I prefer both types of shoes, so if I'm going to a party or a big event, I definitely prefer fashionable shoes.

'Both shoes' should be 'both types of shoes'. 'Going on a party event' is incorrect preposition; use 'going to a party' or 'attending an event'. Remove filler 'like'.

× But if I'm going, you know, like school, colleges or we would go out with my friends, I definitely prefer comfortable shoes for my comfort.

✓ But if I'm going to school, college, or going out with my friends, I definitely prefer comfortable shoes for comfort.

Use 'going to school' and 'college' (singular commonly) or 'colleges' if plural general. 'We would go out' is incorrect in this conditional; use 'going out' to match structure. 'For my comfort' can be simplified to 'for comfort'.