Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 어휘 선택, 문장 구조를 정리하고 응답을 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어 시제와 동사 형태 오류(예: discovered, enjoys), 관사와 전치사 사용, 불필요한 중복을 고치면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 토픽 문장(Yes/No 직답) 후 연결어(for example → and/or also)를 적절히 사용하여 구체적 이유를 하나나 두 개로 제한하세요.

Ví dụ: No, I don't really like singing. I'm not very talented, so I prefer listening to music rather than singing myself. For example, I enjoy discovering new K-pop songs and sometimes I go to live concerts to experience the performances.

Gợi ý: 문법(learnt → learned 또는 learnt), 어순, 단어 선택과 표현의 명확성을 개선하세요. 'elementary school student'는 불필요하게 중복되고, 'sound my voice'나 'high pictures' 같은 표현은 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 실패 이유는 구체적이고 이해하기 쉬운 표현으로 바꾸세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school I was in the choir. The teacher taught me how to sing more clearly and control my voice, but I couldn't improve my high notes, so I stopped pursuing singing.

Gợi ý: 대답의 구조는 괜찮지만 'I don't think regularly' 같은 표현은 어색합니다. 먼저 직접적인 답변을 주고(reason) 구체적인 상황(어떤 노래, 언제)을 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다. 감정 표현을 구체적으로 묘사하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

Ví dụ: I don't sing often, but if I had to choose someone, it would be my mother. She would understand my poor singing, and I would sing an emotional ballad for her on her birthday to show my love and gratitude.

Gợi ý: 문법(단수/복수, 어형 변화)과 어휘 선택을 고치세요(song → songs, move people's emotions), 그리고 예시 문장은 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 표현하세요. 'live people's spirits'는 부적절한 표현이므로 'lift people's spirits'로 수정하세요. 감정 변화에 대한 구체적 사례를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

Ví dụ: Definitely. I believe songs can move people's emotions and lift their spirits. For example, when I hear a child's clear voice or a sentimental melody with meaningful lyrics, I instantly feel happier and more energetic.

Gợi ý: 표현을 더 자연스럽게 다듬고 문장 연결을 명확히 하세요('recharge my inner batteries'는 비격식 표현으로 괜찮지만 문맥에 맞게 조정). 단수·복수 일치와 동사 형태를 확인하고, 연결어(also, while)를 사용해 대비를 분명히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love listening to music, especially hip hop, because it recharges me and makes me feel energetic. I also enjoy sentimental ballads, which calm me down and help me relax.

Gợi ý: 문장 흐름은 좋지만 어순과 복수/단수 형태('trainings' → 'training')를 고치세요. 'given the chance' 대신 'if given the chance' 등 자연스러운 접속구를 쓰고, 구체적인 기대 효과(무엇을 배우고 싶은지)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: No, I haven't. I'm not very confident in my singing, but if given the chance I would like to take lessons because professional training could improve my technique and boost my confidence.

× I'm not that talented in singing so I prefer to listen to music rather than sing by myself.

✓ I'm not that talented at singing, so I prefer to listen to music rather than sing by myself.

'talented in' is nonstandard; use 'talented at' for skills. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses correctly.

× For example, I enjoy discovered new songs like trendy idol music and also enjoys to go live concert.

✓ For example, I enjoy discovering new songs like trendy idol music and also enjoy going to live concerts.

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form: 'discovering'. Subject is 'I' so use 'enjoy' not 'enjoys'. Use 'going to live concerts' with preposition 'to' and plural 'concerts' for generalization.

× When I was in elementary school student I was a member of the choir.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, I was a member of the choir.

The phrase needs article 'an' before 'elementary school student' and a comma after the introductory clause for correct sentence structure.

× The teacher taught me how to sound my voice clearly and beautifully, but I didn't make it because I can't sound high pictures of my voice.

✓ The teacher taught me how to make my voice sound clear and beautiful, but I couldn't do it because I can't reach the high notes of my voice.

Use 'make my voice sound' for correct word order. 'didn't make it' is awkward—use 'couldn't do it'. 'can't sound high pictures of my voice' is ungrammatical; likely 'can't reach the high notes' is appropriate.

× I don't think regularly, but if I have to choose one, that would be my mom because she will understand my poor singing skills and I want to show my love and gratitude for her by singing an emotional song.

✓ I don't sing regularly, but if I had to choose one person, it would be my mom because she would understand my poor singing skills and I want to show my love and gratitude to her by singing an emotional song.

'I don't think regularly' is incorrect; likely 'I don't sing regularly'. Use conditional 'if I had to choose' and 'would' for hypothetical. Use 'show ... to her' or 'show her my ...' for correct verb-object order.

× Definitely, I believe song have the power to move people's emotion and live people's spirits.

✓ Definitely, I believe songs have the power to move people's emotions and lift people's spirits.

Use plural 'songs' to agree with 'have'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'live people's spirits' is incorrect; use 'lift people's spirits'.

× For instance, when I hear a clear voice of children or sentimental melodies or lyrics, I feel lively and feel of joy.

✓ For instance, when I hear the clear voices of children or sentimental melodies and lyrics, I feel lively and joyful.

Use plural 'voices' and article 'the' or remove for generalization. Combine melodies and lyrics with 'and'. 'feel of joy' is wrong; use 'joyful' or 'feel joy'.

× Yes, I'm a big fan of listening to music, especially hip hop because it helps me to recharge my inner batteries and feel energetic.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of music, especially hip hop, because it helps me recharge my inner batteries and feel energetic.

'a big fan of listening to music' is wordy; 'fan of music' is natural. 'helps me to recharge' can be 'helps me recharge'—both acceptable. Add commas for clarity.

× Also I enjoy sentimental ballads because it makes me calm and relaxed.

✓ Also, I enjoy sentimental ballads because they make me calm and relaxed.

Subject 'ballads' is plural, so verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Add comma after 'Also'.

× No, I haven't. I'm not very confident about singing, so given the chance I want to try it because professional trainings help me to improve my performance and also boost my confidence.

✓ No, I haven't. I'm not very confident about singing, so if given the chance I would like to try it because professional training would help me improve my performance and boost my confidence.

Use conditional 'if given the chance' and 'would like' for polite hypothetical. 'Professional trainings' is uncountable: use 'professional training'. Use 'would help' for hypothetical result and omit 'to' after 'help' before verb.