Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法と語順のミス、語彙の選択ミス、そして冗長な表現が見られます。改善ポイントは次の通りです：1) 主語と動詞の一致、時制や前置詞を正す（例："when it comes to"）。2) 不要な重複を避け、短く明確なトピックセンテンスを使う。3) 具体性を持たせる（頻度や好みの理由など）。4) 文章は3〜4文にまとめる。練習の際は各文で1つのアイデアを表現し、接続語（"also", "for example", "in summer"）を適切に使って接続すること。

Ví dụ: I enjoy buying shoes and I usually shop for them a few times a year. For example, in summer I prefer sandals because they are lightweight, while in winter I buy boots to keep my feet warm and dry.

Gợi ý: 答えは直接ですが、語法と語彙の誤り、説明の繰り返しが目立ちます。改善ポイントは：1) 自然な否定表現（"No, I haven't" の後に簡潔な理由）。2) "online" の使い方や動詞句（"buy online"）を正す。3) 理由を簡潔に具体的に述べる（例：サイズや試着の問題）。4) 余分なフィラー（"UMM"）を避けて明瞭に話す。

Ví dụ: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. If I buy online I worry about the size and how they will fit, so I usually shop in physical stores.

Gợi ý: 伝えたい内容は明確ですが、時制の一致と語順、冗長表現の修正が必要です。改善ポイント：1) 過去と現在の時制を整える（"I want" vs "I wanted"）。2) 例を具体的にし、短く一貫した文で述べる。3) 結論は簡潔にまとめる。4) 価格の理由を補強する詳細（ブランド、材質、頻度など）を入れると説得力が増す。

Ví dụ: I usually spend about $100 on a pair of shoes because I want them to be comfortable and durable. For example, I bought a pair last year and I still wear them regularly because they feel comfortable and have held up well.

Gợi ý: 意図は明確ですが、表現の繰り返しと冗長さが目立ちます。改善ポイント：1) トピックセンテンスで好みを直接述べる。2) 理由を2つまでに絞り、具体例（職場での長時間歩行、運動時のサポート）を添える。3) 同じ表現を繰り返さない。4) 文は3文以内にまとめる。

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for work and exercise. Comfortable shoes help me stay focused during long shifts and provide better support when I run or go to the gym.

× Well I like buying shoes but I enjoy finding styles that much as my outfit.

✓ Well, I like buying shoes, but I don't enjoy finding styles as much as I do finding outfits.

The original sentence uses 'that much as' incorrectly for comparison. Use 'as much as' to compare two activities and include the verb for clarity: 'enjoy finding styles as much as I do finding outfits.' Also add commas for clarity.

× For example, when it come to summer season I like buy sandal.

✓ For example, when it comes to the summer season, I like to buy sandals.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'come' should be 'comes' for third person singular. Also use the infinitive 'to buy' and plural 'sandals'. Add 'the' before 'summer season' and commas for clarity.

× In the winter season I would like to buy some boots.

✓ In the winter season, I like to buy boots.

'Would like' suggests a polite desire rather than a habitual preference. The question asks about a general preference, so use present habitual 'like to buy'. Also 'some' is unnecessary with plural 'boots' in this context.

× No I haven't, I never bought shoes on the line service because if I buy online service I can't see their shoes and also I can't fit my foot so I prefer to buy UMM.

✓ No, I haven't. I have never bought shoes online because when I buy online I can't see them and I can't try them on, so I prefer to buy in person.

Mixing present perfect and simple past is incorrect: use present perfect 'have never bought' to match 'I haven't'. 'On the line service' is incorrect phrasing—use 'online'. 'If' should be 'when' for general statements. Use 'try them on' not 'fit my foot', and 'buy in person' is clearer than 'buy UMM'.

× Well, I usually spend about $100 on shoes because I wanted them to be comfortable and last a long time.

✓ Well, I usually spend about $100 on shoes because I want them to be comfortable and to last a long time.

Tense inconsistency: 'usually' requires present tense 'want' not past 'wanted'. Keep parallel infinitives 'to be comfortable and to last'.

× For example, I bought new one about last year and now I still keep wearing.

✓ For example, I bought a new pair last year and I am still wearing them now.

'New one' is unnatural for shoes; use 'a new pair'. 'About last year' should be 'last year'. Use present continuous 'I am still wearing them' to show ongoing action and 'them' for plural shoes.

× It's really comfortable and I can keep.

✓ They're really comfortable and I keep wearing them.

'It' is singular but refers to shoes (plural); use 'they' or 'they're'. 'I can keep' is incomplete—use 'I keep wearing them' to express continued use.

× I definitely prefer to buy comfortable shoes because I wear shoes to go to work and also some exercise as well.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them to go to work and to exercise.

Redundant conjunctions: 'and also' and 'as well' are repetitive. Use 'and to exercise' or 'and for exercise'. Also 'prefer to buy comfortable shoes' can be simplified to 'prefer comfortable shoes' and use 'them' to refer to shoes.

× If I wear the comfortable shoes, I can focus on work and also as I said, the exercise as well.

✓ If I wear comfortable shoes, I can focus on work and on exercise, as I said.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'comfortable shoes'. Remove redundant 'also' and 'as well'. Parallel structure: 'focus on work and on exercise' or 'focus on work and exercise'.