Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Thí sinh
No I don't like buying shoes. Firstly I think I will spend a lot of money buying shoes and don't wear comfortable so I I don't always buy shoes. I buy shoes about once a year.
Giám khảo
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Thí sinh
Yes, I have and I think shoes are like are very cheap and I can buy them with lower price. Moreover, buying shoes online can help me acquire such information about shoes.
Giám khảo
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Thí sinh
I usually spend about CN¥100 on shoes. I usually buy shoes for sports such as football, basketball. So I usually spend the the money on the sports.
Giám khảo
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Thí sinh
I prefer comfortable shoes. Firstly, comfortable shoes are more affordable, which I can buy them frequently. Moreover, a fashionable shoes are only beautiful. I don't like UH since I live with their appearance.
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答要更自然、简洁,并包含清晰的主题句和连接词。避免重复和语法错误,具体说明原因并提供简短例子或细节(如什么时候买、在哪儿买)。句子控制在最多5句内。注意冠词和时态,如“I don't like buying shoes”后面可接原因,“they are uncomfortable”而非“don't wear comfortable”。
Ví dụ: I don't really enjoy buying shoes because they tend to be expensive and often uncomfortable. Therefore, I only shop for shoes about once a year, usually when my old pair wears out. I prefer to buy practical, durable footwear rather than trendy ones.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答需更流畅并用连接词组织理由。避免口头语和重复(如“are like are”),并具体说明在哪些网站或用什么信息帮助决策(例如尺寸表、评论)。控制在5句内,注意词汇准确性,例如 use “cheaper”而不是 “lower price”。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have. I often find shoes cheaper online because of discounts and a wider selection. Also, online shops provide detailed size charts and customer reviews, which help me choose the right pair.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 需避免重复并用更自然的表达说明用途和频率。提供更具体的细节,比如买哪种运动鞋、是否看品牌或质量。合并重复的句子,用连接词使逻辑连贯,修正小错误(如多余的“the”)。
Ví dụ: I usually spend about CN¥100 on shoes, mainly on sports shoes for football or basketball. I focus on durability and comfort rather than famous brands, since I use them frequently for training.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答需更自然并避免语法错误和口头停顿(如 “UH”)。给出两到三个具体理由并用连接词组织,例如谈到舒适度、用途、频率。注意冠词和单复数(a fashionable shoes → fashionable shoes 或 a fashionable shoe)。保持简洁有力。
Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and value support and cushioning. They are also more practical and often less expensive, so I can replace them more often when needed.
× No I don't like buying shoes.
✓ No, I don't like buying shoes.
句子缺少逗号来表示停顿,属于标点引起的句子结构问题。建议在“No”和之后加逗号或短暂停顿,使口语更自然。
× Firstly I think I will spend a lot of money buying shoes and don't wear comfortable so I I don't always buy shoes.
✓ Firstly, I think I would spend a lot of money buying shoes and they wouldn't be comfortable, so I don't often buy shoes.
学生原句混合了时态和结构错误。这里谈一般习惯或假设用would更合适;“don't wear comfortable”语法错误,应改为“they wouldn't be comfortable”或“they aren't comfortable”。此外有重复“I I”。建议理清时态,使用条件或假设语气(would),并用完整主语代替省略形式。
× I buy shoes about once a year.
✓ I buy shoes about once a year.
句子本身语法正确,无需修改。保持现在时表示习惯动作。
× Yes, I have and I think shoes are like are very cheap and I can buy them with lower price.
✓ Yes, I have, and I think shoes are quite cheap so I can buy them at a lower price.
原句中“are like are”重复且用词不当;“with lower price”不自然,应为“at a lower price”。保持现在时描述一般看法,连接词用so更流畅。
× Moreover, buying shoes online can help me acquire such information about shoes.
✓ Moreover, buying shoes online can help me get more information about them.
“acquire such information about shoes”较书面且重复“shoes”;用“get more information about them”更自然简洁。句子结构上需避免冗余。
× I usually spend about CN¥100 on shoes.
✓ I usually spend about CN¥100 on shoes.
句子语法正确,使用现在时描述习惯支出,保持不变。
× I usually buy shoes for sports such as football, basketball.
✓ I usually buy shoes for sports such as football and basketball.
列举项目间缺少连接词“and”。建议在最后两项之间加“and”使结构完整。
× So I usually spend the the money on the sports.
✓ So I usually spend the money on sports.
存在重复“the the”,并且“on the sports”中的定冠词不必要,应为“on sports”。建议删除重复词并去掉多余定冠词。
× I prefer comfortable shoes.
✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.
句子正确,形容词用法恰当,无需修改。
× Firstly, comfortable shoes are more affordable, which I can buy them frequently.
✓ Firstly, comfortable shoes are more affordable, so I can buy them more frequently.
原句中使用“which”引导的非限制性定语从句与主句逻辑衔接不当,并且出现了冗余宾语“them”。应使用连词“so”表原因结果,并去掉多余代词。
× Moreover, a fashionable shoes are only beautiful.
✓ Moreover, fashionable shoes are only beautiful.
“a fashionable shoes”中冠词与复数名词不一致,应删除冠词或改为单数形式(a fashionable shoe)。这里改为复数时去掉冠词。
× I don't like UH since I live with their appearance.
✓ I don't like them because I care only about their appearance.
原句“since I live with their appearance”用词错误,“live with”不符合语境;且“UH”是语气词应去掉。应使用“I care only about their appearance”或“I only like them for their appearance”来表达“只在乎外表”。建议使用合适的动词如“care about/like for”并去除填充词。