Memory— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は直接的で内容もある程度具体的ですが、以下を改善してください：1) 冒頭で明確なトピック文を使い、自分の立場をはっきり述べる（例: “I’m not particularly good at memorising things.”）。2) 話の流れを滑らかにするためにフィラー（uh, um）を避け、代わりに接続詞（however, but）を使う。3) 具体例の年や出来事の言い方を自然にする（“22 years ago”は文脈で不自然なので“about 22 years ago”や“in 200x”など）。4) 文の長さは3文以内にまとめ、簡潔に。

Ví dụ: I’m not particularly good at memorising things, but I tend to remember events that made a strong impression. For example, I can still recall a memorable Japan national team football match from about 22 years ago because it had a dramatic finish and I watched it with my family.

Gợi ý: 内容は具体的で感情も表現できていますが、改善点は：1) 文法的な誤りを直す（“the to leave”や時制の不一致）。2) フィラーを減らし、代わりに接続語で流れを整える（for example, because）。3) 回答を短くして要点を明確にする（トピック文＋1つの具体的詳細＋感情）。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. For example, recently I forgot to lock the main door of my office when I left, because I was distracted by a call. I realised I was the last person to leave that day, so I felt very upset and worried about security.

Gợi ý: 構成は良いですが、表現を自然にし、語彙を改善してください：1) 「private affairs」は不自然なので“personal matters”や“family matters”を使う。2) アポイントメントの表現を明確に（“appointments and meetings”）。3) 具体例を一つ加えると説得力が増す（例: deadlines, school events）。

Ví dụ: I need to remember many things, both at work and at home. At work I have to keep track of appointments and meetings, and at home I need to remember my children’s school events and homework deadlines.

Gợi ý: 回答は明確で方法も述べられていますが、改善点：1) トピック文をもっと直接的にし、理由と方法を簡潔に結ぶ（例: “I usually write things down because…”）。2) 追加の具体的手段を一つ加えると説得力が上がる（例: phone reminders, alarms, or to-do apps）。3) 接続語を使い流れを良くする（therefore, so）。

Ví dụ: I usually write important events down in my schedule because it’s easy to forget otherwise. For example, I use a calendar app and set phone reminders so I don’t miss meetings or my children’s school events.

× I don't think so, but uh, probably same to other people.

✓ I don't think so, but I'm probably the same as other people.

The original uses incorrect pronoun and preposition combination 'same to other people'. Use 'the same as' to compare oneself with others and include the subject 'I'm' for a complete clause. Suggestion: use 'I'm probably the same as other people.'

× I memorize well impressive things and events.

✓ I remember impressive things and events well.

'Memorize well impressive things' has incorrect word order and awkward adverb placement. Use 'remember' (more natural) and place the adverb 'well' after the object: 'remember ... well.' Alternatively 'I can memorize impressive things and events well.'

× For example, I still remember well the football match of Japan national team in 22 years ago.

✓ For example, I still clearly remember the Japan national team's football match from 22 years ago.

The phrase 'in 22 years ago' is ungrammatical. Use 'from 22 years ago' or '22 years ago' without 'in'. Also use possessive form 'Japan national team's' and place adverb 'clearly' before 'remember' or after 'still'.

× Yes, many times recently I forgot to, uh, lock the main door of my office when I left it.

✓ Yes, recently I have forgotten many times to lock the main door of my office when I left.

The adverb 'recently' pairs with present perfect in English for repeated past actions: 'have forgotten'. Word order 'many times recently I forgot' is awkward; use 'recently I have forgotten many times'. Also 'left it' is redundant; 'when I left' suffices.

× Actually, I was the last person to the to leave the office in that day after I came back to home and, uh, I was very upset about that.

✓ Actually, I was the last person to leave the office that day after I came back home, and I was very upset about it.

There are several issues: duplicate 'to the to', wrong article 'in that day' should be 'that day', and 'came back to home' should be 'came back home'. Use 'upset about it' rather than 'about that'. Clean up word order and remove duplicates.

× I have a lot of things to remember, both in my work and the private affairs.

✓ I have a lot of things to remember, both at work and in my private affairs.

Use 'at work' (common collocation) instead of 'in my work'. 'the private affairs' should be 'my private affairs' or just 'private matters'. Ensure parallel structure: 'both at work and in my private affairs.'

× In my work I need to remember appointments we will meet, and in my privates I need to remember educational affairs of my kids.

✓ At work I need to remember appointments, and in my private life I need to remember my kids' educational matters.

'In my work' -> 'At work'. 'appointments we will meet' is incorrect; simply 'appointments'. 'my privates' is ungrammatical; use 'my private life'. 'educational affairs of my kids' -> 'my kids' educational matters'. Use possessive 'kids'' and clearer collocations.

× It is always difficult to make sure not to forget important things.

✓ It's always difficult to make sure I don't forget important things.

The original 'make sure not to forget' is understandable but less natural. Use a subject and auxiliary for clarity: 'make sure I don't forget'. This keeps present tense and natural word order.

× That's why when I have important events, I always try to write down the events on my schedule.

✓ That's why when I have important events, I always try to write them down in my schedule.

Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Use preposition 'in' with 'schedule' (or 'on my calendar'). 'Write down' is correct as a phrasal verb; place object after it: 'write them down in my schedule.'