Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Not very often. I prefer buying things spend tenuously. And this will make me feel relaxed and enjoyable when I was walking. When I'm walking in the shop in choose directly what I really want.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
Actually I really hate making a list for my work. I've tried it for a few times but it didn't work at all. I'm a person that is. Not very disciplined and casual. I don't like making list because it makes me feel like I'm in control and I want to do things that I like spare spontaneously.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
Because actually it's very hard for people to follow the rules they make for themselves. Actually some lists they make for themselves there are not very realistic and is hard to achieve. So people. Some people, they really like just doing things that they think at the moment.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
I prefer making on the phone for I carried the phone all the time with me in Akin. Check my schedules and plans anywhere at anytime. Also is very tiring to write by hand on paper. And I find it very inconvenient, so I prefer making it on my phone.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 你的回答中有语法错误和用词不当,如“spend tenuously”应为“spontaneously”。建议你使用更自然的表达,并注意时态一致性。此外,回答应更简洁,避免冗余。
Ví dụ: I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to buy things spontaneously. This way, I feel more relaxed and enjoy choosing what I really want while walking around the store.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法和表达不流畅的问题,如“I'm a person that is. Not very disciplined and casual”不完整。建议你用连贯的句子表达观点,并用连接词使回答更连贯。
Ví dụ: I don't usually make lists for my work because I find them ineffective. I'm quite casual and spontaneous, so strict lists make me feel controlled, which I don't like.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和语法错误,如“there are not very realistic and is hard to achieve”。建议你用更准确的语法和连贯的句子表达原因。
Ví dụ: Some people dislike making lists because it's hard to follow the rules they set. Often, their lists are unrealistic, so they prefer to do things spontaneously based on their current thoughts.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整,如“for I carried the phone all the time with me in Akin”。建议你使用完整句子并注意时态和连贯性。
Ví dụ: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me. This way, I can check my schedules anytime and anywhere. Writing by hand on paper feels tiring and inconvenient for me.
× I prefer buying things spend tenuously.
✓ I prefer buying things and spending cautiously.
The original sentence incorrectly uses 'spend tenuously' which is not a proper verb phrase. The verb 'spend' should be in the '-ing' form 'spending' to follow 'prefer buying things and spending cautiously'. Also, 'tenuously' is not appropriate here; 'cautiously' fits better to express careful spending.
× And this will make me feel relaxed and enjoyable when I was walking.
✓ And this makes me feel relaxed and enjoy myself when I am walking.
The sentence mixes future tense 'will make' with past tense 'was walking'. To express a habitual action, present tense should be used consistently: 'makes' and 'am walking'. Also, 'enjoyable' is an adjective; the correct verb form is 'enjoy myself'.
× When I'm walking in the shop in choose directly what I really want.
✓ When I'm walking in the shop, I choose directly what I really want.
The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before 'choose' and has an extra 'in'. Adding a comma after 'shop' improves clarity.
× Actually I really hate making a list for my work.
✓ Actually, I really hate making lists for my work.
The phrase 'making a list' is acceptable, but 'making lists' is more natural when referring to the general activity. Also, a comma after 'Actually' improves readability.
× I've tried it for a few times but it didn't work at all.
✓ I've tried it a few times, but it didn't work at all.
The phrase 'for a few times' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a few times'. Adding a comma before 'but' improves sentence structure.
× I'm a person that is. Not very disciplined and casual.
✓ I'm a person who is not very disciplined and is casual.
The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. Combining into one sentence with proper relative pronoun 'who' and verb 'is' improves clarity.
× I don't like making list because it makes me feel like I'm in control and I want to do things that I like spare spontaneously.
✓ I don't like making lists because it makes me feel like I'm in control, and I want to do things that I like spontaneously and freely.
The sentence has missing plural 'lists' and awkward phrase 'spare spontaneously'. Adding a comma before 'and' and rephrasing to 'spontaneously and freely' clarifies meaning.
× Because actually it's very hard for people to follow the rules they make for themselves.
✓ Because actually, it's very hard for people to follow the rules they make for themselves.
Adding a comma after 'Because actually' improves sentence flow; pronoun usage is correct.
× Actually some lists they make for themselves there are not very realistic and is hard to achieve.
✓ Actually, some lists they make for themselves are not very realistic and are hard to achieve.
Subject-verb agreement error: 'lists' is plural, so verbs should be 'are' not 'is'. Adding commas improves readability.
× So people. Some people, they really like just doing things that they think at the moment.
✓ So, some people really like just doing things that they think of at the moment.
The original sentence is fragmented and redundant. Combining into one sentence and adding 'of' after 'think' corrects the structure.
× I prefer making on the phone for I carried the phone all the time with me in Akin.
✓ I prefer making lists on the phone because I carry the phone with me all the time.
The phrase 'for I carried' is incorrect; 'because I carry' is correct. 'In Akin' is unclear and likely a mistake, so it is omitted. Preposition 'on the phone' is correct for making lists.
× Check my schedules and plans anywhere at anytime.
✓ I can check my schedules and plans anywhere at any time.
The original sentence lacks a subject and auxiliary verb. Adding 'I can' makes it a complete sentence. 'Anytime' is better written as two words 'any time' in formal writing.
× Also is very tiring to write by hand on paper.
✓ Also, it is very tiring to write by hand on paper.
The sentence is missing the subject 'it'. Adding 'it is' corrects the sentence structure.
× And I find it very inconvenient, so I prefer making it on my phone.
✓ I find it very inconvenient, so I prefer making lists on my phone.
Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; removing it improves formality. Clarifying 'making it' to 'making lists' improves clarity.