Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct repetition/grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief detail. Avoid repeating words (e.g., "at at") and reduce redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new pairs every six months because I’m on my feet all day at work, so I need durable, supportive footwear that prevents discomfort.

Gợi ý: Make the answer fluent and remove fillers. Give a clear statement then one short detail about the experience (where, brand, fit, or delivery). Correct unclear phrases like "I love that you double."

Ví dụ: Yes, I bought a pair of Puma shoes online last year. The website was easy to use and the shoes fit well, so I found the experience convenient.

Gợi ý: Use clear grammar and specific currency or units. Start directly with the cost range, then explain briefly what affects the amount. Avoid vague phrases like "my relaxation for my body."

Ví dụ: I usually spend about 1000 to 1500 [currency] per year on shoes. The exact amount depends on the quality I choose and whether I need extra cushioning for comfort.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words to contrast choices (e.g., "however", "when"). Be concise and give one specific example for each preference.

Ví dụ: I prefer both, depending on the situation. For social outings I choose fashionable shoes to look stylish; however, for work I always pick comfortable, supportive shoes so I don’t get foot pain.

× Yes, I do like buying shoes most of the time.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes most of the time.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for a simple present affirmative sentence; use the simple present 'I like' to state routines. Remove 'do' for natural phrasing.

× I love to buy shoes every six months for my work because at at my work I'm always on my feet.

✓ I buy shoes every six months for work because at work I'm always on my feet.

Use simple present 'I buy' to describe a habitual action. Remove the redundant 'at' and 'to' after 'love' when describing a habit; 'for work' is more natural than 'for my work.'

× So for my feet preferences, I love to buy shoes.

✓ So for comfort, I prefer to buy shoes that suit my feet.

The original phrase 'for my feet preferences' is awkward and unclear. Reword to state preference and purpose: 'prefer to buy shoes that suit my feet' clarifies meaning and corrects structure.

× Yes, I remember that last year I remem, uh, I bought shoes from online from a brand name Puma.

✓ Yes, I remember that last year I bought shoes online from the brand Puma.

Use simple past 'bought' for a completed action last year. Remove filler and correct word order: 'bought shoes online from the brand Puma' is concise and grammatical. Also use 'online' without 'from' preceding it.

× I love that you double.

✓ (Remove sentence)

The sentence 'I love that you double' is unclear and likely unintended filler; it should be removed. If the student meant to express liking the purchase, a clear sentence would be 'I liked them a lot.'

× It's depend on the shoes quality and my relaxation for my body and my feet as well.

✓ It depends on the quality of the shoes and how comfortable they make my feet and body.

Use third-person singular 'depends' to agree with 'it.' Also reorder to 'quality of the shoes' and replace 'relaxation for my body and my feet' with 'how comfortable they make my feet and body' for natural English.

× So maybe the range between 1000 to 1500 for my shoes yearly.

✓ So maybe the range is 1000 to 1500 per year for my shoes.

Use 'range is X to Y' and 'per year' to indicate frequency. 'Between' with 'to' is redundant; say '1000 to 1500' or 'between 1000 and 1500.' Also place the time expression 'per year' at the end.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

This question sentence is correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I prefer both.

✓ I prefer both.

Sentence is correct in present tense to express a general preference; no change needed.

× Whenever I'm going outside with my friends, I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ When I go out with my friends, I prefer fashionable shoes.

Use simple present 'I go out' to describe habitual actions; 'whenever I'm going outside' is awkward for routines. 'When I go out' is clearer and more natural.

× Whenever I am going to work, I love to do.

✓ When I go to work, I prefer comfortable shoes.

Original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use simple present 'When I go to work' for habitual actions and state preference explicitly: 'I prefer comfortable shoes.'

× I love to wear comfortable shoes so that I can be relaxed and comfortable during my work without any pain.

✓ I like to wear comfortable shoes so I can be relaxed and avoid pain at work.

Use 'like to wear' or 'prefer to wear' for habitual preferences. 'During my work' is better as 'at work.' Simplify wording to avoid repetition of 'comfortable' and make the purpose clause concise.